Talk:Matt Taven/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:17, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Am going to review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 12:17, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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Lead

 * "Matthew Marinelli (born March 20, 1985[1]), known by his ring name, Matt Taven," the ref is better placed outside the parentheses, not in them
 * "Taven won ROH's 2013 Top Prospect Tournament to become a full-time wrestler for ROH." - close repetition of the acronyms ROH
 * "Taven is the second wrestler to win championships in ROH, CMLL and NJPW, with the first being Rocky Romero." - you could also write this sentence as Taven is one of two wrestlers to win championships in ROH, CMLL and NJPW; the other being Rocky Romero.

Debut and ROH Television Champion (2009–2014)

 * Taven's first match for Ring of Honor (ROH) was on May 8, 2009, where he lost to Jaleel Patel in a match that took place before cameras began recording the event's matches." - too many mentions of the word match(es) in the same sentence
 * "Taven competed in a few tag team matches over the course of 2010 and 2011," - how many exactly?
 * "At ROH's Boiling Point show, on August 11, 2012," - the second comma in this portion of text is not needed
 * "with the storyline reward being that Taven would be given a full-time ROH contract." - earn
 * "he lost to Adrenaline Rush (ACH and TaDarius Thomas) and C&C Wrestle Factory (Caprice Coleman and Cedric Alexander)" - think it should be made clear that these were teams that Taven faced

Teaming with Michael Bennett (2014–2015)

 * "unsuccessfully challenging him for the ROH World Television Championship on 3 different occasions." - three to comply with MOS:NUMERAL
 * "where he was defeated by Lethal in a Steel Cage match" - steel cage match
 * "This was an angle used to write Taven off of television." - the text in bold is informal and will need to be rewritten
 * The final two sentences in the first paragraph of this section lacks reliable sources
 * Also "of television" should be changed to on television
 * "He made his return at September 27 tapings where he aligned himself"- at the tapings on September 27, where he aligned himself
 * "Nearly one year later, on September 18, 2015," - Almost one year later on September 18, 2015

The Kingdom and World Championship pursuits (2016–present)

 * "tearing an anterior cruciate ligament and medial meniscus and rupturing a lateral meniscus" - the words highlighted in bold should be wikilinked
 * "On May 10, 2017, at ROH/NJPW War Of The Worlds 2017" - the first comma in this portion of text is unneeded
 * "holding them until March 16, 2019. On March 15, 2019, at the ROH 17th Anniversary Show, " - try not to have the last words of a sentence start the next one like this.
 * "but they couldn't get him over." - unsure as to what this means; please reword to a more formal statement without using contractions
 * "Jerome Cusson said his title win "actively hurt ROH" since it isn't "a draw" - was not

Consejo Mundial de Lucha Libre (2016–2019)

 * "Taven returned to CMLL on March 17, 2017, unsuccessfully challenging Último Guerrero for the NWA World Historic Middleweight Championship at the 2017 Homenaje a Dos Leyendas show." - at that year's
 * "He returned to Mexico later in 2017, participating in the 2017 International Gran Prix as part of "Team International"." - repetition of the year "2017" in the same sentence
 * "Taven returned to CMLL on March 16, 2018, participating in that year's Homenaje a Dos Leyendas show, where he, Atlantis, and Niebla Roja defeated Los Guerreros Laguneros (Euforia, Gran Guerrero, and Último Guerrero)." - Not mentioned by the source attached to it. Please find an alternative reliable source that explicitly states this information
 * "Afterwards Taven and Volador Jr. joined forces as Los Ingobernables (Rush and El Terrible) attacked the two" - think there are some words missing from this sentence