Talk:Meteorological history of Hurricane Sandy/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)

Otherwise, it's very good. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "The meteorological history of Hurricane Sandy, the second-costliest Atlantic hurricane on record, lasted for over a week in late October 2012. " Can you find a better opener here? How does that crap the readers attention. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I think it's fine as is. That's a common opener for MH articles. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:25, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * " Classified as the eighteenth named storm, tenth hurricane, and second and final major hurricane of the annual hurricane season," well-written sentence, however, I'd cut either "second" or "final" from here to make it less wordy. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "intensified into a Category 3, with maximum sustained winds of" mention it was on the SSHS. Australians might get confused here. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "An approachingtrough o" space fail :P YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "An approachingtrough over the central United States induced higher wind shear over the system as it emerged in The Bahamas region, causing it to weaken to a tropical storm while turning more northeastward." why is the Bahamas capitalized and not wikilined. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "induced higher wind shear over the system as it emerged in" wikilink to wind shear. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "The southern part of the trough detached across the Southeast, providing favorable baroclinic forcing and lower wind shear late on October 28, allowing for intensification of the cyclone. " Can you please break this up into two sentences. It is kinda long IMO. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "During this change in direction, Sandy began to transition into an extratropical cyclone" how come this is not wililinked? YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "In addition to breaking the record for the largest Atlantic hurricane, " delink Atlantic Ocean as you are not suppose to link very common terms. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Meant to link to Atlantic hurricane. Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * " On October 20, following modest organization, the U.S. National Hurricane Center (NHC) assessed a high potential for it to become a tropical cyclone within 48 hours,[3]" no need for country name; that is explained in the wikilink and a tad irrelevant. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "By 1500 UTC on October 22, the NHC had initiated advisories on Tropical Depression Eighteen, about 320 mi (515 km) south of Kingston, Jamaica. This was based on surface observations and satellite imagery, which indicated the system had developed enough organized convection to be classified.[8] " would it be great if you reversed the order of these sentences? I'd go with something like "By 1500 UTC on October 22, surface observations and satellite imagery, which indicated the system had developed enough organized convection to be classified as Tropical Depression Eighteen. At the time of the upgrade, the system was situated about 320 mi (515 km) south of Kingston, Jamaica " . YE  Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * ", .[14] " why is there a comma and a period? You pulled a YE here. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I'd mention it was never a Cat 3 in real-time. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "By early October 26, a majority of the convection in association with Sandy was located to the north of the center, primarily due to wind shear and dry air to the southwest of the hurricane; by this time, the size of the storm had increased greatly, with tropical storm-force winds extended out some 275 mi (445 km) from the center.[21][22] " kinda long, so cut them in half. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "By the next day, the NHC remarked that Sandy was "showing characteristics of a hybrid cyclone...like a large occluded frontal low."[24]" second time in the last three instances you start with "By". I'd cut eliminate the "By" here, but that is just me. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * " maintained a warm thermal core, and despite strong 50 kt (60 mph) wind shear, continued to develop thunderstorms due to an abundance of divergence from a nearby trough;" use mph and km/h out note kt and mph. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Wind shear's unit is most commonly knots, not mph or km/hr. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * If I were you, I'd mention its secondary peak was a Cat 2 like you do in the lead. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Why a clear just before the dissipation section? YE Pacific  Hurricane
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Any intensity predictions in the Predictions center? Didn't it intensify faster than expected? YE Pacific  Hurricane
 * It's stated that it underwent rapid intensification. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "Sandy was the largest tropical cyclone in terms of gale diameter since records began in 1988.[50]" can you merge this one sentence paragraph? YE  Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * "A buoy in New York Harbor reached a record height when it measured a 32.5-foot (9.9 m) wave on October 30, 7.5 feet (2.3 m) taller than a 25-foot (7.6 m) wave registered by Hurricane Irene in 2011.[53]" ditto here, I'd merge it with the 1st paragraph of the records section. YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * " Rep. Bobby Rush wrote.[67] " spell out Rebublican here, you don;t hint what Reb. means above. YE Pacific  Hurricane
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * " On April 9, 2013 " comma after 13. YE Pacific  Hurricane
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * In ref 58, be consistent and make the author "Jeff Masters". YE Pacific  Hurricane 00:18, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:50, 25 April 2013 (UTC)