Talk:Mary Docherty/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)


 * I'll review this one over the next several days. --Coemgenus (talk) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)

Checklist

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * This is mostly fine, an excellent article. A few points below:
 * Thank you.


 * "In 1937 she volunteered to fight in the Spanish Civil War with the International Brigade; however, she was turned down, because she did not have medical experience." Did she volunteer as a nurse? It's not clear how medical experience has to do with fighting.
 * True, but I'm afraid that's a limitation of the source, which says the same thing in slightly different words. It doesn't say what role she volunteered for.


 * In the paragraph that begins "She remained a member of the Communist Party for 70 years..." you have a lot of "she"s, which gets repetative. Maybe use her name a few more times.
 * Switched a couple of uses


 * "Her trip to the Soviet Union led to several prospective employers rejecting her after her return." This sentence repeats what was just said a sentence earlier, doesn't it?
 * You're right. Removed the duplication.


 * Are any images available? You might be able to use a fair use image if no free ones exist. --Coemgenus (talk) 15:22, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
 * I'll take a look...honestly, though, I don't remember seeing any when I wrote this.
 * I took a look, but I'm afraid I cannot find anything. There's photos of a few other Mary Dochertys out there, including that of a child criminal in the US...but none of her. Even the interview does not have a picture. And I think that's the lot. Vanamonde (talk) 17:20, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
 * That all looks good. too bad about the image, but it can't be helped sometimes. Nice work! --Coemgenus (talk) 18:13, 6 April 2017 (UTC)