Talk:Merry-Go-Round (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:26, 23 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * with a rap → featuring an uncredited rap
 * and Avex Entertainment Inc. worldwide. → Insert the "worldwide" after "It was released"
 * A majority of them → The majority of them
 * vocal performance. Some also highlighted → vocal performance, whilst others also highlighted
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 07:47, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * CD cover. → Cover artwork used to commercialize physical editions of the single.
 * Avex Entertainment Inc → no full labels names in infoboxes
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 07:47, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Background and composition

 * Japanese publication Natalie.mu → Japanese publication Natalie
 * would release a new → avoid the word "new"
 * and would serve as Hamasaki's → state "the singer's" here, as you've already used her name before
 * The track was written by → The recording was written by (word repetition)
 * The song was composed by Japanese → It was composed by Japanese (word rep.)
 * with minor phrases → containing minor phrases
 * It is nowhere stated that Verbal had an uncredited appearance
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Release

 * The CD and DVD format featured → use "incorporated" here for alternation
 * TeamAyu, which included → TeamAyu, and included
 * track list on both discs but featured a bonus interview by Hamasaki → track list on both discs alongside a bonus interview with Hamasaki
 * The digital EP included the same track list → You've used "featured the same track list" three full times; alternate here.
 * the singles same release date on → the single's release date on
 * and for Hamasaki's Countdown → and during Hamasaki's Countdown
 * for 2014, Avex Trax → in 2014, Avex Trax
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Reception

 * A staff member at Japanese → A staff member of Japanese
 * for her album Colours at CD Journal selected it → Remove "at CD Journal" here
 * the composition by Komuro → who's Komuro?
 * for following the electronic sound. → for portraying an electronic sound
 * "Feel the Love", it underperformed → replace "it" with "the track"
 * top spot since her single → replace "single" with "recording" for alternation
 * first week sales → first-week sales
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Music videos and promotion

 * You can simply rename this section to "Promotion"
 * for the single; one by Luis Hernandez, the second from Satoru Yokoyama → for the single by Luis Hernandez and Satoru Yokoyama, respectively
 * during a time lapse → during a time lapse are shown
 * unnamed man → unidentified man
 * entire video, and ends → entire video, which ends
 * For Yokoyama's video, scenes containing Verbal were only shot → For Yokoyama's video, only shots featuring Verbal were filmed
 * filmed, with additional → only filmed, alongside
 * and inside a neon-lit → and residing in a neon-lit
 * painting the unnamed man → remove "unnamed" and state "painting a man"
 * Ref 22 is faded to the text
 * before the albums release in July 2 → before the album's release on July 2
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Track list and formats

 * flawless ;)

Credits and personnel

 * flawless ;)

Charts and sales

 * flawless ;)

Release history

 * Unlink labels
 * Music Cards → Music cards
 * Use "scope="row" for countries in the table, please
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Copy-violation

 * 10,7% is ok!

Images and others

 * Image from the music video brings nothing to the article, so please remove it in accordance with Wikipedia's WP:IMAGE

Links

 * No problems here!

Outcome

 * for 7 days! Good luck! Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:06, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:02, 24 December 2016 (UTC)