Talk:Meteorite (Mariah Carey song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 04:05, 30 August 2015 (UTC)


 * Background
 * Given how short this section is, I'd merge it with "Production and composition" per MOS:PARAGRAPHS, which discourages really short sections
 * In "He’s angry with me because he thinks that I didn’t allow him to do his mix, but really it’s okay. He loves me, we’re going to make this work. And that’s good because it’s one of my favorite songs. I’m going to call him soon", ’ should be ' per MOS:QUOTEMARKS
 * I don't understand what you're saying? — Calvin999  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Fixed it myself. Snuggums (talk / edits) 23:03, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * It isn't necessary to state this was Mariah's first time working with Q-Tip since "Honey"
 * If it had only been a few years then I'd agree, but reuniting after 17 years is a long time. It's like when people said it's been 18 years since Mariah performed at the BBMA's. — Calvin999  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * If it had only been a few years then I'd agree, but reuniting after 17 years is a long time. It's like when people said it's been 18 years since Mariah performed at the BBMA's. — Calvin999  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)


 * Production and composition
 * "'80s" should be "1980s" per WP:YEAR, and the references for "dance" and "disco" don't mention any specific era; only "'80s-style pop"
 * "dipped in and out of" seems somewhat informal
 * Nothing else on the lyrics outside of Andy Warhol's "15 Minutes of fame" speech?
 * No, surprisingly. Just passing comments saying it includes it. — Calvin999  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Critics noted that is also makes use of a 'rattling' percussion and a 70s style 'cosmic' synth line"..... "70s" should be "1970s" per WP:YEAR, and this is actually from one critic; Lewis Corner.
 * No, surprisingly. Just passing comments saying it includes it. — Calvin999  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Critics noted that is also makes use of a 'rattling' percussion and a 70s style 'cosmic' synth line"..... "70s" should be "1970s" per WP:YEAR, and this is actually from one critic; Lewis Corner.


 * Critical reception
 * It's not necessary to mention Billie Frank. Also, see above comments on WP:YEAR
 * I see nothing supporting Corner feeling Mariah "is still staying true to who she is as an artist", which isn't exactly a necessary detail to begin with
 * Why is commentary from Donatella Versace included when she's not a music critic?
 * Where else should I include it? — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Daily News" should read "New York Daily News"
 * "simply commented"..... commenting
 * Is AXS worth including if it's only a ticket merchant?
 * Yes, because it's someone who has written a review. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "simply commented"..... commenting
 * Is AXS worth including if it's only a ticket merchant?
 * Yes, because it's someone who has written a review. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, because it's someone who has written a review. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)


 * Live performances
 * This doesn't give a specific date for the World Music Awards, and only the month on its own is sufficient anyway
 * "Carey attracted some controversy"..... was criticized
 * Not sure the time of day is necessary to include
 * It's showing when she should have arrived and when she did arrive. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * There's nothing in the reference saying Mariah was the opening act
 * Added source. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Not that I could find, though I did come across a better ref and used that for saying she was opening act and that her late arrival delayed the show <b style="color:#454545">Snuggums</b> (<b style="color:#454545">talk</b> / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 23:03, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Her outfit isn't really crucial detail
 * Removed. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Rap-Up doesn't describe the performance as "dazzling"; only Vibe does
 * "with a dazzling performance of “Meteorite”" — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * My bad, somehow didn't see that bit
 * "Hollywood Life" shouldn't be italicized, and its commentary isn't worth including since the source is unreliable to begin with
 * DirectLyrics accused Mariah of lipsyncing, not Spin Media
 * No commentary for her performances the song on tour?
 * Not that I found. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * DirectLyrics accused Mariah of lipsyncing, not Spin Media
 * No commentary for her performances the song on tour?
 * Not that I found. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Not that I found. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)


 * Credits and personnel
 * Don't abbreviate states; "NY" should be "New York", and "CA" should be "California"


 * Charts
 * Not sure if this warrants its own section with only one region listed
 * Thats why I included prose with he table. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Fair enough <b style="color:#454545">Snuggums</b> (<b style="color:#454545">talk</b> / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 23:03, 31 August 2015 (UTC)


 * References
 * "Fuse" shouldn't be italicized
 * "Daily News" should read "New York Daily News"
 * Irish Mirror doesn't seem very credible given its affiliation with Daily Mirror, a paper with poor journalistic credibility (at least compared to other UK papers like The Daily Telegraph, The Guardian, and The Independent)
 * It's still a published newspaper which a lot of people buy and read. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Hollywood Life" is not reliable; it's a gossip site with a poor reputation that frequently gives false reports
 * Removed. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * The [Http://www.directlyrics.com/mariah-carey-lipsyncs-meteorite-at-2014-world-music-awards-watch-news.html DirectLyrics] ref has been erroneously labeled as "Spin Media", and lyric sites are not reliable for anything other than song lyrics
 * Removed. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * The [Http://www.directlyrics.com/mariah-carey-lipsyncs-meteorite-at-2014-world-music-awards-watch-news.html DirectLyrics] ref has been erroneously labeled as "Spin Media", and lyric sites are not reliable for anything other than song lyrics
 * Removed. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)


 * Overall
 * Well-written?
 * Prose quality: Could be better
 * Manual of Style compliance: Some issues


 * Verifiable?
 * Reference layout: Two problems
 * Reliable sources: Three unreliable citations
 * No original research: Not up to par


 * Broad in coverage?
 * Major aspects: Not quite
 * Focused: Unnecessary detail in some parts


 * Neutral?: No bias detected


 * Stable?: Looks good


 * Illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * Appropriate licensing: No copyright violations
 * Relevance and captioning: File:Eddie Kendricks (1972).png isn't particularly beneficial, and it would be better to simply state Q-Tip co-wrote and co-produced the song in the caption for his pic


 * Pass or Fail?: On hold for seven days. Let's see how much this can be improved. <b style="color:#454545">Snuggums</b> (<b style="color:#454545">talk</b> / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 04:05, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Will do this later today. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  07:56, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Sure thing. <b style="color:#454545">Snuggums</b> (<b style="color:#454545">talk</b> / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 13:17, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm done now. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  16:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Passing. <b style="color:#454545">Snuggums</b> (<b style="color:#454545">talk</b> / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 23:03, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  07:57, 1 September 2015 (UTC)