Talk:Mitt Romney/Archive 22

"RfC: Mention how Romney's wealth compares to past presidents?" closed
RfC: Mention how Romney's wealth compares to past presidents? has been closed as to remove/delete the information from the article. I reviewed the article and the article no longer contains the discussed material, so no action was required. Regards, — Moe   ε  02:52, 24 September 2012 (UTC)
 * So, the info was removed from the article before the RfC was closed? Why? Seems like improper procedure not? ~ GabeMc  (talk 22:23, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * That looks like a messed-up closing by Moe. My view is that we ought to have a concise statement that "Romney is among the wealthier candidates to seek the presidency."  The wlink provides further context.  Shall I go ahead and insert this into the article, with a footnote?Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:35, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Sounds good to me. ~ GabeMc  (talk 22:45, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Romney, one of the wealthiest candidates ever to seek the presidency" - WashPo, September 21, 2012. ~ GabeMc  (talk 22:47, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I just inserted the info, though using a different ref.Anythingyouwant (talk) 23:01, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Undone, per the RFC close. Arkon (talk) 23:06, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * The RfC was never properly closed as the info was improperly removed before consensus was reached. Redoing. ~ GabeMc  (talk 23:10, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Then you should speak with the closer. Ignoring the the RFC result, is also, and in my view, much more improper.  Please revert. Arkon (talk) 23:15, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I took the liberty of undoing it myself. There are ways to appeal the RFC if you feel so strongly about it, but simply ignoring it isn't one of them.   Hot Stop     (Edits)   23:20, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * The information was not in the article during the RfC so it was not improperly closed. Arzel (talk) 00:06, 28 September 2012 (UTC)

Affirmation of faith as a matter of routine per anti-Mormon sites
AFAICT "I know that Joseph Smith was a prophet and that the church is true" is a routine affirmation of faith used before testimonies, similar to such affirmations of faith in other churches, and cited in anti-Mormon sites as being routine. We ought to so label it, as it is clear that it was not anything unusual, any more than a person reciting the Apostles Creed would be. ''The church pushes people to say they "know" the church is "true".  etc.  They were the exact wording of so many of those I had heard and shared myself while an active Mormon years before.:''
 * "I bear you my testimony that I know the Book of Mormon is true (or the Word Of God), I know that Joseph Smith is a true Prophet of God (and that Gordon B. Hinckley is the true prophet of God today) and I know that the Church is the only true church on the face of the earth today,

In short - Romney used ritual wording as the prologue to his testimonies, shown as such by anti-Mormon sites, and we ought to specify that it is a form of affirmation of faith. Cheers. Collect (talk) 12:43, 26 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Eustress has removed the whole sentence and I'm okay with that. I don't think that HuffPo story was necessarily the best assessment of Romney's religious belief levels.  Wasted Time R (talk) 00:16, 27 September 2012 (UTC)

Placement of ranger and dog information
The content about a ranger and about the dog is currently placed under the Business career section and under Management consulting. This content has nothing to do with those topics. As these sections are about a specific topic rather than a specific timeframe, it seems the info should be placed elsewhere. 72Dino (talk) 16:56, 26 September 2012 (UTC)


 * The article is organized chronologically (with a couple of concurrency cases where activity overlap occurred), with the section headers corresponding to the most important things that took place during that period, but not necessarily the only things. For example, the "University, France mission, marriage, and children" section has content which doesn't fall under any of those specific items but does in that time period, and the same is true for the "1994 U.S. senatorial campaign", "2002 Winter Olympics", and "Activity between presidential campaigns" sections as well.  And in this case, the wording used - "Two family incidents during this time ..." make it clear that these incidents were not connected to his business activities.  Wasted Time R (talk) 00:22, 27 September 2012 (UTC)

Governorship: Source of financial figures
Same problem as noted at Talk:Governorship of Mitt Romney: some of the state financial figures are sourced from a self-published source, DWS Investments. Use of an official government source, or, failing that, a neutral independent source, would be preferable. Dezastru (talk) 19:14, 28 September 2012 (UTC)

Anti-Mormon/Romney Attack Book
I removed a book listing that is questionable at best. The book is little more than a vehicle to attack Mormonism and Romney. Regardless of what you think about any Mormon's, this kind of religous hatred has no place in his personal BLP. Furthermore it is not listed (from what I could see) on Amazon. Arzel (talk) 01:14, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The "Bibliography" section, where it was added and correctly reverted, only contains books that are used as sources within the article, which this one obviously isn't. The "Further reading" section contains other books, and is where this would go if it was worthy ... which it isn't.  It's published by some no-name garage outfit and their blurb for it states that "[The author] reveals that Mormonism, Mitt Romney's tradition, is not actually a religion but a synthetic ideology sponsored by British intelligence, as part of their campaign of covert warfare against the United States."  'Nuff said.  Wasted Time R (talk) 01:43, 5 October 2012 (UTC)

47%
How come there is not even a mention on the controversial statement captured on tape about the 47%? Cwobeel (talk) 16:18, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Isn't that more within the scope of the article on the campaign? alanyst 16:22, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * (ec) Because it is already covered more appropriately at Mitt Romney presidential campaign, 2012 than at this BLP. 72Dino (talk) 16:24, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Per WP:SUMMARY we ought to include salient items from the Presidential campaign, and this is one of the most salient ones. I will summarize ina short sentence. Cwobeel (talk) 20:22, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I agree with Cwobeel. Topical articles are being used here as a way to remove contentious material from Mitt Romney. How can this article be comprehsive without covering the most important aspects of the 2012 election cycle? Why not start an article Romney and the Olympics, so all the flattering material about how great he was there could also be removed. There is already an article on his business career, yet we still go into some detail here about Bain. Though, I suspect that any negative material about Bain wold go to the topical article. ~ GabeMc  (talk 20:26, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * GabeMc, if you're suggesting that any negative material has been moved to the topical article about his business career, that is 100% incorrect. Since that topical article was created, not one word about his business career has been removed from the present article.Anythingyouwant (talk) 20:40, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Well thats good news, thanks for the clarification. ~ GabeMc  (talk 20:44, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * My preference has been to wait until we know which factors during the general election campaign were major factors in causing the outcome. Was it Clint and the empty chair and little bounce out of the convention?  The Libya statement?  47%?  Mitt's failure to connect with everyday people?  Dissention within the campaign?  Media bias?  Failure to 'vet' Obama?  I've seen all these theories.  I tend to agree that 47% is probably the most damaging of all of these, and some I think are a big zero, but what objective metric actually tells us?  Nate Silver is exploring some of this, but nothing conclusive yet.  Wasted Time R (talk) 23:38, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, it remains to be seen—debate Wednesday will be telling. Over 80% of Americans believe that everyone should pay at least a little in income tax.  So pointing out that 47% do not may not hurt the Romney bid as much as left-leaning media would have everyone believe. I'm sure it will come up in the debate, both from Obama and from Romney. Will it hurt or help in the final vote count in November? Charles Edwin Shipp (talk) 00:18, 29 September 2012 (UTC)
 * It will surely be a topic on the debate, so we can wait till then before adding. Nate Sliver piece about the impact of these comments is here: http://fivethirtyeight.blogs.nytimes.com/2012/09/28/sept-27-the-impact-of-the-47-percent/ Cwobeel (talk) 02:27, 30 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Quite interesting in that it was not mentioned once in the debate on the economy, much to the dismay of Chris Matthews. Arzel (talk) 01:15, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * To the surprise of everyone, Romney debate preppers included I'm sure. In any case, there's enough time passed now to see that 47% has been a major event in the campaign, so I've added it to the campaign section.  I've also added the first debate  to the section.    Wasted Time R (talk) 11:30, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I question just how much of the campaign it has become given everything else that has happened. I did remove one sentence that was pure opinion about the magnitude of the impact.  Arzel (talk) 14:56, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * You also removed Romney's own statements in reaction, which I think was accidental. One editor restore one of them, I've restored the other.  Wasted Time R (talk) 01:00, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, that was accidental. Thanks.  Arzel (talk) 14:11, 6 October 2012 (UTC)

