Talk:Mecha-Streisand/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 05:03, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reviewing this article. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my structural take on GARs. Let's get started.  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 05:03, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * "[...]obtains an ancient relic from the South Park boys[...]" → wikilink "South Park boys" to List of South Park characters?
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  16:42, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Plot

 * "[...]until he gives the triangle back." → "until he returns the triangle to him" to avoid redundancy.
 * Combine paragraphs 3 and 4(?)
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  16:42, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Production

 * Directed by Parker and Stone? The infobox and lead state that only Parker directed it—which one is correct?
 * Delink "Robert Smith" and "The Cure" (already linked in plot)
 * "Smith read all of his lines via telephone and Parker used the first reading of each line, even though they were read in a very dead-pan voice." → "Smith performed[...]they were executed" so it's not "he read the reading and he used the first read which was read[...]" etc.
 * "[...]they were chosen at random. However, they chose[...]" → "chosen at random; however"
 * Wilink to Amendment 2 if possible?
 * Comma after Mary Kay Bergman
 * "[...]monster movie with cheesy graphics." → "cheesy" sounds a bit slangish, wouldn't you say?
 * I think i got these; please make sure my changes to the Smith dead-pan sentence were correct though. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  16:42, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Cultural references

 * Should the character of Mothra be italicized?
 * "This mirror a common element[...]" → "mirrors a common"
 * Filming a scene of what, exactly?
 * I'll continue the rest later...
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  16:42, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Reception

 * ""Mecha-Streisand" was received a 6.9 Nielsen Rating" → Remove "was"
 * Wikilink to Mirabella in Ref 7.

Home video release

 * Perhaps this should be mixed with reception?
 * I'm kind of confused by the wording of the whole "three-DVD" thing. Were they three separate releases, or three discs? Could use some rewording.
 * "[...]the other twelve[...]" → "other twelve episodes"
 * I'd like to note here how impressed I am by these mostly offline sources. I particularly enjoy the title of "4-disc 'Rings' could take up a whole weekend." Great job finding all these! :)

Images

 * Weak rationale but acceptable for the notably fitting infobox image.
 * Other two images are freeuse, so no issues there.


 * Ok, I think I got them all. And thanks for the compliments regarding the sources! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  22:33, 12 February 2010 (UTC)

Final say
I'm just gonna skip the full look-over (mostly because I cannot find the template -_-) and pass this. Great work! :)  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 00:10, 13 February 2010 (UTC)