Talk:Marina Tsurtsumiya

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Some revision necessary. “At 19, she was the youngest in her class and later said in an interview, "they treated me like a child.”” - Expand on this if you can for further clarity. perestroika period - create a hyperlink to Wiki page for perestroika. “One reviewer wrote, “…It’s similar…” - Consider rephrasing in order to name the reviewer. Your article is well written and in keeping with Wikipedia expectations of style. I have made a few suggestions above for clarifying certain sentences and adding in links to certain related pages. Take some time to carefully reread and edit your article before posting, ensuring that everything is as clear and concise as possible. Good work!

Batcow39 (talk) 16:41, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer review Tone is on point and you seem to have found really good, reliable sources. I think adding to your intro, perhaps something about the genre of Tsurtsumiya's work, would make it an even more effective article. One critique that I have is how you introduce what she's said in interviews. I think it would sound better if you specify where those interviews come from, like this: "in a (year) interview with (source), Tsurtsumiya lamented ______". Very interesting article, nice work!Tightbowtie (talk) 01:25, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Blu3v3lv3t. Peer reviewers: Tightbowtie, ItsAka.

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