"Half true"
Collect, regarding this change that you just made, I am okay with removing the word "scheme", but disagree on this rest. We don't need in-text attribution of Politifact, nor do we need to use their somewhat oxymoronic "Half true" label. That's lame. And how is the reader supposed to understand what "half true" means here? What we should do instead is paraphrase what Politifact concluded. They say: "Romney was head of Marriott’s audit committee at the time. Experts disagree on whether the corporate board would have known about the deal and had the chance to question it. The company neither confirmed nor denied that the board approved the transaction. At some point, the board would have approved filings that included the fraudulent losses, but it’s unclear whether Romney specifically favored the tax move." That's what this Note was trying to say: "... during Romney's time as chair, Marriott implemented the Son of BOSS tax shelter scheme [description of losses and federal courts action]. It is not clear whether Romney specifically approved the use of the scheme at the time." Why is this not an accurate paraphrase? Wasted Time R (talk) 13:44, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Nope - Politifact is used as the reliable source and so its statement properly belongs in the text. And they used the term specifically "Half True.  It is intellectually dishonest to elide what the source states in black and white. Collect (talk) 21:23, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Collect, that's a bit of an untenable stance. It's like saying anytime we use a newspaper story as  a source, we have to quote the story title or story lead sentence or the story final conclusion verbatim in the article.  We don't do that, of course; we paraphrase whatever part of the newspaper story is relevant to what our text is using.  There is nothing special about Politifact or the other fact checkers as sources, and many FA/GA-level articles paraphrase the fact checkers' findings rather than restating their "Pinocchios" or "Pants on Fire" conclusions.  Furthermore, "Half true" is hardly the black-and-white conclusion you seem to think it is!  Wasted Time R (talk) 22:40, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Huh? Yo object to using the exact language of a source because you don't like it?  Sorry - I did not find that as a reason not to use a quote in any Wikipedia policy at all.  If we use a source, we use what is in the source, not just what we want to find in the source.   Cheers. Collect (talk) 22:54, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * There is no disagreement on substance here - the article's old text that I quoted above is the same as Politifact's "Half true". (Unless you see a difference that I don't, in which case please point it out.)  I'm simply objecting to the style of introducing Politifact's ratings, which are intended for campaign silly season, into a biographical narrative that has nothing to do with a campaign. Wasted Time R (talk) 23:04, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The problem, as I see it, is the implied nature. In it's most simple interpretation.  "Marriott did something implicitly bad when Romney was chair.  We don't know if Romney had anything to do with this....but we are just saying.  ;)"  This is how it reads.  Arzel (talk) 14:10, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Marriott did something explicitly bad (i.e. ruled illegal) when Romney was chair. Yes, we don't don't know if he approved it, or knew about it, or should have known about it (in the pre-Enron era, plenty of boards were sleepy).  But saying "half true" is worse than saying what is known and what is not known.  Also note that I've pushed this into a Note now, which I think is more appropriate. Wasted Time R (talk) 14:25, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I didn't think it was ruled illegal until sometime after. It seems a little revisionist to say something is illegal today and then go back to the past when it wasn't illegal and make an issue out of it as if it were.  There are all kinds of things that are "illegal" today that were not when I was younger, I bet Romney drove "illegally" when he was younger by not using a seatbelt or a child seat for their kids.  I realize this is off on a little bit of a tangent, it just bothers me in general when events of the past are judged through the prism of today which is what this appears to be.  Arzel (talk) 17:15, 6 October 2012 (UTC)

Don't revert solely due to "no consensus"
This revert is problematic. See WP:Don't revert solely due to "no consensus". Please provide reasons. Thanks.Anythingyouwant (talk) 00:50, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Dezastru, as you have no doubt seen, the article has been gone over top to bottom as part of an ongoing FAC. While the vast majority of changes have been stylistic, some content changes have occurred as well, and both kinds of changes have affected 'previously agreed upon' portions of text.  Anythingyouwant's changes in the Political positions took place in this FAC context.  Rather than treat them as a whole, you should explain case by case what you object to, and then they can be talked out here.  Wasted Time R (talk) 01:16, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the explanation. I had not been closely following the back-and-forth in the FAC discussion, so I was surprised to see changes appearing that affected the meaning, rather than just the style, of some parts of this section. Dezastru (talk) 19:11, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

Here are my views on the additions in question:

