Talk:Matthew Charles Johnson/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 12:48, 29 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 16:11, 11 June 2024 (UTC)


 * I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 16:11, 11 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @GMH Melbourne Here are my comments for now, hope they can be addressed. Arconning (talk) 06:47, 14 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Arconning: ✅, I have made all the suggested changes below (here).
 * RE, most style manuals say to shorten it "para." (chicago, Harvard p2, APA). I couldn't find anything in wikipedia's MOS. Let me know your thoughts. GMH Melbourne (talk) 07:29, 14 June 2024 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

 * criminal offending, criminal offences.

Early life

 * 9 August 1973, add comma at the end.
 * who channelled his, and channelled his.
 * from the age, at the age.
 * I suggest changing year 7 and year 10 to the spelled out versions of the numbers.

Criminal history

 * terms in HM Prison Pentridge., in to at.
 * Spending adulthood, add After before the statement.
 * Barwon Prison, hyperlink to HM Prison Barwon.
 * to be not guilty, omit to be.
 * house whilst the occupants, replace whilst with while.
 * Would suggest changing pled guilty to pleaded guilty.

Murder of Carl Williams

 * to the Corrections Victoria, remove the.
 * police officer, Paul Dale, remove comma.
 * Many prison staff, and top-level Victorian, remove comma.
 * trusting Williams' wishes,, remove comma.
 * was released on parole, add comma at the end.
 * then dragged Williams', change dragged to drag for consistent tense.
 * as "fanciful" and, remove as and add a comma at the end.
 * Johnson as saying–, I suggest changing the endash with a comma.

Life inside prison

 * Capitalize "The" in "The General".
 * He is the leader of the gang, "Prisoners of War",, would rewrite to He is a leader of a gang named "Prisoners of War"
 * He is the leader of the gang, "Prisoners of War", and writes poetry about his time inside jail., remove commas.
 * conviction of murdering, conviction for murdering.

Images

 * Images have proper licenses and are suitable. If a free image of Johnson is available, it should be uploaded

Refs

 * Guessing "para" means paragraph, would suggest for it to be spelled out.
 * Sources seem reliable.

Spotchecks

 * Reference 6 seems so-so, per Reliable sources/Perennial sources. Conditional pass.
 * Reference 18 seems good.
 * Earwig's not working, wait for check.
 * Seems good.
 * Manual check, seems alright.

Misc

 * No ongoing edit war, focused and broad on the topic. Nothing out of the ordinary, pass.