Talk:Marta Menegatti/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:33, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

Will spare the time tor review this article. MWright96 (talk) 20:33, 8 March 2019 (UTC)
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Lead

 * "who plays as a left-side defender with partner Viktoria Orsi Toth." - with her partner
 * "The pair broke into the top ten of the world rankings" - entered is more formal
 * "and medalled at seven World Tour events before an acrimonious split mid-2013." - split midway through 2013.

Early life

 * "the fifth tier of the Italian volleyball league system." - wikilink the text in bold to Italian Volleyball League
 * "sparking her foray into beach volleyball." - prompting is a better more formal alternative
 * "a national youth competition organized" - organised

2006-2008: Junior years

 * "where she and partner Debora Pini placed ninth at the $10K Eboli Satellite tournament." - and her partner

2009: Partnerin with Cicolari, World Tour debut

 * "She quit indoor volleyball so as to focus solely on the beach game." - "so as" is redundant
 * "They concluded their first year as teammates ranked No. 43" - use the abbr template on No. so that the reader hovering over it knows it means Number
 * "Later in the month, Menegatti and partner Debora Allegretti " - and her partner

2010: First World Tour podium

 * "Menegatti played with Valeria Rosso on the World Tour as Cicolari had sustained an injury." - what type of injury?
 * "Menegatti and Rosso became the first Italian pair to reach a finals on the World Tour" - World Tour final
 * "before falling to fourth-seeded Nicole Branagh and Kerri Walsh Jennings " - to the fourth-seeded
 * "Menegatti racked up two more podium finishes" - attained

2011: European champions

 * "With the home crowd on their side, they topped their group" - With a partisian crowd is probably better here
 * "over 16th-seeded Barbara Hansel and Sara Montagnolli of Austria" - over the 16th-seeded

2012: London Olympics

 * "So as to avoid worsening a shoulder injury," - In order

2013: Partnering with Orsi Toth

 * "They capped off a dominant tournament run" - finished
 * "After Gstaad, Carvalho decided to split the pair" - change the text in bold to separate for variety
 * "with fourth-place finishes at the $220K Moscow and São Paulo Grand Slams." - with two fourth-place
 * "With only five international events under their belt" - try to avoid idioms per MOS:IDIOM
 * "they wrapped up their first season together ranked No. 44 " - finished

2014–2015: First World Tour title

 * "Their results picked up in September" - got better

2016: Rio Olympics

 * "three-set losses against 16th-seeded Jamie Broder and Kristina May of Canada" - against the 16th-seeded
 * "and fourth-seeded Laura Ludwig and Kira Walkenhorst of Germany" - and the fourth-seeded

2017–2018: Partner switches, struggles

 * "resume her partnership with Orsi Toth once the latter's doping ban expired mid-season" - mid way through the season for non-sports readers
 * "Menegatti and Giombini started off 2018 competing at the $10K Shepparton Open." - commenced

2018–present: Comeback

 * "In the group stage, they upset second-seeded" - they upset the
 * "and 15th-seeded Nina Betschart and Tanja Huberli of Switzerland" - and the 15th-seeded

Style of play

 * "Menegatti is a defender and right-handed left-side player." - and a right-handed
 * "While she has worked on developing her leadership skills and enjoys taking on this role," - and says she enjoys

Personal life

 * "previous sponsors include Red Bull GmbH (energy drink)" - GmbH is redundant
 * "Ever since she was young, Menegatti has looked up to Misty May-Treanor" - Since she was young, Menegatti respected