Talk:Mark Prior/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 19:36, 1 September 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall: Pass
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall: Pass
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall: Pass
 * Pass/Fail:

Review

 * I've emailed a few users on Flickr asking them to release photos of Prior. I have gotten one reply so far about the use of this photo, will keep you updated. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 17:07, 4 September 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * You mention the Dodgers twice in the lead

Amateur career

 * Birthday unsourced
 * Prior attended the University of San Diego High School is a really short sentence. Even adding "Growing up" would help

Professional career

 * teammate should be capitalized.
 * You use the "days later" in two sentences, maybe change the wording and expand on his hamstring (ie. include that he was 16-for-35 (.457) in his last nine games)
 * That was Pujols who was 16-for-35, not Prior. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:41, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Why is ref 18 needed for the last sentence?
 * Shows he was 7th in Rookie of the Year Award voting. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:43, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
 * I don't think the use of the word "nasty" is NPOV
 * Are four refs needed to prove Selected as National League All-Stars in 2003?
 * He finished 2006, how about He finished the 2006 season
 * I suggest merging the two sentences on the 2007 season with the one below it
 * Please spell out General manager instead of just using GM since this is the first time it is used
 * Reference 64 needs the author
 * Reference 67 has the wrong author
 * What does Used out of the bullpen for the team mean?
 * Means he was used as a relief pitcher. It's a common baseball term, and bullpen is linked, in case people don't know what it means. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:48, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Reference 73 needs an author
 * Reference 77 needs an author (Aaron Gleeman)
 * Instead of using ref 18 for free agency, you can use this one
 * Reference 78 is dead and not an WP:RS. You can just use ref 79 for both sentences
 * Reference 80 needs an author (Teddy Mitrosilis)
 * Reference 81 needs an author (Gary Schatz)
 * Reference 83 needs an author (Jeff Passan)
 * I suggest changing it to "Personal life" not just "personal"