Position on judicial nominations
Adding "More generally, he supports judges 'who know the difference between personal opinion and law.'" This is a pretty vacuous strawman argument on the part of Romney. I don't think it needs to be here in the summary section.Wasted Time R (talk) 01:32, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Here is Dezastru's edit: " More generally, he supports judges 'who know the difference between personal opinion and law.' "
 * This stricken material is clearly supported by the source, and it is very brief. It is critical here for several reasons.  First, it is a general statement about judicial philosophy, rather than being confined to one particular issue, and so it is fitting for this main article about Romney.  Second, this purportedly "vacuous" argument is the central thesis of conservatives regarding the judiciary and judicial nominations; it is implicitly an accusation that liberals/progressives have appointed judges who excessively insert their own personal opinions into the judicial process.  Whether we believe this accusation to be true or false is beside the point; if true it would be a very notable abuse of judicial power, and surely it is notable that Romney believes that it is true.  The third reason why this is critical is because it suggests that Romney does not have any litmus test that nominees must share any particular personal opinions in order to merit an appointment.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:42, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Since there's no judge alive who claims to rule based upon personal opinion rather than the law, and since judges of all ideological stripes have been accused of judicial activism, it would be better to identify which of the models of judicial interpretation that judges do admit to - Judicial minimalism, Judicial restraint, Living Constitution, Original intent, Original meaning, Strict constructionism, etc. - Romney thinks best and would make appointments based upon. Wasted Time R (talk) 09:31, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * To my knowledge, Romney has not explicitly used one of those labels to describe his judicial philosophy. Instead, his web site uses plain language that indicates that he is an advocate of textualism and "restrained judges".  Per USA Today: "Romney says his judicial appointees 'will exhibit a genuine appreciation for the text, structure, and history of our Constitution and interpret the Constitution and the laws as they are written.'"  So he is a textualist. See Catalina Camia Who would Romney appoint to Supreme Court?, USA Today (October 1, 2012).Anythingyouwant (talk) 19:09, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Wasted has summed up my disagreement with inclusion of the statement very well. There is no president and certainly no judge or justice who would disagree that all judges must know the difference between personal opinion and law. Anythingyouwant writes that "it is implicitly an accusation that liberals/progressives have appointed judges who excessively insert their own personal opinions into the judicial process"; yet this Wikipedia article is intended for a very wide audience, including many readers who would have no understanding of that implicit meaning.
 * As an alternative, I would agree with a statement indicating that Romney has said he would appoint justices with a strict constructionist philosophy (with a wikilink to strict constructionism), as such as statement would be informative for all readers and would make a meaningful distinction between the position Romney holds on judicial appointments and the positions held by other prominent American politicians. (The topic was discussed, for example, at a Fox News presidential candidate forum beginning roughly @07:34.)
 * The label "strict constructionist" perfectly illustrates the danger of using labels that mean different things to different people. In the video that Dezastru points to, Romney says that Scalia is a "strict constructionist", but Scalia himself says otherwise.  Scalia says he is "not a strict constructionist and no-one ought to be," and has called the philosophy "a degraded form of textualism that brings the whole philosophy into disrepute." Scalia says, "[a] text should not be construed strictly, and it should not be construed leniently; it should be construed reasonably, to contain all that it fairly means."  In the video that Dezastru points to, Romney explains in ordinary language (without ambiguous labels) that he wants judges who "follow the Constitution as written and intended, and follow the laws of Congress as written and intended, rather than having the Supreme Court see its role as springing from or departing from the Constitution and laws to put in place their own views."  I do not see the problem with simply saying that "Romney promises to appoint judges who interpret the Constitution and laws as written and intended."  Consider judges who say the death penalty is unconstitutional in all cases; I don't think any of those judges have ever asserted that that position is contained in the Constitution as written and intended (the Constitution repeatedly discusses capital crimes, deprivation of life, et cetera).Anythingyouwant (talk) 20:09, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * It's not our job to parse Romney's language. If Scalia objects to being called a strict constructionist, then that should go in the Scalia article or the strict constructionism article. It's not appropriate for this article, given the space limits. That's why we have Wikilinks. The problem with including Romney's saying judges should "follow the Constitution as written and intended, and follow the laws of Congress as written and intended, rather than having the Supreme Court see its role as springing from or departing from the Constitution and laws to put in place their own views" in this article is that that statement, like the earlier one, does not help distinguish Romney's position from those of other politicians and jurists. Almost everyone agrees that judges should follow the Constitution and the laws as written and intended. The strict contructionist designation offers a more nuanced yet succinct description, whether valid or not, of his judicial philosophy. Dezastru (talk) 04:09, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The term "strict constructionist" is technical legal mumbo jumbo that different judges and lawyers interpret in different ways, and so it is not the best way to describe Romney's position here. Even if you are correct that "almost everyone agrees" with the statement by Romney that judges should comply with the letter and intent of the law (and I believe you are incorrect given, e.g., the stance taken by judges who deny the death penalty's constitutionality), still this statement by Romney indicates his emphasis.  Certainly President Obama's emphasis is different; Obama is not going around saying that he wants judges who will interpret laws in conformity with what the framers understood those laws to mean.Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:39, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * None of these quotes from Romney explicitly talks about framers either (and even originalists disagree about which framers 'count'). Another alternative would be to use one of Romney's statements about which current justices he likes and would appoint like minds of.  Wasted Time R (talk) 10:34, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The language that I'm suggesting is this: ""Romney emphasizes that he would appoint judges who interpret the Constitution and laws as written and intended, and says he would appoint judges in the mold of Chief Justice John Roberts, and Justices Clarence Thomas, Antonin Scalia, and Samuel Alito.” I don't think it would be useful to say stuff about judicial restraint or strict constructionism (both of which Romney has explicitly favored) because then we'd have to give some brief description of what those terms mean, and they mean different things to different people.  Merely including a wikilink to judicial restraint would be inadequate; per WP:Link, "use a link, but do not make a reader be forced to use that link to understand the sentence...." Anythingyouwant (talk) 14:38, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Agree with Wasted and Anythingyouwant that listing specific examples of the kinds of judges he would appoint is helpful. Disagree that saying he would appoint judges who interpret the Constitution and laws as written and intended is helpful or appropriate. I've changed that language and added "strict constructionist" judges. Incidentally, this sentence is sandwiched in a paragraph discussing abortion, but it really applies much more broadly in terms of his position on judicial appointments, so I've moved it to a separate paragraph. (It needn't remain in its own whole paragraph, but it should not be placed within the material on abortion while it also applies to his position on same-sex marriage constitutionality, civil liberties vs. war-time defense rulings, etc.) If Romney says he would appoint "strict constructionist" judges, the statement is de facto evidence of his emphasis. The combination of a Wikilink to strict constructionism and the inclusion of his particular examples of what kinds of judges he has in mind should overcome concerns about WP:Link, particularly since "strict constructionist" is a term in common usage among laypersons, not just technical legal mumbo jumbo. Dezastru (talk) 19:10, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I have moved the judicial nomination material up a little so it is juxtaposed with the already-existing material about the kind of judges he would appoint. Also, a one-sentence paragraph is something to generally avoid; I added a sentence.  The paragraph now says: "He has said that he would appoint federal judges in the mold of Chief Justice John Roberts, and Associate Justices Clarence Thomas, Antonin Scalia, and Samuel Alito.[353][354] Romney favors restrained judges and has advocated strict constructionism.[355][354]"  I believe that using these labels, without giving readers some idea of their various meanings (or at least what they mean to Romney), is contrary to the Wikipedia policy that I quoted above, and I don't like it, but it would be preferable to avoid an edit war.  No one has disputed that Romney emphasizes that he would appoint judges who interpret the Constitution and laws as written and intended, and no one has contended that President Obama is emphasizing the same thing.  I am emphatically against this article saying that Romney calls Scalia a strict constructionist, because that is the single most confusing thing that Romney has ever said about judicial nominations (given that Scalia denies being a strict constructionist).Anythingyouwant (talk) 19:51, 9 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The term "strict constructionist" is used in common parlance. I do not think "restrained judge" is. The introduction of that latter term does start to risk violating WP:Link. The phrasing I suggested was "He has said that he would appoint [[strict constructionism|strict constructionist]] federal judges in the mold of Chief Justice [[John Roberts]], and Associate Justices [[Clarence Thomas]], [[Antonin Scalia]], and [[Samuel Alito]]." If your complaint is that Scalia vehemently opposes being characterized as a strict constructionist, his name can be removed: "He has said that he would appoint [[strict constructionism|strict constructionist]] federal judges in the mold of Chief Justice [[John Roberts]], and Associate Justices [[Clarence Thomas]] and [[Samuel Alito]]." Romney's meaning is quite clear from that statement; the inclusion of Scalia's name is not necessary. (Also, I also can't see anything at the link that was included for mittromney.com on the courts and judicial appointments page -- not sure whether this is a quirk of my browser or computer. I can see the content from google's cache, but not through the direct link.) Dezastru (talk) 21:44, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * You've asked to omit a plain-language description of the criteria Romney emphasizes for judicial nominees, and I have acquiesced to that. WTR has asked to insert the names of judges who would be models for Romney's nominees, and I have acquiesced to that.  You have asked to insert Romney's self-characterization as a "strict constructionist" and I have acquiesced to that too, even though it appears that he was using that term in an idiosyncratic way different from the way judges like Scalia use the term.  What I strongly oppose and will not acquiesce to is us using Romney's idiosyncratic use of this term to label judges (Scalia or anyone else) as "strict constructionist", when that is not necessary in order to convey clear information to the reader, and in fact will likely be confusing to the reader.
 * The link to mittromney.com works fine for me; that's where he says that he supports "restrained judges who will take seriously their oath to discharge their duties impartially...." The google cache is here.  Also see O’Neill, Tyler.  “Obamacare Ruling Energizes Pro-Life Movement”, Fox News (July 3, 2012): “he would ‘nominate judges who respect the Constitution, are proponents of judicial restraint and know the difference between personal opinion and the law.’”  If we can have an obscure and idiosyncratic reference to strict constructionism in this Wikipedia article, that at least ought to be balanced by Romney's embrace of judicial restraint.
 * This article is in the middle of a FAC review, so I hope there will be some flexibility on both sides, in order to get this resolved. But if not, then so be it.Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:04, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The mittromney.com cite isn't necessary, and I've removed it, as the USA Today piece and Huckabee appearance both name the four justices, the latter also talks about strict constructionism, and the Fox News piece talks about judicial restraint. I think the ordering that's in the text now (four names first, Mitt's judicial philosophies second) avoids any potential conflict about what Scalia self-identifies as.  I did condense the description of the justices - it wasn't clear from the existing text what court they were on, and I don't think Roberts being chief is significant in this context.  Wasted Time R (talk) 00:59, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I do think this is visually choppy though - there are three two-sentence paragraphs in a row, all on related topics. There must be some way of rearranging this into two paragraphs, I would think.  Wasted Time R (talk) 01:01, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * It could be made less choppy by explaining in the second paragraph what Romney means by "judicial restraint" and by "strict constructionism". Would you like me to provide sources about that?Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:25, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * No, less is more in this section. I'm still okay with just going with the list of justices he likes - that pretty much says it all.  Wasted Time R (talk) 02:45, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Except that the previous paragraph makes it sound like he has a results-oriented policy litmus test, which is the exact opposite of what he believes the judicial process is all about.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:09, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, less is more. Agree with Wasted that just listing the names of the justices may be the best option. Dezastru (talk) 17:46, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

