Talk:Miracle at St. Anna/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 22:35, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:35, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
Overall this looks quite strong and ripe for promotion. It perhaps relies a bit heavily on the the film's press materials, but none of this information seems particularly controversial and overall it does a good job of covering the subject neutrally. I did a few prose tweaks as I went; please feel free to revert any you disagree with.

Here's some points I couldn't immediately resolve myself:
 * "which he believes to carry magical powers" -- is "he" Sam or the boy here?
 * "during the massacre at St. Anna" -- what massacre was this? I'm not sure I follow.
 * could a sentence about Renata's role in the plot be added to the plot summary?
 * "The first ten days of filming took place in the Serchio River" -- should this be on the river? Or did the whole sequence literally take place in the water? (I haven't seen this movie, in case it's not obvious from my comments so far).
 * " A scene that recreates the Sant'Anna di Stazzema massacre was shot on the actual location where the atrocity took place" -- I'm still not clear what role this massacre has in the movie's plot.
 * " Lucas generously allowed" -- It's a minor point, but "generously" seems both POV and unneeded here.
 * "the film currently has a 34% rating" -- "currently" should be rewritten as "As of" or some other formulation to avoid going out of date per WP:REALTIME
 * Could you add what the acronym ANPI stands for? -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:25, 30 April 2013 (UTC)


 * I have read your initial comments, and fixed as much as I could. -- User:FrankRizzo2006 (talk) 24:50, 30 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I think that covers all of the above. I'll start the checklist now and see if there's anything left. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:45, 1 May 2013 (UTC)