Talk:Metamorfosis World Tour/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:15, 23 June 2013 (UTC)

General comments
 * The tenses need checking. It is now longer "current" so "it was a tour" for example.
 * Done.
 * The lead doesn't reflect the fact the tour has finished either.
 * Done.
 * "is the first tour before abandoning Warner Music to become" a bit emotive, perhaps "is his first tour before leaving Warner Music to become..."
 * Done.
 * "with dates for American, Argentinian and Chilean venues revealed." you don't link USA but you do Argentina and Chile, no need.
 * Done.
 * " of four ambiences on top of a rotatory stage through which Arjona performs and each one of them are directly related to the songs being performed" this isn't great English, it needs a proper copyedit, I don't even really understand it.
 * Did my best rewording it. I wrote that sentence so long ago...
 * "and fourth and final stage a theatre" no need for "and final".
 * Fixed with above


 * "On Buenos Aires, it" you mean "In Buenos Aires"?
 * "attended ... attendance" repetitive.
 * Done.
 * "As of April 2012" it's finished and it's now June 2013, needs update.
 * Updated.
 * "Fellow guatemalan singer-songwriter" capital G for guatemalan. Check whole article.
 * On it.
 * "The tour follows his past Quinto Piso Tour," no need for "past".
 * Done.
 * In infobox, surely tour years are 2012–13, not just 2012?
 * Done.
 * "Independiente is Arjona's" was.
 * Done.
 * "to refocus his career" is that something he said? If so, it should be quoted and attributed.
 * "photographer-director" en-dash (as you use en-dash for singer–songwriter).
 * "Although the album is ..." was.
 * What are these "ambiences"?
 * "through which Arjona performs along seven musicians and one showgirl" needs work.
 * Done
 * Done


 * "50 people are..." avoid stating sentences with numbers.
 * Done


 * "150 illumination lights," ditto.
 * Done


 * For "movable" do you really mean "mobile"?
 * Yep

In general a heavy copyedit would be in order.
 * "of scenography" you mean "scenery"?
 * Don't overlink Santiago de Chile.
 * I agree. I will try to copyedit this whole article ASAP. Thanks :) — ΛΧΣ  21  03:09, 24 June 2013 (UTC)

Comments specific to GAN criteria
 * 1) Well-written: ❌ (see above)
 * 2) Verifiable: ✅
 * 3) Broad: ✅
 * 4) Neutral: (see above)
 * 5) Stable: ✅
 * 6) Illustrated: ✅

Currently I consider this GAN to be on hold pending the resolution of the above. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:34, 23 June 2013 (UTC)
 * I'll give it a thorough copyedit in the next day or so. All the best,  Mini  apolis  17:59, 29 June 2013 (UTC)
 * It appears that Miniapolis did the copyedit that evening. Was it sufficient? I've just added a missing "url=" parameter to one of the references so it no longer shows an error. Where does the article stand now? BlueMoonset (talk) 14:35, 4 July 2013 (UTC)

Further comments The Rambling Man (talk) 18:12, 4 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Non-English-language sources should use a language template.
 * Done.
 * Can you check that those pre-collapsed tables are okay per WP:COLLAPSE?
 * I think they are, yes.
 * Still conflict of "singer–songwriter" and "singer-songwriter" and "photographer-director".
 * Ok, I think i finally handled this.
 * Don't think "lights" needs to be wikilinked.
 * Delinked that and a couple more things.
 * "Panoramic photography of the stage" well I don't think the "Panoramic photography of..." is needed. That much is obvious to the observer.
 * Fixed.
 * Thanks! — ΛΧΣ  21  18:18, 19 July 2013 (UTC)