Position that FMA would help children
Note that 'FMA' means Federal_Marriage_Amendment FYI, Charles Edwin Shipp (talk) 15:00, 9 October 2012 (UTC)

Adding ", which he believes would benefit children" to his position in favor of the FMA. I think this is marginal - it supplies some of his reasoning, but could also be left to the subarticle.Wasted Time R (talk) 01:32, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I disagree that it is marginal. It is a very short and concise statement that indicates Romney views this as more than involving the rights of adults.  Without this addition, one would misunderstand his position as merely opposing rights.  Whether Romney is correct or not is irrelevant to whether we should briefly give an accurate characterization of his opinion.  This stricken phrase is clearly supported by the cited source.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:46, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Romney's positions on government recognition of same-sex relationships are complex. The text of the pledge itself makes no mention of his reasons for vowing to support the constitutional amendment, apart from implying that it was not the intent of the Founders that same-sex couples had a right to marriage that the Constitution would protect. He has at other times said that a reason for his opposition to same-sex marriage is that he wants to guarantee the best opportunity for the successful rearing of children, but that does not mean that it is the sole reason for his opposition or that absent that consideration he would support same-sex marriage.
 * Also, note that the first line of the paragraph does not say merely that he opposes same-sex marriage, but that he also opposes (same-sex) civil unions. Does he oppose civil unions because gay couples form civil unions to rear children and he wants to keep that from happening, in order to protect the interests of children? He has said that "it's fine" that same-sex couples adopt children, and he has said that the couples are entitled to that right; at other points he has disclaimed support for same-sex couples' adoption.
 * Leave discussion for his reasons of pledging to support the amendment, and the nuances of his positions on LGBT issues, to the political positions subarticle, where there is the room to cover such material appropriately. Dezastru (talk) 20:15, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * He has repeatedly said that the FMA would help children, and has never said anything to the contrary, so briefly saying so in this Wikipedia article would be totally harmless. This has nothing to do with the Founders, because the FMA would amend what the founders wrote.  By the way, here's Romney's sentence that Dezastru refers to: "I know many gay couples that are able to adopt children. That’s fine. But my preference is that we ... continue to define marriage as the relationship between a man and a woman."  And the latter position is because of his belief that doing so would benefit children; he's said so many times.Anythingyouwant (talk) 21:38, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Again, I would have no objection if you wanted to elaborate on his position on a constitutional same-sex marriage ban, including what he has said about the importance of having a married father and mother for the rearing of children, in the subarticle, where there is more room to go into the nuances. The main article does not allow that degree of detail. Romney has said, at various times, that he would not seek legal measures to prevent same-sex couples from adopting children. He has said that it was the right of those couples to adopt. (At other points he has taken an alternate position.) With that background, it would be misleading to say or imply that Romney has pledged to seek a constitutional amendment barring same-sex marriage BECAUSE he wants to ensure kids grow up with a mom and a dad at home, without providing more information about the various positions he has taken. Dezastru (talk) 02:44, 9 October 2012 (UTC)


 * At the end of the day, the amendment itself says nothing about children or any other rationale; it's a blanket prohibition, and that's what Romney is supporting. I think Dezastru is right here - we should state his support for the amendment and leave everything else, including the juxtaposition of his rationale with his other positions around the subject, for the subarticle.    Wasted Time R (talk) 10:42, 9 October 2012 (UTC)

Position on Ryan budget
Adding "several aspect" modifier to his embrace of the Ryan budget. This sentence has always been trouble here, and another editor is questioning it at the FAC. I don't have any good answers here (my own preference would be to leave the Ryan budget out completely, but I doubt I'll get much agreement on that).Wasted Time R (talk) 01:32, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I don't really have a position one way or the other about whether the Ryan budget should be left out completely. But if it's included, then it ought to be done in a way that is NPOV.  Currently, the article says: "He embraced the Paul Ryan Budget.[360][361]".  This is obviously and blatantly incorrect, inasmuch as the second cited source from Politico (361) is titled: "Mitt Romney hugs Paul Ryan, but not budget". Therefore, I support either removing reference to the Ryan Budget, or alternatively modifying the sentence to read "He embraced several aspects of the Paul Ryan Budget.[360][361]".Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:56, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I think we are on the same page on this, Anythingyouwant. Based on the discussion of this topic at Talk Archive 18, I changed "He embraced the Paul Ryan budget" to "He has also strongly supported the directions of the federal budget proposed by Paul Ryan in March 2012. Naapple slapped that down, and no one has since made any further modifications of the text until your recent change to "aspects of." The problem with "aspects of" is that it overdilutes Romney's early support for the Ryan plan. One could reasonably read "aspects of" to mean, say, two points out of a 30-point plan (number of points made up for sake of argument). "Supported the directions of" indicates that his support was for the the plan as a whole, on balance. Dezastru (talk) 20:55, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "Supported the directions of" is a somewhat awkward construction. The Politico source says: "After Romney’s speech introducing Ryan, advisers said the former Massachusetts governor has no intention of being handcuffed to all the specifics of Ryan’s plans — though he has said in the past that he’d sign Ryan’s budget if passed by Congress.  'He has said it moves us in the right direction. He has said that if it’s sent to him, he would sign it. And he has said that he will put forward his own plan,' said one senior Romney adviser."  So we could say that Romney views Ryan's plans as being steps in the right direction, without committing to all of Ryan's specifics.  The text in the Wikipedia article right now is blatantly wrong.Anythingyouwant (talk) 21:29, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

