Talk:Michael Allen (Canadian football)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bcschneider53 (talk · contribs) 18:45, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

I'll take another one of these. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 18:45, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * No dab or external link issues.

Lead

 * No issues.

Early career

 * No issues.

Winnipeg Blue Bombers

 * "Michael Allen was selected" remove Michael per WP:SURNAME
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Shortly afterward, he missed games due to a sprained ankle." How many?
 * I think two based on the source, but it doesn't explicitly say. Anything I tried to offer would be an approximation/guesswork, and so I feel it's best to keep it somewhat vague to avoid WP:SYNTH. Changed it to "multiple games" to try to make it clear I'm not offering any number. ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Haven't looked too deeply into CFLapedia, but is it a reliable source? Even if it's not, the claim has a second ref to back it up so it shouldn't be too big an issue.
 * Eh, questionable reliability, especially these days. At one time, it was maintained by a single person who was using statistics directly from the CFL and was widely considered to be an authority on the league. It was never an official site for stats, but it was about as close as you can get, from my understanding. These days, it's being revived by someone else who is less proven, and it's not as clear whether the information comes directly from the league. I've replaced it with the Guinness Book of World Records, which I hadn't been able to find online in my original searching. ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)

Ottawa Rough Riders

 * "Shortly after" should this be "Shortly thereafter"?
 * ✅ Either is grammatically correct I believe, and I have no preference. ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "He played in all regular season games" either put the number of games between "all" and "regular" or say "He played in every regular season game"
 * ✅ Went with the latter. ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "with The Ottawa Citizen describing him as" same thing as in the last review I did. If there is an author (Warren?), see if you can work him into the sentence.
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)

BC Lions

 * "Allen had a physical altercation with Ken Walcott" remove Ken.
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)

Retirement and career

 * "well-known" In the lead, "well known" is used without the hyphen. I'd prefer using the hyphen in both, but either way, there should be consistency.
 * ✅ ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:34, 13 June 2017 (UTC)

Mostly just a few prose issues again. Placing on hold. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 20:22, 12 June 2017 (UTC)
 * This should be good for another look. And apologies for the repeat issues; one of the disadvantages of GA reviews a while after nomination is that it takes a while for feedback to filter into newly-written articles. ~ Rob 13 Talk 03:35, 13 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Well done. Pass for GA :) --Bcschneider53 (talk) 04:28, 13 June 2017 (UTC)