Talk:Michael Player

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Awkward sentences due to translation. Proposed changes:

Awkward: "On October 7th, attacked a 23-year-old Korean, Chang Kang, as a result of which he was killed. Like the first victim, Kang was not homeless, and had come from Texas so he could visit some relatives." Better sentence: "Chang Kang, 23, of the Carrollton area of Dallas, Texas, like Roque was not a vagrant, but had been visiting a relative in the Koreatown section of Los Angeles when he was shot at close range in the early hours of October 7, a mile from Skid Row. " References: https://www.nytimes.com/1986/11/03/us/california-killer-attacks-homeless.html lists Kang as a 38-year-old from San Diego, but is quoting the LA Times. https://www.latimes.com/archives/la-xpm-1986-10-11-mn-2826-story.html lists Kang as a 38-year-old from San Diego (but may have him confused with 54 year old Roque, who was from San Diego. The other victims were vagrants, but these two were not.) https://www.mail-archive.com/law-issues@mylist.net/msg02493.html (Apr 28, 1998) has Kang as 23, and from Texas Adjust title of Sun article (footnote 10): https://cdnc.ucr.edu/?a=d&d=SBS19861011.1.10&e=---en--20--1--txt-txIN1 San Bernardino Sun, 11 October 1986 p10 "Deaths may be work of serial killer" states that "Chang Kang, 23, of Carrollton, Texas, a suburb of Dallas, was visiting a relative in the Koreatown section." Information is from announcements by authorities police Cmdr. William Booth and Sheriff's Deputy Merlyn Poppleton on Fri, Oct 10.

Editing should change many instances of "Michael" to be "Player"

Earlier sentence: "After killing Roque, Michael got rid of the weapon" should be "After killing Roque, Michael hid the weapon" (since both guns were found with his effects in a later paragraph.)

Additional Source: https://www.nytimes.com/1987/02/06/us/los-angeles-police-identify-a-suicide-as-killer-of-10-men.html Scrubsit (talk) 02:59, 16 June 2020 (UTC)