Position on fate of auto industry
Expanded description of his position on auto bailouts/managed bankruptcy. I've already modified AYW's original language on this, and I can live with the new text. This is another issue/position that's hard to describe succinctly.Wasted Time R (talk) 01:32, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Here's the version prior to Dezastru's edit: "During the U.S. automotive industry crisis of 2008–2010, he opposed a bailout of the industry in the form of direct government intervention, and argued instead that a managed bankruptcy of struggling automobile companies should be accompanied by federal guarantees for post-bankruptcy financing."
 * Here's the version after Dezastru's edit: "During the U.S. automotive industry crisis of 2008–2010, he opposed a bailout of the industry in the form of direct government intervention, and argued instead that struggling automobile companies should be should be restructured through managed bankruptcy."
 * I can live with the first version (as WTR says he can), but the second version leaves out a key ingredient: Romney supported federal guarantees for post-bankruptcy financing. The second version also inexplicably omits the wlink to the GM Chapter 11.  The second version also presents a false dichotomy between bailout and bankruptcy, when actually both occurred.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:30, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I would accept the following: "During the automotive industry crisis of 2008–2010, he opposed a bailout of the industry in the form of direct government loans, and argued instead that struggling automobile companies should be restructured through managed bankruptcy then seek private-sector loans backed by government loan guarantees." The Wikilink in the previous text linked "managed bankruptcy" to the GM bankruptcy proceedings article inappropriately. The sentence had said that Romney argued for managed bankruptcy. It did not mean by that that Romney was arguing for the managed bankruptcy that GM underwent, which included direct government loans and the US government taking an ownership stake in the corporation (both of which Romney opposed). The link also directed only to GM, not to Chrysler, yet Chrysler also benefited from direct government intervention. Readers who are interested in more information on the specific bankruptcies that occurred can find that information at the article that is linked from "U.S. automotive industry crisis of 2008-2010." Dezastru (talk) 02:28, 9 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I didn't realize that you were going to comment about this item. You disagree with the version that I and WTR agreed on.  As far as I can tell, you have not explained what's wrong with the version that WTR and I agree upon, except that you don't agree with the wikilink.  Regarding the wikilink, I would reluctantly agree to removing it (and have done so), but please reconsider in view of the fact that the Chrysler bankruptcy is a "see also" in the wikilinked article about the GM bankruptcy.  Also, I have moved the word "instead" to a better position, so the sentence says "should instead be accompanied by federal guarantees for post-bankruptcy financing".Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:48, 9 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Romney argued that the auto companies should seek private-sector loans at a time that the private sector was not making any loans, and especially not to auto companies. That was the crux of the financial crisis! The auto companies asked for bailout loans from the government (LOANS, mind you, not cash with no strings attached) because they said that they couldn't find financing in the private sector. The version you are arguing for leaves out any mention of the central role private-sector financing would have played if the plan Romney proposed was to have been successful. Dezastru (talk) 03:53, 9 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I have further edited the article to address your concern. It now says: "During the U.S. automotive industry crisis of 2008–2010, he opposed a bailout of the industry in the form of direct government intervention, and argued that a managed bankruptcy of struggling automobile companies should instead be accompanied by federal guarantees for post-bankruptcy financing from the private sector."  I think it was pretty clear before, but now it's extremely clear.  The banks had plenty of money, and Romney felt that federal guarantees would induce them to loan it.Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:25, 9 October 2012 (UTC)

Position on tax reform
Rephrasing of the first sentence of the tax law changes paragraph. I think either version is okay, but I'd stay away from the word "reform" - one person's reform is another person's bad idea.Wasted Time R (talk) 01:32, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Dezastru changed "Stating that they would lower federal deficits and stimulate economic growth, Romney plans to enact income tax law changes" to "He has also said that, if elected president, he will seek income tax law reforms that he says would help to lower federal deficits and would stimulate economic growth". The two sentences sound pretty much equivalent to me, and I have not objected to either one.  I don't know why Dezastru changed it, but the change is fine with me, although WTR does have a good point about the word "reform", and the "if elected" part does sound a little crystal bally.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:21, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The previous wording was "Stating that they would lower federal deficits and stimulate economic growth, Romney plans to enact income tax law changes." Along the same lines as "presidents can't repeal anything on their own", presidents can't enact any laws on their own. Hence, the change from "plans to enact" to "will seek." To say that "if elected" is crystalbally is an overreading of that policy (and why is there no objection on that grounds to the same construction in the preceding paragraph?).
 * In terms of style, starting the sentence with "stating that they would lower federal deficits and stimulate economic growth," just sounds more clumsy. I have no objection to "changes" as opposed to "reforms," although I think that's a trivial distinction. Dezastru (talk) 21:15, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * In the preceding paragraph, WTR may wish to do this: "Romney says that if elected president, he would lead an effort to repeal the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act ("Obamacare")...." I would have no objection.Anythingyouwant (talk) 21:35, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

Position on jailing Al Qaeda members
"suspect terrorists" versus "Al Qaeda members" - I'd find a different source where Romney is giving his position on suspected terrorists in general. As a practical matter, al Qaeda isn't even well-defined any more, so the general language would be preferable. Wasted Time R (talk) 01:32, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
 * This Wikipedia article currently says: "Romney supports … indefinite detention of suspected terrorists without trial[378]...." But that is not supported by the cited source, which is why (pending citation of some other new source) we should change "suspected terrorists" to "Al Qaeda members".  The cited source is Palazzolo, Joe (January 17, 2012). "Romney booed for support of indefinite detention". The Wall Street Journal.  The source does say that Romney would have signed the National Defense Authorization Act, which President Obama signed, and that NDAA provides for indefinite detention of terrorism suspects without trial. However, the source does not say that Romney agreed with everything in NDAA, and says that Obama did not.  The source says Romney's remarks were directed at Al Qaeda members rather than at terrorists generally, or at "suspected" Al Qaeda members.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:11, 8 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The exchange that the WSJ piece was referring was as follows (emphasis added):


 * Moderator: Governor Romney, when President Obama signed the National Defense Authorization Act into law, he enacted a provision allowing him to indefinitely detain American citizens in U.S. military custody, many, including Congressman Paul, have called it unconstitutional. At the same time the bill did provide money to continue funding U.S. troops. Governor Romney, as president, would you have signed the National Defense Act as written?


 * Romney: Yes, I would have. And I do believe that it is appropriate to have in our nation the capacity to detain people who are threats to this country, who are members of al Qaeda. Look, you have every right in this country to protest and to express your views on a wide range of issues but you don’t have a right to join a group that is killed Americans, and has declared war against America. That’s treason. In this country we have a right to take those people and put them in jail.... But let me tell you, people who join al Qaeda are not entitled to rights of due process under our normal legal code. They are entitled instead to be treated as enemy combatants.


 * //I agree that Romney's response frames the debate specifically in terms of his concern about al Qaeda. The problem is that he is also saying that he would have signed the act "as written", with its blanket inclusion of all persons suspected of terrorism. It would be fair to mention al Qaeda in the Wikipedia article text, but it would need to be in a way that shows that the law that Romney said he would sign as written made no such distinction between al Qaeda and other suspected terrorists. (Note also that the WSJ piece mentioned that Obama signed it with reservations.)


 * I've looked for other statements Romney has made on the record concerning indefinite detention and have come up empty-handed, except for at a town-hall discussion. The media have pretty much ignored this issue. Given that, I would not object to removing this item completely. Dezastru (talk) 22:33, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

Edits to article
I've gone ahead and edited the article to reflect consensus in this discussion. I did not yet edit the FMA stuff, or the judicial nomination stuff, and I hope that people will give further feedback about it. My understanding is that no one has objected to saying that ""Romney emphasizes that he would appoint judges who interpret the Constitution and laws as written and intended, and says he would appoint judges in the mold of Chief Justice John Roberts, and Justices Clarence Thomas, Antonin Scalia, and Samuel Alito." Please correct me if I'm wrong.Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:23, 9 October 2012 (UTC)

Image placement
The images were recently shuffled around. Per MOS:Images:

"Avoid sandwiching text between two images that face each other, and between an image and an infobox or similar."

