Talk:Mary Pitman Ailau/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 03:54, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Will review tomorrow morning. Noah Talk 03:54, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * I don't like the idea of having 5 citations in the middle of a sentence since it breaks up the flow considerably.
 * Merged the citations.


 * Are you talking about the mother's name? I don't see Liliha as one of the mentioned names of the subject.
 * Removed Liliha.


 * "her use of the ahupuaʻa of Hilo" could you explain that term for the readers since it isn't exactly clear?
 * Added


 * Could you add alternate text for the images?
 * Added

Will do the other half when I get back Noah Talk 12:15, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * All and all a pretty decent article. Just a few minor items I saw. Noah Talk 13:39, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * After thinking about it a bit more, is there anything out there to add that could expand on her roles as a maid of honor and a lady in waiting?
 * No this is all that is found. KAVEBEAR (talk) 17:22, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * You mention an illness but never say what she ended up dying from.
 * Apoplexy. KAVEBEAR (talk) 17:22, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Is there anything else that she did in her later life?
 * No this is all that is found. KAVEBEAR (talk) 17:22, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

I added a few more comments after revisiting it. Noah Talk 17:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Finished. KAVEBEAR (talk) 17:22, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Passing... I just fixed a typo and some grammatical issues on the page. Noah Talk 17:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)