Talk:Mikayel Nalbandian/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ganesha811 (talk · contribs) 16:14, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi! I'm opening a Good Article Nomination review. Hoping to complete the review over the next couple of days. I'll be using the template below. Thanks! Ganesha811 (talk) 16:14, 19 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Pass! Congrats to and everyone else who worked on this article. I'll do the needful now. Nice work! :) Ganesha811 (talk) 17:37, 27 October 2019 (UTC)

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 * In lead:
 * "historical Armenia" is not a well-known/widely-used term and should be either defined in text or linked to an explanatory article/section
 * removed "historical", it just says "Armenia" now


 * I don't think 'radical' and 'intellectual' need to be bluelinked - strikes of MOS:SOB and unnecessary definition of common terms
 * Removed bluelink for intellectual.


 * Rather than 'latter', use 'Chernyshevsky' for clarity.
 * "latter" here actually refers to both Herzen and Chernyshevsky. Replaced "latter" with "them" for clarity


 * "convicted" of what?
 * Replaced with "persecuted"


 * First sentence of last paragraph of lead is a little hard to follow - separate into two sentences, perhaps, or at least semi-colon to clear up who he was influenced by, and who he influenced
 * Done


 * Rather than "Nalbandian's another poem", use "Another poem of Nalbandian's" - grammar
 * replaced with "Another poem of Nalbandian"


 * In 'Life':
 * 'Catholicos' should be linked in "Early years"
 * done


 * Typo: "From July 1948" should be "From July 1848"
 * done


 * Add "the" to "worked as secretary of", so it reads "worked as the secretary of"
 * done


 * What "health treatment" did he visit Crimea/Odessa for? Not essential information, but raises an interesting question unanswered in article.
 * Will look into it. Could not find any source saying what the treatment was for.


 * "enmity for Nalbandian" should be "enmity towards Nalbandian"
 * done


 * Semi-colon instead of comma in "left the editorial of the monthly in the fall of 1859, however"
 * done


 * parentheses instead of commas to set off "the center of the Armenian church" in 'Travels'
 * done


 * Remove "namely" after Oshakan, unnecessary use of word
 * reworded


 * "the editor of Meghu" instead of "editor Meghu"
 * done


 * "On his way to London" in Travels - it's not clear to the reader at this point why he is going to London instead of Calcutta. This whole section could be cleaned up a little to make it more chronological, or at least more clearly describe where he went, and why.
 * "London propagandists" is in quotes but it's not clear whose perspective it is quoting - clarify
 * "year-long" rather than "year-old" in 'Arrest and death'
 * Oops. Done


 * In 'Views and philosophy':
 * "His views on freedom....economy and culture." - it is not clear to me what this sentence means. Do you mean that he distinguished between these two concepts? Clarify and rephrase.
 * ։։Reworded


 * The first four paragraphs of the section in general could use some reorganizing - it is not clear to me why material is placed where it is - sentences about his views seem in no particular order. For instance, tehre's a sentence about people he admired (such as Robert Owen) without any context, and then two paragraphs later another list of people he admired (such as Goethe). Why the separation?
 * Rearranged the entire section.


 * "saw the solution in agriculture" - the solution to what?
 * Done. Reworded


 * "anti-capitalism" should be "anti-capitalist", or else rephrased to "an opponent of capitalism."
 * done

։։։Moved it up to "Language" section.
 * In 'Works':
 * Why is his rendering of Ghazar Parpetsi's letter given its own paragraph? Could be incorporated into paragraph above (or that paragraph could be split into two and reorganized).


 * Pass. No issues. Nicely structured.
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 * Overall well-sourced
 * What is the source for this prominent sentence in 'Views and philosophy':
 * "The epithet 'revolutionary democrat'....19th century Russian radicals."
 * I actually removed that sentence because it doesn't add anything to the article.


 * What is the source for this section in 'Poetry':
 * "'Freedom' has become an anthem... most popular pieces... Meghu in 1860."
 * Done.


 * Most sources non-English (Armenian). Reliance on several journal articles not available in translation. Assume good faith - peer-reviewed in any case. Pass.


 * Pass.


 * Pass. No issues.
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 * Seems comprehensive based on research - I'm assuming given the lack of any mention here or elsewhere that Nalbandian was never married or had any children? Pass.
 * Yes, he was not married and did not have any children.


 * Well balanced in discussion of the subject's legacy and life. Pass.


 * No notable neutrality issues. Covers Armenian/Russian nationalist issues in a clear and neutral manner. Pass.


 * No issues, most work done in February.
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 * No issues. Pass.


 * Overall images are pretty good
 * The caption for the Hyusisapayl image should make clear it was established/connected to Nalbandian


 * The image in the 'Travels' section, currently captioned 'Nalbandian', needs a better caption - where/when/how old?
 * ✅. It's unknown.


 * The caption that references "Leo" in 'Views and philosophy" should make clear who that is, or else have a different caption entirely, as this is the first mention of "Leo" in the article


 * The caption for the fedayi is interesting but needs to be a bit shorter
 * ✅. Shortened


 * I think we only need one image of the statue in Yerevan, not both - no preference as to which stays and which goes.
 * ✅. Removed the closeup photo.

, thank you for your fixes! I appreciate your hard work on this article. :) There are still a few things to be taken care of, but I think we're well on the way to a successful GA article in the next few days. Ganesha811 (talk) 16:08, 23 October 2019 (UTC)