Talk:Marianne Means/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:38, 2 March 2021 (UTC)

Shall review this for the GAN March 2021 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:38, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "was an American, Washington-based, syndicated political columnist who, for many years," - was an American journalist and syndicated political columnist based in Washington, D.C.
 * ✅--Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:26, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "She started her career as a reporter and advanced to a copy editor." - advanced to the role of a
 * ✅--Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:26, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "She then supervised a staff for a couple of years " - think there are some missing words in this portion of text
 * ✅ Copy edited accordingly. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * John Kennedy is missing the "F." in the middle of his name
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Then she covered the White House reporting full-time and was the first female reporter that did this." - reported full-time at the White House and was the first female reporter to do this.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk)


 * Wikilink Kennedy's assassination to the relevant article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and the transition to the next administration." - administration of Lyndon B. Johnson.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The New York Times should be italicized since it is a print publication
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "she reported on all the presidential campaigns from Kennedy" - every presidental campaign
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2021 (UTC)

Early life and education

 * "She was valedictorian from her 1952 high school and work as a secretary for the superintendent of the local schools. She died at 92 in 1996." this bit is rather confusing and could benefit from some rewording ... such as specifying that "Means was valedictorian of" so that one doesn't misunderstand. When I read it, because of the death date, I thought her mother was still the subject. Unless there's a typo (graduation date should be 1925) and it really is about her mother? Nonetheless, changing "from" to "of" would still be necessary, as would changing "work" to "worked", and specifying that the person who died in 1996 was her mother. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cmissy (talk • contribs) 15:50, 13 June 2023 (UTC)


 * "She was the daughter of Ernest Maynard Hansen and Else Marie Johanne (Andersen) Hansen." - any more details on her parents?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:37, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Means graduated from the Nebraska University," - the word indicated in bold is not needed
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:37, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Bachelor of Arts degree
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:37, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "in Washington D.C." - a comma is missing between "Washington" and "D.C."
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:37, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Career

 * "Means, in 1959, moved to Hearst Newspapers[4]" - MEans moved to Hearst Newspapers in 1959,
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and John F. Kennedy's presidential campaign ." - the extra space between "campaign" and the period is not needed
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Her journalism career was boosted when she escorted Kennedy" - the text in bold should be reworded so that it is more formal
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "She was the first feale reporter" - typo; should be female
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "to be appointed full-time coverage of all the White House activity." - to be assigned to cover all of the White House's activities full time.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:58, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "She has also been a commentator" - the text here should be changed to the past sense since Means died in 2017
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:58, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "for CBS radio" - radio should be captalised and CBS Radio would be better off wikilinked
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:58, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and Tonight Show," - should be The Tonight Show
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:58, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Societies

 * "Means was associated with the National Press Foundation, International Women's Media Foundation, White House Correspondents' Association, National Press Club, Cosmos Club, Gridiron Club (president), Delta Delta Delta, Sigma Delta Chi, and Phi Beta Kappa" - more uses of the word "the" where appropriate should be used in this portion of text
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Private life

 * "She was briefly married to government affairs consultant Edward H. DeHart in the early 1970s." - this sentence will require a reliable source
 * Who was James J. Kilpatrick?
 * There is no mention of Means' death in the prose and this fact will need to be included