Talk:Mirror (Lil Wayne song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 08:00, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reviewing this article.-- N Ø  08:00, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Top
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 * "it was first released to Urban contemporary radio stations as the sixth and final single on September 13, 2011, through Young Money, Cash Money, and Universal Republic Records" -- The word "first" is unnecessary here, and add a link to Urban contemporary
 * "The track was produced three years before its release; Owen, with Mike Caren's help, was able to get the track to several rappers, who rejected it." -- Instead of using the ";", this should be split into two separate sentences.
 * "number 17 in the United Kingdom—Wayne's highest charting single as a lead artist in the UK to date" -- This is false since "Sucker for Pain" went higher.
 * "while Mars sits on top of a ladder singing" -- This would be better phrased as "while Mars sings on top of a ladder"

Release and production

 * No issues.

Background and lawsuit

 * Is there any information on what was the outcome of the 2014 lawsuit?
 * I just googled it and there is indeed. It says that Wayne has to pay 100k, however, I have yet to found a reliable source. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:32, 21 March 2019 (UTC)
 * I have found said reliable source, two in this particular case. Please take a look and give me feedback. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:21, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

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Composition

 * Link all the genres
 * "Various publications stated that Lil Wayne took inspiration from Michael Jackson in one of his verses" -- Since the publications are secondary sources, change "stated" to "speculated"
 * However, it's not speculation. I changed to "affirmed". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:55, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

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Critical reception
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 * "Nathan Slavik writing for DJ Booth praised the track for its 'hit potential'" -- Commas before and after "writing for DJ Booth"
 * "Slavik also complemented Mars 'moving' hook" -- An "'" (apostrophe) is need after "Mars"
 * "Reviewing the album, Omar Burguess of HipHopDX praised Wayne for "pushing the envelope" describing "Mirror" as a concept track." -- Seems unnecessary to state it was an album review.

Commercial performance
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 * "In the United States, "Mirror" debuted at number 16, its peak, on the Billboard Hot 100 and at number six on the U.S. Hot Digital Songs chart" -- Change to "In the United States, "Mirror" debuted at its peak of number 16 on the Billboard Hot 100, and at number six on the Hot Digital Songs chart"
 * "The single peaked at number 22 and 25" -- "Number" should be plural
 * "The BPI certified the song Silver for confirmed sales of over 200,000 units" -- I would remove the word "confirmed" from this sentence.

Music video
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 * "Filming for "Mirror" music video took place in November 2011" -- Replace "'Mirror'" with "the", since readers know the music video must be for the song
 * Vevo does not need to be written in all caps.
 * "As the chorus begins, Wayne is shown painting the room red as Bruno Mars sings, while seated on the top of a ladder intercut with shots of him standing up" -- Ad a comma before "intercut"

Credits and personnel
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 * Remove the names of the record labels after this sentence, as they have been stated before in the lead and also in the reference: "Credits adapted from the liner notes of Tha Carter IV (Deluxe Edition)"

Live performances

 * This section is necessary since the lead says he has performed it on tours.
 * There are no other reliable sources regarding the performances. I can change the sentence; "Wayne performs the song during his tours → Wayne has performed the song live" or equivalent to this.

Outcome
Once all the concerns are addressed, I will promote the article.-- N Ø  08:00, 21 March 2019 (UTC)
 * I believe I have address all the concerns you raised. Please take a look as I have left a couple of questions. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:32, 22 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Everything looks ready except it still needs a live performances section.— N Ø  17:22, 22 March 2019 (UTC)
 * You want me to make a live performance section saying what exactly? That he performed it on a tour? I only found one source...seems a little redundant, henceforth I added it to the top of the article. Why don't I change the "Critical reception" to Reception and add the live performance there? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:44, 22 March 2019 (UTC)
 * It should be written out in the article body too, not just the lead. I would suggest giving it its own section if he has included it on 3 or more tours. But if there were less performances than that then it works as part of another section. Actually I googled for any possible performances, but there were no reliable sources covering any of them. So the live performance section is impossible and not needed. Congrats on the GA.— N Ø  17:52, 22 March 2019 (UTC)

thank you for taking the time to review the article. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:58, 22 March 2019 (UTC)