Talk:Maxine North

Potential source
Found this one in Google Books but with no preview. --Paul_012 (talk) 12:56, 10 February 2024 (UTC)

Hook not supported by article text
An interesting article but a funky hook.

The hook that Maxine North swore never to return to Thailand after the death of her undercover CIA husband, but ultimately settled there and introduced bottled water to the country? The article text does not support the use of these phrases:

1 'swore never to return to Thailand'

2 'but ultimately returned to Thailand' — 'ultimately' is not usually associated with 'a few months' rather 'finally' or 'in the end'

vs

article text

1 'but initially planned not to go back to Thailand'

2 'but after a few months went for an intended temporary stay to help with her company's succession}}' (sic)

The ALT1a hook fits the text of the article; ALT1b is dramatic but not based on the article text.

Wikipedia 'Did you know?' may draw readers who may be disappointed, failing to find the drama promised by the hook. I was. Then I checked the sources. That should not be necessary. (The sources do not fully support the article text.)

— N eonorange (talk to Phil) (he, they) 08:31, 29 February 2024 (UTC) —


 * Thanks for raising this. I've adjusted the article to also include the wording for point 1. (It was taken directly from one of the sources during the DYK review, but it was overlooked that it hadn't been added to the article). For point 2, she first planned to go back temporarily, but extended her stay again and again until it became permanent, but it doesn't appear to be a decision that she made at any exact point. This is what the "ultimately settled" wording is intended to convey. But feel free to suggest alternatives. (There's still some 7 hours left for today's Main Page. Next time, you might want to consider raising issues regarding to current DYKs at WP:ERRORS for a faster response.) --Paul_012 (talk) 17:13, 29 February 2024 (UTC)