Talk:Matt Moore (baseball)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:53, 22 May 2021 (UTC)

Will review MWright96 (talk) 19:53, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "Moore chose to sign with them rather than attend the University of New Mexico, where he had previously committed." - think you might want to clarify Moore had originally committed to play college baseball for those wondering
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "Moore struggled in his second season with the Giants," - struggled with his playing technique/form?
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "but he had to be shut down after suffering a knee injury during his second game of the year." - what does shut down mean in this instance?
 * ✅ reworded  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Early life

 * "Moore was born on June 18, 1989, in Fort Walton Beach, Florida." - birth date needs a reliable source to verify it since the Albuquerque Journal does not mention it
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "The family moved to Edgewood," - wording is a little too close to the source material
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink scout to the appropriate article in the second paragraph
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Minor leagues

 * Wikilink XM Futures Game to the relevant article
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Tampa Bay Rays

 * The extra wikilinks for shutout and New York Yankees need to be removed
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "He recovered in time for his first major league start on September 22," - recovered from what?
 * ✅ changed to "his performance"  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "Moore started with the Rays in 2012 as part of a five-man starting rotation" - began and player, respectively
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink disabled list to the relevant article only on the first mention
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "Before being shut down for the season," - how about Before his season ended early, or something similar to make it more understandable?
 * ✅ changed to "In the 10 innings that he did pitch that season"  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "striking out 27.1% of the batters he faced in April" - the symbol % should be spelt out per MOS:PERCENT
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

San Francisco Giants

 * "After reports emerged that Moore would be wearing No. 55 with the Giants," - the template No. should be added to the text in bold
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "2017 proved to be the worst season of Moore's career." - The 2017 season proved to be the worst of Moore's career.
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Texas Rangers

 * Texas Rangers doesn't need to be linked here since its already linked earlier in the main prose
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Detroit Tigers

 * Detroit Tigers doesn't need to be linked here since its already linked earlier in the main prose
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "in the hopes that he would follow Mike Fiers as a low-risk pitcher heading into a rebound season." - in anticipation
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink bunt to the appropriate article
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Pitcher profile

 * Baseball America and the term cutter don't need to be linked since they already are earlier in the article
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "Early in his career, sports journalists predicted that Moore would become the Rays' ace thanks to his strong pitch repertoire and velocity." - because of his
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink strike zone
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "which has led to questions of pitch control" - questions by whom?
 * ✅ reworded as per the article, which also cites a few pitchers that talk about how they'd never in a million years tuck their thumb like that  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query each of the points raised in this review MWright96 (talk) 11:06, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the quick and thorough review! I believe everything has been addressed :)  Kncny11  (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 17:38, 23 May 2021 (UTC)