Talk:Marss/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Namcokid47 (talk · contribs) 18:42, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

I've looked over this and your other articles relating to eSports players, and honestly I think I'm going to just fail these. I've been hesitant to do this for a while as I wanted to see if somebody else would take these, but it looks like that isn't the case. None of these articles I think are good enough to be GAs (some I don't think are even notable enough to have an article to begin with). They don't pass the GA criteria for a multitude of reasons - for Marss, in particular, here's why I've decided to fail it:

These articles need a lot of work if they want to be GAs. I would definitely have somebody go and copyedit all of these, and replace all the unreliable sources with ones that are usable. Namcokid 47  (Contribs) 18:42, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) Many of these sources are very dubious and I don't see them as being reliable. EventHubs is listed as unreliable on WP:VG/S, there's a lot of YouTube videos that don't seem usable, many of these are just tweets, and I don't know what mxdwn Games is.
 * 2) A lot of the writing is not good. There's too many "stray" sentences that need to be added into other paragraphs, mindless trivia (why does it need to be known that he wears pajamas during matches?), and choppy writing in several paragraphs.
 * 3) How come the lead is so short? There's quite a lot of info in the article yet the lead just one paragraph and a few additional sentences.