Talk:Melanie Dimantas

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Anna Iunes. Peer reviewers: KS531, Anne-MarieDesjardins.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 00:51, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

First peer edit
Hi,

Overall, I think you did a really good job with your article!

There are a few grammatical errors that you might want to look over. For example, in the “Career” section of your article, you write "In the year of 1980, she graduated in Social Ciences by the University of São Paulo (USP) and later on as a History and Geography teacher.” I think that by Ciences you mean Sciences. More so, you should perhaps add the word “worked” to the last part of the sentence:  “and later on Worked as a History and Geography teacher”.

Your formatting is great! If you want to take it up a notch, maybe you can add an info box for Dimantas, you can find this in the template section of your sandbox.

On a final note, there are a few links that turned out red in your article. This means that the wikipedia page for the given subject does not exist.

Good job and good luck with the rest of your assignment !

Anne-MarieDesjardins

FMST329: Peer review
Hi Anna Iunes!

I really liked that your article, it was really straight to the point, easy to read!

I think it would be even better if you could expand a little bit more on Dimantas' process as a writer (maybe what led her to certain projects, the challenges she encountered, etc), and also on her personal life (for the reader to get a sense of who she is, as a person). Minor corrections: Some nouns don't have to be linked to internal articles (ex. Brazilian, screenwriter, script and cinema course). Also, it is clear that you've done some major work on the filmography section, however, it does look a bit daunting right now. Adding a chart for the films (and link the movies internally, if possible) might help.

Best of luck with your assignment!

--KS531 (talk) 02:29, 16 March 2016 (UTC)