Talk:Mental health of Asian Americans

Peer feedback for article
The first draft of this article is strong. It covers the key topics for the subject and even offers mental health resources at the conclusion of the page. The information presented under Cultural Considerations and Stereotypes was fascinating to read about, and the author did a good job finding scholarly articles to back up the claims presented.

In general, the author should include illustrations and link to and from other articles to increase viewership and traffic. Further, the author should approach the writing of this article from a more subjective view, in the sense, that some of the phrases may across as opinions rather than statements of facts due to not having citations or references attached to them. I would also recommend the author to include more references for some sections, as few are based only 1 reference.

Overall, the article is headed towards the right direction

Psg2022 (talk) 23:05, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer feedback
Your article adds a valuable contribution to the range of topics on mental illness covered by Wikipedia and sheds a new light on the availability of resources about the Asian American community. You cover many intersectional topics like mental health, culture, stereotypes, and racism, which all are relevant to everyday life. However, you need to work on the neutrality of this contribution to make it a valid Wikipedia article. It reads like an essay, which affects readability, sourcing, and comprehensiveness. Look at the areas where you express your opinion and find a way to rephrase it into a well-sourced, fact-checked objective argument. You can say opinionated statements if you consider multiple viewpoints, which I don’t feel you have yet achieved in this article. Therefore, most of your article is an assertion without enough scholarly backing and without differences in perspectives. By addressing neutrality, you can make this contribution more suitable for Wikipedia. It is the most important improvement you can make between now and the final submission date. Riyeng (talk) 03:24, 27 October 2022 (UTC)