Talk:Miss Brill

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So, it seems like a lot of people are similarly dissatisfied with the writing here. I'm gonna try to fix it up. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 170.140.105.16 (talk) 12:52, 25 September 2013 (UTC)

I deleted the text because it can be retrieved with the external link, and adding the text is not a guideline of the WikiProject Novels (short story task force).Zigzig20s 10:41, 15 July 2007 (UTC)

08:08, 30 August 2007 (UTC)Nightblade52== text ==

sorry to say, but the little bit of information in this article doen't even touch the surface of this story. It doesn't hit on the fact that she does what she does because she is extreamly lonely, or anything else.

Nightblade52

I agree. The article doesn't even touch on the deep motifs of the story. I'm a senior in high school and our AP lit class hit on so much more in the novel. For example, the fur around her neck mimmics the same emotions as she does through the story. This article would only help organize the thoughts of someone who had previously read the story. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 207.118.28.94 (talk) 03:38, 14 February 2008 (UTC)


 * That is an interpretation and it would have to be referenced. Please feel free to add it if you can find a reference from a book of literary criticism.Zigzig20s (talk) 04:11, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

Encyclopedic Style?
The article needs some serious revision; it reads like something written by a high school freshman. My main problem is this section under "Plot":

"On her way home, a typical Sunday would involve the purchase of cake at the bakery, but instead she went home into her own dark room. As she quickly put her fur back in its box, she hears a cry, this cry is Miss Brill. The reason why the story says, "she thinks she hears a cry"[7] is because Miss Brill does not want to accept that she is the one crying, or accept herself for that matter. Mansfield's personification throughout the passage reveals a sense of loneliness belonging to Miss Brill for she not only fabricates a connection with the other park goers, but also personifies her inanimate piece of clothing by conversing with it as well as feeling for it."

Structures like "the reason is because" and plain grammatical mistakes are distracting and incorrect. I am afraid any revisions I make will be reversed; an experienced editor needs to go through and edit it for encyclopedic style. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.252.81.77 (talk) 03:26, 5 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Feel free to try improving it yourself. Use an edit summary explaining what you are doing, and include in it "See talk page". I do suggest that you not make the plot summary any longer than it already is as some editors dislike lengthy plot sections. You could break it into paragraphs however.- gadfium 20:34, 5 September 2012 (UTC)


 * I've fixed the paragraphs. I see someone did try to rewrite the section last month, but they first blanked it, which is not acceptable, and then they gave their own impressions of the writing style and included no references, which was enough for an automated reversal of the edit.- gadfium 20:39, 5 September 2012 (UTC)

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