"It is often preferable to place images of faces so that the face or eyes look toward the text."

Also, images should not force a heading to be indented. Additionally, I think the article is okay in chronological form, instead of segregating out the personal info. So, I'll revert.Anythingyouwant (talk) 15:52, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I see that the images have been shuffled again. I disagree with that for the reasons stated above.  Additionally, co-aligning images is a very normal and appropriate thing to do; see STACKING.  The image shuffling also removed the names of children from the infobox; I don't see any privacy purposes that are served by doing that, if the names of the children are still used later in the article.Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:06, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

Restructuring reverts
I've reverted these good faith restructural edits, since they are major modifications and should be discussed first, especially since this is a high visibility article that is also currently at FAC. —Eustress talk 16:04, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I agree with that revert.Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:03, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

Proposed removal of Lenore pin
There have been some valid concerns of image stacking, and I think the Lenore campaign pin should go. It's not a high-quality image and doesn't even picture Lenore herself. What say you? —Eustress talk 15:02, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Keep. The concern about image stacking is misplaced.  According to Picture tutorial, "It is common to have two pictures that logically should be grouped together." Picture stacking involves a situation where there should be text in between two unrelated pictures.  The image of the button logically goes very well with the image of the poster; both images show the parents' political paraphernalia.  The template used to display these two images would not even allow vertical juxtaposition if that were always "stacking".  And the quality of the button image is more than sufficient to see very clearly what the button looks like.  No one during the ongoing Featured Article Review (or during the previous Peer Review) has objected to this image, and I would support keeping it even if this article had a surplus of images (which it does not).Anythingyouwant (talk) 17:42, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

Proposed removal of BCG logo
Why is this image in the article? He was only with the firm 2 years, and since the image does not even include a pic of Romney, I think this should go. —Eustress talk 15:06, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Keep. This image shows the logo of Boston Consulting Group (BCG), where Romney began his business career.  This colorful little image does not show Romney, but it is unusual for every single image in a featured BLP to show the subject of the BLP.  Moreover, due to its small size, this image does not accompany any biographical text other than the BCG text, which increases rather than decreases the image's relevance.  If we had a surplus of images for this article (which we don't) then this image might be replaced, but until then it seems fine to me, and no one during the ongoing FAC has objected to it.Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:00, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
 * WP:PERTINENCE says images should be "significantly and directly related to the article's topic" -- a criterion the BCG logo does not meet. This is akin to inserting a logo for any other organization with which Romney has had an affiliation (BYU, Harvard, LDS Church). The Bain logo makes sense (although a picture of Romney working at Bain would have more EV) since he co-founded the company and led it for several years, but the BCG logo should go as not meeting the pertinence guideline. —Eustress talk 18:19, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

Here's what the guideline says: Images must be relevant to the article that they appear in and be significantly and directly related to the article's topic. Because the Wikipedia project is in a position to offer multimedia learning to its audience, images are an important part of any article's presentation. Effort should therefore be made to improve quality and choice of images or captions in articles rather than favoring their removal, especially on pages which have few visuals....Articles that use more than one image should present a variety of material near relevant text. Because of the small size of this image, it only accompanies relevant text about BCG. If it were a larger image that necessarily accompanies unrelated text, then I would agree with you. And please also note that this article has "few visuals" prior to the section about the 2008 campaign (therefore the guideline disfavors removal).Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:43, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

Bain Capital and LDS in the lede
The lede says: In 1984, he cofounded and led the spin-off company Bain Capital, a highly profitable private equity investment firm that became one of the largest of its kind in the nation....During his business career, Romney helped to lead a district of The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints in the Boston area; from 1977 until 1994, he served as a member of the lay clergy in a variety of roles, first as a counselor to the president of the stake in Boston, then as the bishop of his ward (head of his local congregation), and later as president of a stake near Boston. This is all accurate, but lopsided. Either too much about LDS or too little about Bain Capital. It seems to me that we should either expand the Bain Capital sentence to identify the particular positions and titles he had in the company, or alternatively truncate the LDS sentence by removing everything after the word "roles".Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:18, 14 October 2012 (UTC)


 * "Cofounded and led" is a succinct description of Romney's role within Bain Capital; I don't think adding "managing general partner" and "CEO" and whatever is going to be of much benefit. One thing you could add is that it started as a venture capital outfit and then switched to private equity.  Adding anything beyond that is likely to run into contentious issues that are typically best avoided in leads.


 * As for the LDS material, I thought that what used to be in the lead was adequate: "Active in The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints, Romney served during his business career as the bishop of his ward (head of his local congregation) and then stake president in his home area near Boston." As for the recent rewrite/expansion of the lead in this area, I wasn't involved.  I have my own problems with it. What is meant by a "district" of The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints?  It isn't linked and the District (LDS Church) article describes is an alternative to a stake, not a synonym of it.  Why is the counselor to the president role included?  That was minor - it deserves mention in the article body but not the lead.  Why are "Boston area", "in Boston", and "near Boston" all included?  It should be possible to refer to the geographical aspect just once.  Why is "local church" so stated?  If there's one thing that three mentions of Boston should have made clear, is that whatever he did was local, not regional or national.  As for adding that his roles are part of being in the lay clergy, I'm okay with that.  As for adding the "1977 until 1994" dates, I would skip the starting date (or use 1981, when he became bishop).  It's okay to say that he stepped down from these roles when he ran for senator, but I'm not sure the mechanics of "After stepping down from Bain Capital ... he resumed his position at Bain Capital" are necessary to include.  We don't describe the mechanics of his Bain Capital -> Bain & Co. return or of his Bain Capital leave of absence during the Olympics (nor should we), so why get into this here?  Readers will assume correctly that he ran for office, didn't win, and carried on with his existing job.


 * But due to recent disagreements in the lead and edit summaries like "Wasted [...] can you really revert me at will at an article on probation?", it would be best if I don't try to change the lead myself. So I leave it to you ...  Wasted Time R (talk) 11:29, 14 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, what I'll do is restore the sentence that used to be in the lead, and then of course any improvements to it can be discussed here at the talk page.Anythingyouwant (talk) 14:08, 14 October 2012 (UTC)

Please edit
In section "Personal Wealth": "In 2010, Romney and his wife received $21.7 million in income, almost all of it from investments such as such as dividends, capital gains, and carried interest." --Minzminz (talk) 15:37, 14 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Fixed, thanks.Anythingyouwant (talk) 15:52, 14 October 2012 (UTC)

