Talk:Midas Touch (book)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 16:15, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 16:15, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 16:54, 11 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Not necessary for GA, but footnote 33 is missing an ISBN.
 * The summary section needs copyediting for repetitive sentence structure and some clumsinesses.
 * entrepreneurship success is learned through multiple failures in business in order to learn best how to succeed: redundant.
 * Trump writes this is due to a fear of failure, and ascribes business success to the experience of learning from failures: this just repeats the previous paragraph, now with reference to Trump; instead of the repetition, give the opinion and say it's stated by both men.
 * writing, that the oncoming disappearance...: no comma is needed in this sort of indirect quotation. I haven't cleaned these up because I hope a copyedit will reduce the number of these.
 * Trump explained his motivation for wanting to work with Kiyosaki, saying he was motivated by: wordy; could be cut to " Trump was motivated to work with Kiyosaki by". There's a similarly wordy sentence in the next paragraph.
 * The "Composition and publication" section needs a copyedit for wordiness and flow.
 * Are there reviews from other major publications that could be used for the reception section?
 * , are you planning to work on this? If not I'll fail the article in another week. Mike Christie (talk - contribs -  library) 14:14, 18 February 2018 (UTC)
 * I have addressed the green comments and copyedited the summary. Source 33 is a Kindle ebook, which do not have ISBNs. Let me know if you have any other concerns. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:44, 2 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Promoting. Mike Christie (talk - contribs -  library) 02:01, 10 March 2018 (UTC)