Talk:Mathematics and architecture/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

This is something new to me and a truly interesting topic. Will snatch this! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on.

Lead

 * "Buildings" is linked twice. Do we really need a link for this? Even if this is an architecture-related article?
 * Removed one.


 * " Islamic architecture" is also linked twice
 * Done.


 * One may not understand  spatial forms at once.
 * Tweaked wording; not really avoidable in architecture.


 *  from the Pythagoreans onwards How long ago would that be?
 * Done.


 * You may link "mausoleum", "hyperbolic"
 * Done.


 * conveying a message about Hindu cosmology Leaves the reader wondering what the message would be. Could you add a word or two on that? Else remove it and mention it only in the main text.
 * Done; the word is already in the main text.


 * What does "secular" convey here? In whose opinion are they so?
 * Removed.


 * I wonder if this needs AE or BE. We have instances of both in the article. An FAC issue, though ...
 * Let's leave it.


 * Ancient Rome "A" needs no caps if "ancient Egypt/Greece" don't do either. Same in "Connected fields" section
 * Let's use Title Case throughout.


 * At the end of the nineteenth century Put it in either words or digits throughout the article. Elsewhere you say 21st, not words.
 * Let's do words throughout.

Connected fields

 * I think this section should be called "Connection between fields"
 * We are in "Maths and Architecture", so we are talking about fields connected to that.


 * Michael Ostwald and Kim Williams Who are they? You can add the author info from the cited source.
 * Glossed.


 * connected, architecture I think we need a semicolon or hyphen here
 * Reworded.


 * architecture being a profession concerned with the practical matter of making buildings, mathematics being the pure study of number and other abstract objects I think we can use "while on the other hand" or something to bring out the contrast more effectively. Commas seem lackluster.
 * Reworded.


 *  being the pure study of number  Number"s"?
 * Number is right. Linked.


 *  the extra syllabus became the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy Should this rather be "the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy became the extra syllabus"?
 * Done.


 * among architects, namely to be Colon?
 * Done.


 * Link antiquity, geometry (only at first mention, presently linked at the second one), grammar, logic
 * Done.

Vitruvius

 * I think conversion templates should be used wherever possible throughout "Harmonious spatial forms"
 * Done.


 * The influential Ancient Roman architect Vitruvius  Vitruvius should be identified in the earlier section.
 * I think he's quite well defined there by what he said.


 * such as a temple depended on two qualities I think we should say "depends". It is a general truth in Vitruvius's opinion, we are merely stating that.
 * Done.


 * on two qualities, symmetria and proportion I think "proportion" should come before "Symmetria". That is alphabetical and also the order in which you put the definitions.
 * Done.


 * Basilica at Fano Links?
 * Done.


 * firmness, usefulness and delight Could these be discussed in an alphabetical order?
 * This is the order described by Vitruvius.


 * What is an "oculus"?
 * Linked. It's already glossed as "to let in light".....


 * There are seven types of room...two squares If both refs. 26 and 27 support this quote then both should be placed just before the quote.
 * Done.

Twentieth century

 * Too common to be linked: circular, nature
 * Done.


 * "Modern Architecture" does not need italics
 * Done.


 * Guggenheim Museum, Bilbao Links?
 * Done.


 *  leading architects Such as?
 * Reworded.

Take some rest, I am bringing more! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 10:48, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Religious principles

 * Vaastu Shastra, the ancient Indian canons of architecture and town planning, employ symmetrical drawings I think "employs" sounds right. Shastra is singular
 * Done.


 * Who are Ifrah and Jackson?
 * Glossed.


 * Virupaksha Temple at Hampi (from 7th century onwards) I think you should write "built in the 7th century"
 * Done.


 * about the tallest, central, tower  The latter comma is not needed
 * Yes it is, it brackets the gloss 'central'.


 *  dwelling-place of Lord Shiva "the abode" would do better.
 * Done.


 * Who is George Markowsky? (Ancient Greece)
 * Glossed.


 * or to the pleasure of the Pythagoreans 42:62:92 May be "or, as Pythagoreans may prefer, 42:62:92'' sounds more encyclopedic.
 * Said 'delight', with ref. It's well documented that the Pythagoreans delighted in numbers and ratios.


 * The Parthenon is considered By whom? Beware of the taggers!
 * Done, but there are a million sources for this.


 * What is the golden rectangle?
 * Linked. More golden ratio stuff, unfortunately.


 * More recent authors Such as? Is Markowsky an example?
 * Yes, and Salingaros.


 * Who is Antonio Fernandez-Puertas?
 * Glossed.


 * Can Hispano- be linked?
 * Linked Al-Andalus.


 * The Court of the Lions is bracketed by the Hall of Two Sisters and the Hall of the Abencerrajes Any linking possible?
 * Done.


 *  and a strong aesthetic based on symmetry and harmony Is something missing here?
 * No.
 * Sorry, took "aesthetic" as an adjective. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 12:09, 2 March 2016 (UTC)


 * representing paradise May be considered an overstatement.
 * Added a representative ref. Again, could easily find a hundred.


 * A foreign term, "Darwaza-i rauza" should be in italics
 * Done.


 * Koch and Barraud?
 * Glossed.


 *  Koch and Barraud, analysing these in 2006 --> In a 2006 analysis, Koch and Barraud 
 * Dropped the date, it's in the ref.


 * In the last para of Christian architecture, convert 90 tons
 * Done, but what a hideous result.


 * Only a few duplinks in Mathematical decoration: Islamic buildings, Alhambra, fractal
 * Removed, but I wonder if these weren't useful here.


 * In Defence
 * Duplink: Vincenzo Scamozzi
 * Yes, it's a dup but I wonder if it isn't worth it here (it's allowed), as he's not well known and it's a long way from the other link.
 * mid-15th and nineteenth centuries Contrasting ways to put numbers
 * Good catch.


 * In Environmental goals
 * Does cucumber need a link?
 * Probably.
 * OK, no harm Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 12:27, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "subterranean" may be linked.
 * I wonder if you missed this one. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 15:39, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Done, and yes I'd missed it! Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:54, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Very well then, this article deserves to be Good now. I promote this! This is a fantastic job, Chiswick Chap! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 15:56, 2 March 2016 (UTC)