Children in infobox
Alrighty now I had recently changed details in the infobox where his 5 sons were named (with birthdates) and I removed the names and replaced them with just the number of kids Romney has (5) as it follows template:infobox person guidelines about only listing notable people in the infobox. none of his sons are therefore only '5' should be in its place. but a fellow editor wanted a concensus before it's changed so alls I want is who is opposed to the change and who supports the change. if you oppose it, i'd like to know your argument on it. thank you :) Lady Lotus (talk) 04:30, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Opposed. The infobox guideline says, "For privacy reasons, consider omitting the names of children of living persons, unless the children are independently notable."  In this situation, the kids are named later in the article, so really it doesn't protect their privacy to keep them out of the infobox.  By the way, if consensus is to put a number in the infobox instead, I think it should be spelled out "five" instead of just the digit "5".  Cheers.Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:35, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Opposed. I understand where Lady Lotus is coming from on this, but Template:Infobox person's rationale seems mostly based upon privacy concerns: "Number of children (e.g. three or 3), or list of names, ... For privacy reasons, consider omitting the names of children of living persons, unless the children are independently notable."  Privacy isn't really an issue here. All are over 30 years old (and their birth dates aren't listed in the article or infobox, just birth years). All have publicly campaigned for their father both in 2007-2008 (the five rented an RV and drove around Iowa on what they called the "Mitt Mobile", see this story from the time for example) and in 2011-2012.  Tagg in particular is credited with playing a large role in the current campaign, see for instance this Politico story from yesterday that attributes a change in campaign direction to him and Ann.  In terms of existing practice for prominent American politicians, looking at those who have FA or GA articles, John McCain lists all the children in the infobox, even though only one has an article, and Al Gore lists all, even though only some have an article; the same is true of Joe Biden and Ron Paul and Scott Brown.  To match this case exactly, Jon Huntsman, Jr. and Jon Corzine list all, even though none has an article.   The only example (non-GA) I ran across that gives just a number of children in the infobox was Joe Lieberman.   So I think on balance, listing out the children in this article's infobox is appropriate.  Wasted Time R (talk) 11:13, 10 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Comment  I'm thinking the word "notable" in the guideline is a problem. Since there's a policy on "notability," the word "notable" is often taken by Wikipedians to mean "passing the bar of notability for article inclusion." However, it's not unreasonable to believe the guideline might simply mean notable in the plain old dictionary sense. This might be something to pursue at the guideline page for clarification. --Tenebrae (talk) 23:00, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Agree with your comment 100%. It is often used as an argument against the removal of something very un-notable.  Arzel (talk) 23:08, 10 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Giving the examples of McCain, Gore and a bunch of other politicians isn't a strong point because it could easily be argued that their infoboxes need to be fixed to omit any non-notable children from it. And yes, it's the word "notable" that is the key point I'm trying to get across. I don't care about privacy concerns because most children even if they are infants are listed on an article page, but none are listed in an infobox unless they have their own article. Infoboxes are supposed to just summarize the person, not give all details. It's been discussed a couple different places and both times it was said to only list the notable children in the infobox and not all of them. WP: Help desk/Archives/2010 March 15/Existing summary boxes in articles and Template talk:Infobox person/Why mention the name of the parents and spouses but not the children Lady Lotus (talk) 15:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Agreed with removal. Too much infobox clutter as is. All children need not be named there. All Hallow&#39;s Wraith (talk) 05:22, 15 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Well I see my argument is sufficient and am going to remove children and replace with number. Lady Lotus (talk) 05:25, 15 October 2012 (UTC).
 * I changed it from "5; Taggart" to "Taggart and four others". Here's my edit summary: "If only one of the five kids is listed in infobox, then this is a simpler format. I'm inclined to list all five, but it's not worth fighting about.   There's no consensus at talk page to list only one, but whatever.".Anythingyouwant (talk) 14:36, 15 October 2012 (UTC)

Restore all names "Taggart and four others" is silly, just list them all since a wikilink is needed for Tagg. —Eustress talk 17:47, 15 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I agree with you, Eustress. But it's not a big deal, and not worth an edit war.  Cheers.Anythingyouwant (talk) 17:55, 15 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Look, the kids are all talked about in the article anyway, the infobox doesn't need to be cluttered with all of their names, just the notable ones. thats the whole point of an infobox, that's the whole point i was trying to make is that the infobox template says to not list any relative or child unless they are notable, i'm not concerned about the privacy concerns, it's about clutter, would you want to list all the kids the Duggars have? I changed it to "5; including Taggart". I agree that before it was maybe a little confusing but I feel like "and four others" doesn't sound as good as it could be. Lady Lotus (talk) 20:13, 15 October 2012 (UTC)

Whitewashing
"A portion of Romney's financial assets are held in offshore accounts and investments". Read the source. Cwobeel (talk) 17:11, 3 September 2012 (UTC)
 * This post originally read that a portion of his assets were held in the Cayman Islands and Switzerland (and now it seems it's been completely deleted). I still say this is significant and should be included.  Again and again we hear the argument that it isn't noteworthy.  How about this, if someone can find proof that any other president in the last 50 years had an account in the Caymans, then we'll drop this.  If it's so common and irrelevant then show us some other presidents who have held assets there.  If they exist, then you're right, the information is irrelevant.  If they don't, then it is significant, as no other president has maintained these sorts of assets.Jasonnewyork (talk) 23:38, 3 September 2012 (UTC)
 * How does it possibly make it relevant if no other President has had money in the Caymans? Uniqueness doesn't factor into it, where he has bank accounts is an incredibly insignificant fact from the propsective of his overall life.  Now if it became the focus of the campaign or if he loses the race and that is shown to be a significant reason or the like then maybe.  Mostly it's an item that, if anywhere, should go in an article on the 2012 presidential race.  I'm no fan of Romney, so don't even accuse me of bias, because my bias is definitely going in the opposite direction.  But I have to say that obviously this is irrelevant trivia in a bio.  We're not talking about a crime for which he's been arrested, while legally keeping money in a Cayman Island bank account may be an area of concern for voters it's not a worthwhile topic for an encyclopedic biography.Jdlund (talk)   —Preceding undated comment added 19:15, 19 September 2012 (UTC)


 * It is nice to see you present your bias so clearly. No need to fill up his bio with democratic talking points and imply that he is doing something illegal.  Arzel (talk) 00:16, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Trivia. Arkon (talk) 00:19, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Arzel's response is that it's a Democratic talking point. If he's right, then it's not trivia.
 * Arzel is wrong on the matter of illegality; it appears that Romney legally ducked taxes. However, legally ducking taxes might be embarrassing, and that is apparently why Arzel wants it stricken from the record.
 * So, no matter how you interpret it, the reasons for not mentioning the specific locations of these banks can only be whitewashing, just as Jason said.
 * In the meantime, this is a good moment for me to remind Arzel that statements of the form "if x happens, then y" are not predictions of the sort that WP:CRYSTAL applies to. Nobody is saying he will or won't become president, only what necessarily follows if he did. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 00:31, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * "Legally ducked taxes" what exactly is that supposed to mean? I suppose the opposite would be that he didn't "Stupidly pay more taxes than required by law".  Why does the left view others peoples money as theirs which was taken from them?  Arzel (talk) 15:27, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * It means that Bain may have converted management fees into carried interest, so that they could avoid paying higher tax rates. baberb


 * None of your comment is in argument of inclusion other than personal attacks and agenda driven drivel. Arkon (talk) 00:35, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * WP:CIVIL, WP:AGF, WP:NPA are three policies your comment violates. Do you want to say anything relevant to building a better article? I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 00:40, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Feel free to do something about your imaginary violations. In the meantime you might want to make a substantial argument for your actions. Arkon (talk) 00:43, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * And to preempt you, yes, I've lost good faith with you. AGF is not a suicide pact. Arkon (talk) 00:45, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, then you're not going to be able to interact with me productively. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 01:30, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * And speaking of not being productive, you do not have anything approaching a consensus for removing the section about how rich he is. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 01:42, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * You've been here long enough to know better. Consensus to -remove-?  Really? Arkon (talk) 01:46, 4 September 2012 (UTC)

If we removed anything that both you and Arzel objected to, there wouldn't be an article left. So, no, that's not sufficient. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 01:59, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * And you again put your competence to shame. Please, count out the edits I've made to this page.  Stop trolling.  Arkon (talk) 02:00, 4 September 2012 (UTC)

