Talk:Masooma Ranalvi

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Hey! I just peer reviewed your article :) Eb5406a (talk) 13:44, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 22 January 2021 and 26 April 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): KhushiRamnani, Cassierodrique. Peer reviewers: Eb5406a, Anjelyaragon, Nicolecmerhi, Samanthadownes.

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Hi and  really great start here on such an important issue and person. Some comments: --Liliput000 (talk) 12:29, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
 * I think the "About" section is actually your lead, so you can drop the heading.
 * do you have any other sources that document her being the founder of WeSpeakOut? This is important bc wiki considers it a biased source if it's her org. That's not to say there's no place for a link to her org on the page -- there absolutely is... but not as a support for info like this. (this is also an issue with source 2 which is an opinion piece written by her -- only use this to represent her opinion, not fact if this makes sense)
 * for the 3rd source, this may be a more appropriate link - https://sahiyo.com/2018/11/05/aarefa-johari-and-masooma-ranalvi-discuss-fgc-at-we-the-women-bangalore/
 * I went back to your googledoc and you have lots of credible sources that you don't use here yet (or improperly cite bc we can't follow the link) so let's be sure to address this, bc as it is now your profile will be flagged for removal and it doesn't need to be as you do have sources to back it up
 * Hyperlinking - definitely to a wiki article on FGM is appropriate here, as well as some other hyperlinks
 * create a "see also" section can contain links to her org site and opinion piece, this is a "safe space"for these sorts of sources. A bulleted list would suffice there.