Talk:Mary Jane Patterson

Wiki Education assignment: Global Interconnections
— Assignment last updated by SGB.His370 (talk) 03:35, 26 February 2024 (UTC)

Women in Green 20-minute assessment (mini-review)
Hello! As requested by on the June 2024 Women in Green editathon event page, here is a quick 20-minute assessment of the article to help with preparation for a Good Article (GA) nomination:

The article looks fundamentally pretty good. There are certainly some prose issues which I might expect to be picked up on, but that isn't too much of a problem for GA status and should be easy enough to deal with in a review. For instance, the article is currently inconsistent about whether "black" should be capitalised or uncapitalised (per MOS:RACECAPS, either is acceptable, but we should be consistent within an article!). Another example: the paragraph beginning "Although the African-American educator..." seems very long to me, and might do better split (perhaps with a new paragraph beginning "When Greener left...")

There are a few more significant issues, though they should all be relatively easy fixes:


 * The lead seems very short to me: the article isn't long, but you might consider adding a couple more sentences!
 * Two paragraphs do not end in a citation; at GA it is generally expected that all paragraphs in the body do so
 * Most of the claims I spotchecked look okay, but There is conflicting data on how many siblings she had, but most sources cite between seven and ten is not supported by either of the subsequent citations, neither of which mentions her siblings at all.
 * There are a few sources which I would query: is "The Historical Memory Recovery Channel" anything more than a self-published blog? Why is it reliable? Ditto "Chalkboard Champions".  There's also a PhD thesis cited (ensure that use follows WP:SCHOLARSHIP), and two different encyclopedia.com entries (encyclopedia.com seems to reproduce entries from other presumably reliable sources, but it's not clear to me what the source of these two entries is?)
 * The quotation at the end of the article would really be better worked into the section on Patterson's legacy than just left at the end like that.
 * Further reading generally comes references/works cited.

Caeciliusinhorto-public (talk) 09:32, 31 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you very much for your time and trouble. I will certainly attend to all the points you mention before thinking of submitting. Thanks again! Balance person (talk) 11:46, 31 May 2024 (UTC)
 * Thinking about the lead, its ordering seems to emphisize the least significant point (the context of her birth) not what she did, or (probably most important for a WP article) what makes her notable. DMacks (talk) 15:02, 10 June 2024 (UTC)