Talk:Michael Pineda/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Resolute (talk · contribs) 02:02, 12 April 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * General
 * Images are good
 * Though not required for GA, alternative text for the images would be beneficial
 * Sources look good
 * Spotcheck of sources shows no issue with close paraphrasing
 * Reply I'll certainly add alt text.


 * Is there anything that can be said about his personal life? Where he grew up, family, was he involved in any sort of team/charitable causes, etc?
 * Reply Sadly, not much. This is about as much as I can find. I added a short section on his personal life based on it.


 * Lead
 * "...the highest among MLB rookies with at least 100 innings pitched.[1] and fourth overall in MLB.[2]" - Obviously that period was supposed to be a comma.
 * Reply Yes, indeed.


 * Minor leagues
 * "...and was named Mariners Minor League Pitcher of the Year." - and he was named. Also, specify that this was a team award.  Tacked onto the other award, it is implied that Baseball America named him Seattle's minor league pitcher of the year.
 * Need a citation for his statistical accomplishments in 2009
 * "...Baseball America again named Pineda the Mariners' Minor League Pitcher of the Year in 2010" - source does not say Baseball America named him pitcher of the year. States it was a team award?
 * Reply First item clarified, and you're right on the second. My bad.


 * Seattle Mariners
 * "He ended his first month in the majors with a 4–1 record and a sparkling 2.01 ERA..." - Avoid weasel words. "Sparkling" is not encyclopedic.  Also, that entire line is one heck of a run-on sentence.
 * The all-star game paragraph needs a little re-work. You note he was named and why, then highlight his season stats to that point, then discuss a seemingly random single inning of work.  I was a little confused for a moment before realizing you were talking about the All-Star game again.
 * "He recorded no wins in his final seven starts over the final two months of the year.." - final... final. Can you change up the wording a bit?
 * Reply I doubt I wrote "sparkling", but I'm surprised I didn't take it out before. Run-on cut in two. Clarified that the inning was ASG. Changed the second "final" to "last", I hope that suffices.


 * New York Yankees
 * Trades are important enough that I like to include the dates. Not a requirement, just a suggestion.
 * The date he went on the DL, however, is not. I might suggest rewording as "Pineda was placed on the 15-day disable list and missed the start of the season with tendinitis in his right shoulder."
 * Reply Date of the trade added, date of the DL removed.


 * Overall
 * Looking good, but a few fixes, and if available, a little personal life-expansion would make this article better. Placing on hold for now.  Regards, Resolute 02:02, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Great, I'll do this tomorrow. I'm not sure how much personal life stuff is available (I didn't see any when I wrote this up in February), but I'll look again. – Muboshgu (talk) 02:31, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Done, I think. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:24, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Yup, looks good to me. Congrats! Resolute 16:42, 14 April 2012 (UTC)