Talk:Minneapolis wireless internet network/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: -- DQ  (t)   (e)  12:15, 29 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Status: ✅ -- DQ  (t)   (e)  19:50, 10 May 2011 (UTC)

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(I don't think you're done with the review, but I hope you don't mind if I start work on these. It's okay, right?)
 * It's all good and that actually gives me a better chance at passing you :P -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Sourcing: The whole lead is unsourced.
 * I wrote the lead under the assumption that none of the information within it was controversial enough to warrant citation, and as it's a direct summary of the article's contents, all facts mentioned are definitely cited elsewhere. I'm basing that on WP:LEADCITE (as well as its practical application throughout the encyclopedia, such as the three most recent TFAs (though not the fourth most recent TFA)) but obviously, I can go through and place citations in the lead if you think it would help. Again, I'm personally not a huge fan of citations in the lead, but, really, that's just me. Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 00:59, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Hmm...do see you point, and I have seen some of this before. I will take a second look over it when I do my next chunk of reviewing, and I will be looking for items that aren't sourced that are almost statistical (or are too detailed) for the lead. I'm just more worried about extreme overdetailing and sourcing issues as it's not your idea. -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- DQ  (t)   (e)  11:56, 6 May 2011 (UTC)


 * WP:FUTURE: "Nonetheless, the firm is making a $1.2 million profit yearly" that's a bit of a guess, no?
 * I don't see it as a conflict with FUTURE. Here, let me provide you with the text from the source, which I realize is in a locked database. "Three years into offering service, the Minneapolis Wi-Fi network is showing a $1.2 million annual profit and has about 20,000 customers." -Alexander, Brandt. 2010. The source states that the network is currently making that profit, not that they will be. Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 00:59, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Yep, saw the soruce, I don't like the fact that it estimates or seems to assume that that is the yearly profit. Remember if I'm looking this up for the first time and not 100% fluent in english, I could think that it means they have 1.2M yearly and that's going to continue. -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay, I changed it so that it isn't a generalization now, but merely the fact implied by the article. Should be good. Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 04:43, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- DQ  (t)   (e)  11:56, 6 May 2011 (UTC)


 * WP:HISTMERGE: Your article that you originally had, needs to be merged by an administrator instead of copypaste.
 * Drat. Okay, thanks. I'll place the tag on the talk page and we'll see what happens. Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 00:59, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks, but ya...it needs it, I will ping an admin on IRC when I remember to get it done for you. -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks fixed! Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 13:31, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- DQ  (t)   (e)  11:56, 6 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Confusing: starting a quote with '"is always' doesn't let the sentence flow.
 * Actually make that the first two sentences of Emergency Preparedness as confusing.
 * Paraphrased the quote and (ideally) clarified those two sentences. Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 00:59, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Confusing: "the network's usage did mushroom from" mushroom?
 * Guess who has two thumbs and can be overly flowery when writing. *this guy* Changed to 'expand'. <b style="color:#660000; font-family:Andalus;">Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 00:59, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ :) -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Sources: Your library links are locking us out, and if you google the article name, you can usually get an article. Could we replace those dead links please? -- DQ  (t)   (e)  17:19, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * All replaced with links from the Star Tribune, or Business Wire. Ref #9 isn't available in the free full form, but I linked to an official Star Tribune archive of it that cites the first two paragraphs or so and offers it for purchase. I hope that's okay. <b style="color:#660000; font-family:Andalus;">Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 07:26, 7 May 2011 (UTC)

Comments
Units of measure Hope that helps Lightmouse (talk) 15:43, 30 April 2011 (UTC)
 * It mentions 'miles' without conversion. A value in km would make the article more accessible.

✅! <b style="color:#660000; font-family:Andalus;">Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 03:16, 1 May 2011 (UTC)


 * I do have one question for you, this is a brand new article, why did you nominate it for Good Article already and not let some other people wiegh in on it a bit first? (This is just an interest to me and doesn't effect the review at all) -- DQ  (t)   (e)  02:34, 4 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Well, it's not a hugely well-known topic, for starters, so it doesn't have an automatic audience. Not that I'm overly hasty or any such thing, but in the week or so that it's been up, it has been edited by one person other than myself, an IP who changed one of the URLs of one of the sources from a locked database to the newspaper's website. Meanwhile, I am in the process of getting this article on DYK, and I think that it'd probably be a good idea not to pass this article (provided that I get it to GA quality) until it's up there and gets the visibility which might allow other editors to work with it. Above all, though, I think I just had a lot of faith in this article, and maybe a little pride, too. I've helped get other articles to GA status before, but they've always been preexisting ones. I wrote this article over a few days, and I just kind of wanted to keep up the swift momentum and jump to GA ASAP. I know that it's happened plenty of times in the past that articles have gone from sandbox to GA before they hit DYK and I thought it'd make a decent goal for myself. That was a little random and rambling. Sorry. Hope it answers the question. Thanks for your thorough review! <b style="color:#660000; font-family:Andalus;">Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 03:36, 4 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Oh, and plus I didn't expect anyone to review this article for several months, so I figured I should add my name to the queue early. <b style="color:#660000; font-family:Andalus;">Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 04:45, 4 May 2011 (UTC)


 * This article has been on DYK now. A few editors did some copyediting stuff to it, and I think it came out in a much better condition than when it went in. Just FYI. <b style="color:#660000; font-family:Andalus;">Bob</b> Amnertiopsis ∴<sub style="color:#FF9999; font-family:Tunga;">ChatMe! 16:12, 10 May 2011 (UTC)


 * ✅ :) This is now a GA. -- DQ  (t)   (e)  19:49, 10 May 2011 (UTC)