Talk:McLaren MP4-18/GA1

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 06:04, 14 August 2022 (UTC)

Some tweaks here and there. 7-day hold for. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:47, 14 August 2022 (UTC)


 * I've given it a workover. Your point about testing, the August one, I slightly deviated to what I thought was a slightly better flowing sentence. Look forward to additional comments. Cheers X-750 List of articles that I have screwed over 02:25, 15 August 2022 (UTC)

Lead
Could use a couple more sentences.

Background

 * stating that, "I think it [the F2002] is beatable." There should not be a comma here. Either... stating, "I think it [the F2002] is beatable." or
 * Ultimately, McLaren would finish behind Williams-BMW in the Constructor's championship, scoring only 65 points; 37 less than in the 2001 season and finishing 3rd, a place lower than in 2001. Capitalize Championship, change the semicolon to a dash (—), and use "third".
 * should "Leave I wouldn't capitalize the L here
 * Change colon after "The Race" to a comma
 * After the race, Dennis commented regarding the MP4-18 that, See above

Design

 * Alongside the Williams FW25 of that year, the twin-keel configuration was combined with a "waved wing", which acted similar to a diffuser, creating a low-pressure area below the wing, sucking the nose and the front end of the car to the ground. Reflow this sentence or split it to not have so many commas. Maybe Alongside the Williams FW25 of that year, the twin-keel configuration was combined with a "waved wing". In a similar manner to a diffuser, this setup created a low-pressure area below the wing, sucking the nose and the front end of the car to the ground.
 * FIA mandated hyphenate
 * He wrote that, See above. I'd do, He wrote, "...

Engine and transmission

 * saying that, See above
 * This allowed Mercedes to build an engine with a longer stroke, yet still rev as high as the Ferrari engine due to the increased elasticity of beryllium alloys, producing more power. Drop the first comma. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences
 * On 6 October 1999, the FIA moved to ban beryllium from engines, taking effect 2001 onwards, I'd change the end to "engines beginning in 2001, ...".
 * nightmare, due to the fact that every; consider nightmare; every

Testing

 * At another test in Jerez, McLaren test driver Alexander Wurz suffered a large shunt, the cause of which was later determined to be floor delamination, the cause of which was never determined. the cause of the cause of... Reflow.
 * Wurz successfully tested the MP4-18 for 330 km (205 mi) in Austria, however when he came back into the pits it was determined MOS:HOWEVER. Should be "Austria; however, when he came back into the pits, it was determined..."
 * August, that "We've got a full test remove that

Legacy

 * Adrian Newey said that the MP4-19 was identical to the MP4-18, and in many ways it was, — Reflow to avoid comma stacking otherwise needed. "MP4-18; in many ways, it was, ..."

Source spot checks

 * 1: "lack of pace"
 * 7: Repository of quotes, some used in the article and all reproduced faithfully
 * 9: "Newey adopted the twin keel feature in 2002 on the MP4-17. The twin-keel made its racing debut in Formula One the year before on the Sauber car, where it was introduced by designer Sergio Rinland." I read this as the Sauber car adopting twin-keel in 2001, not 2002; change
 * 18: Mentions the mechanics "nightmare" item (translated from Dutch)
 * 21: F1 Database. I take this at its word; I'd want to see better sources, but the site seems to have a lot of information generally and looks of decent quality.

Other

 * Archive references.
 * Images need alt text. Use alt in the infobox (yes, this is supported but not advertised).
 * Earwig comes up with some high numbers because of the quote sources, but I think the quotes are due and merited.

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