Talk:Me at the zoo/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 16:20, 9 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: TrademarkedTWOrantula (talk · contribs) 22:56, 12 April 2024 (UTC)

"...The cool thing about these guys is that- is that they have really, really, really long, um, trunks, and, that's- that's cool..." TWOrantula TM (enter the web) 22:56, 12 April 2024 (UTC)
 * It's almost 15 to 9 (8:45 PM) here, gonna go to sleep. Just ping me when you finish making your comments, I'll check my notis tmrw. Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 00:46, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * @Davest3r08: I have finished your review.  TWOrantula  TM (enter the web) 15:37, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Please ping me if you are done implementing my comments. I have to be somewhere. Thank you.  TWOrantula  TM (enter the web) 17:05, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Whoops. I forgot I still had this review up. Anyway, passing...  TWOrantula  TM (enter the web) 21:49, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * The reception section feels quite... empty. For the very first video on YouTube, I'm sure it has received more attention.
 * Bit curious today: Who's the voice that goes "bloop-bleep" at the start of the video? (you don't have to answer this)
 * Source #4 (Fox29 story; Weaver 2024) doesn't really add anything other than when the youtube.com domain was activated (IMO that isn't relevant to this specific article. That should belong in the history section for the Wikipedia article about YouTube.)
 * Not sure how source #8 (University of Delaware messenger) is reliable
 * What makes Digital Trends and Tubefilter reliable?
 * Dug these up for ya:, ,  (you could use the last source to cite info on Lapitsky instead of the university page)
 * Well done! Most of the sources here are reliable. :D
 * Is the PDT time relevant?

Copyvio check

 * Everything seems to be in order. Earwig states that the top result is at a 44.1% similarity; however, the link is a mirror website.

Lead

 * "Me at the zoo" is the first video uploaded to YouTube, on April 23, 2005, 8:31:52 p.m. PDT, or April 24, 2005, at 03:31:52 UTC. -> "'Me at the zoo' is a YouTube video uploaded on April 23, 2005, at 3:31:52 UTC. It is the first video to be uploaded to the platform."
 * Using Karim's camera, it was recorded by his high school friend -> It was recorded on Karim's camera by his high school friend...
 * a University of Delaware Ph.D. student at the time, who was in San Diego to deliver his research to the American Chemical Society -> "...who was a University of Delaware Ph.D. (unlink Ph.D.) in San Diego delivering his research to the American Chemical Society."
 * Why is mentioning the view count important?
 * Reception should be briefly mentioned in lead

Background

 * I'd recommend linking "former employees at PayPal" together to PayPal Mafia ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:21, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Paypal: Chad Hurley... ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:21, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Unlink "design" ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:21, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Add comma between "Pennsylvania" and "and" ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:29, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Unlink "computer science" ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:21, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Surprised Justin Timberlake isn't linked here ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:21, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Not sure why the alternate name for the Super Bowl XXXVIII halftime controversy is needed here  Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:29, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Link San Diego Zoo ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:52, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Link University of Delaware  Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:52, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

Reception

 * Hm... Los Angeles Times quote could use some shortening...
 * "as the first video uploaded to YouTube, it played a pivotal role in fundamentally altering how people consumed media and helped usher in a golden era of the 60-second video" -> "Me at the zoo" "played a pivotal role" on how videos were watched. (IDK it's 10:27, and I want to go to sleep :c)
 * I tried to paraphrase part of the Digital Trends quote (tell me what you think)

Legacy

 * was not simply about
 * Good use of quotes, and this paragraph is really well-written!
 * "Paved the way for" is a little informal. Try using "led"?
 * Might want to introduce Greg Jarboe (what publication is he from?)
 * Same thing for Aaron Duplantier
 * original amateur content - Not sure what this phrase means. Does it mean content produced by random people who have no experience in filmmaking?
 * In addition to being the first video on YouTube, it has been described as the first YouTube vlog clip. -> "Being the first video on YouTube, it has also been described as the first YouTube vlog clip." - Follow-up question: What's a vlog clip?
 * ranked it as
 * "It is representative of YouTube—it doesn't need to be this fancy production; it can be approachable. The first YouTube video is something anyone could create on their own." - Two things. One: This could be trimmed down (see my next point). Two: This sounds like it could belong in the reception section, not legacy.
 * Trim quote (direct quotes in boldface): "...it was representative, being an example of home-made (I don't know what word to use there. I just need a word that means "naturally made" or "without extra work".) user-generated content." ✅ Davest3r08 > : 3  (talk) 16:08, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "the thing is practically a historical artifact" -> ...it was "practically a historical artifact".
 * Shouldn't the importance ratings go in the reception section?
 * Not sure if the technical term for a description is "description feed" (usually I call it the "description")
 * "more detailed" -> "longer"
 * Link Artificial intelligence art to "AI-generated"?

Spotchecking
Note: Reference numbers are of this revision. I will check ten references at random.
 * ✅ #1
 * ❌ #2 - Does not say about Karim's inspiration for creating YouTube
 * ✅ #4 - Not sure if adding the exact date would suffice, but source checks out.
 * ✅ #6
 * ✅ #9
 * ✅ #11 - Since I can't access the book itself, I'm gonna AGF and hope that the text is verifiable.
 * ✅ #12
 * ✅ #15
 * ✅ #16
 * ✅ #18
 * ❌ #20 (bonus because why not) - Doesn't say the elephants are AI-generated