Who collapsed this thread? Leave it visible for discussion. I think that the offshore accounts are notable and should be covered. They've been the subject of multiple news articles. I also think it's bad form to use an article talk page to accuse another editor of trolling. If you have evidence of trolling, go present it at WP:ANI, but first read WP:BOOMERANG. Jehochman Talk 14:13, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, every time we try to have a serious discussion on this point it devolves into name calling and uncivility of various incarnations. It's clearly not trivia, or else people wouldn't feel so strongly about it.  There was a tentative compromise reached (that made no one happy but at least it was a compromise), but even that compromise was ultimately deleted.Jasonnewyork (talk) 15:14, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * That is an illogical statement. I feel strongly about not including stupid trivia on articles all the time.  The fact is, this trivia is being used as a Democratic talking point to imply that Romney is doing something bad or immoral.  This not only makes it Trivia, but POV pushing as well.  Arzel (talk) 15:24, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Look up the definition of trivia. It can't be both trivia (unimportant) and a dem talking point (important enough to highlight on a campaign trail).Jasonnewyork (talk) 16:28, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Perhaps you are missing the obvious. Democratic Talking Points are not important, hence they are trivial.  Even moreso this year as the Dems can't seem to decide which talking point to stick with.  Is Romney a far steadfast right radical or a flip-flopper without any core beliefs?  Is Romney rich and out of touch and an evil business owner or a radical theologist that will use the whitehouse to promote the morman religion?  Is he a warhawk or weak?  Look, if you want to go work on the Obama campaign, then by all means, go right ahead, just don't do it here.  Arzel (talk) 17:05, 4 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Are you capable of making a statement without including an ad hominem attack with it? Because that's what you've done in every single one of your comments.  It seems you're violating Wiki civility rules pretty consistently.  That aside, under the trivia clause it states clearly in the wiki lore that you cannot use "trivia" as a reason for exclusion.Jasonnewyork (talk) 01:57, 5 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Where did you read that? To start with, such is firmly embedded within wp:undue/wp:npov. North8000 (talk) 02:11, 5 September 2012 (UTC)
 * From the trivia guidelines within Wikipedia itself. Let me quote it for you:


 * This guideline does not suggest removing trivia sections, or moving them to the talk page. If information is otherwise suitable, it is better that it be poorly presented than not presented at all.
 * This guideline does not suggest always avoiding lists in favor of prose. Some information is better presented in list format.
 * This guideline does not suggest the inclusion or exclusion of any information; it only gives style recommendations. Issues of inclusion are addressed by content policiesJasonnewyork (talk) 04:48, 5 September 2012 (UTC)

The questions I'd ask about the offshore accounts are: Is he in full control of them (as opposed to being governed by a blind trust)? Has he used them to lower his tax burden? Are the amounts in them numerically significant, compared to his overall wealth? If the answer to all of these is 'no', I don't see the importance of these accounts, no matter where they are located. Wasted Time R (talk) 04:04, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

After reading the all the comments, I can no longer view Arzel as objective when it comes to edits on this page. You need to recuse yourself. Larylich (talk) 20:54, 8 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Um -- I think you should understand that editors do not "recuse" themselves on Wikipedia, nor can I find any indication that you have been involved in any discussion at all on this topic, thus your "no onger view" seems a teensy bit odd here. Cheers. Collect (talk) 21:33, 8 September 2012 (UTC)
 * After reading all the comments on this page, I chose to enter it; we all have to begin somewhere. Arzel clearly has a proven a bias in his comments (on this page) and that will effect what gets put in, or left out of the article. Larylich (talk) 22:07, 8 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I find it odd that an editor with almost no edit history would jump in here an attack me. What comment led you to this conclusion?  Arzel (talk) 00:47, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I don't. Don't be coy; there's good reason why your behavior might be noticed. Still, I don't think the topic ban path outlined below is worth pursuing. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 00:50, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * If following WP policies is a badge of shame, then it is one I will wear proudly. What is this topic ban you are throwing about, I am not the one here trying to use WP for politiking.  Arzel (talk) 00:57, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I'm explaining that, as it's unlikely you'll voluntarily recuse yourself, the closest thing is a topic ban. I am, at the same time, not endorsing such a ban. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 01:15, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * That is rich. You are the subject of a possible topic ban, (one which I have not endorsed to this point I should say, because of your battleground attitude), and you only antagonize the issue further by suggesting that I should get a topic ban?  I think I will support a topic ban on you because it is clear you have no intention of ever working collaboratively with anyone that does not hold your personal beliefs.  Arzel (talk) 01:37, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Please read what I actually wrote. I am not endorsing a topic ban for you. I'm explaining that a topic ban is the closest thing Wikipedia has to forcing someone to recuse themselves. You're free to support or oppose a topic ban for me, but it would be nice if you based it on actually understanding what I said. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 01:53, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * We are all biased, but some of us believe our bias is truth, which makes us unable to edit neutrally. I won't defend Arzel, but the reality is that he's not going to voluntarily recuse himself. There is an involuntary process, but it's complicated. I know about it because it's being aimed at me right now, but the short version is an RFC/U followed by a trip to ANI. The short version is much shorter than the reality. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 00:14, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * "...some of us believe our bias is truth, which makes us unable to edit neutrally." Congratulations on recognizing your problem.  In light of this, a topic ban should be voluntarily self-imposed.   Belch fire - TALK  01:57, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Actually, I was thinking of you. Physician, heal thyself. I&#39;m StillStanding (24/7) (talk) 02:00, 9 September 2012 (UTC)


 * There's some serious irony in what you just said. You do see it, right? Naapple (Talk) 06:07, 14 September 2012 (UTC)


 * What quotes from Arzel show bias? "Why does the left view others peoples money as theirs which was taken from them?", replying to someone's point of view: "Look, if you want to go work on the Obama campaign, then by all means, go right ahead, just don't do it here." and "Democratic Talking Points are not important, hence they are trivial." He has not supported any proposed negative topic additions here on the talk page. He's spoken negatively toward Democrats in general throughout this page. Now he's supporting a ban of someone who doesn't agree with him. This shows bias. It's fine to hold a political view, but that must not get in the way of keeping an open mind toward criticism on the side you favor. And, yes, I'm new. Larylich (talk) 09:53, 9 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Can you even hear yourself Larylich? Arzel is obviously attempting to run off any editors who show signs of liberalism. This article has changed quite a bit this past two months and not for the better. Please make some effort to be neutral, versus filtering out everything that could be read wrong by someone. This article used to indicate that Mitt was dating a teenager when he went to college and now that is glossed over as well as many other potentially damaging facts. 72.11.140.159 (talk) 02:35, 10 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Mitt and Ann were high school sweethearts. They started dating when he was a senior and she was sophomore, two years apart.  This has happened approximately a zillion times in American high school life.  But unlike most such cases, they later got married.  And amazingly enough, they are still two years apart in age.  Some editors who lost their minds thought this was a 'damaging fact' and removed that Ann was two years younger from this article.  Yes, they were fools to do this.  But it isn't a damaging fact, not  in the slightest, and anybody who checks the birth dates across the two articles can reconstruct this for themselves.  Wasted Time R (talk) 03:01, 10 September 2012 (UTC)


 * If your only example of whitewashing is the fact that Mitt and Ann are 2 years apart and that this was allegedly removed to whitewash over "potentially damaging facts" then I think we're sitting pretty good on neutrality. Naapple (Talk) 06:07, 14 September 2012 (UTC)


 * How is having a pro-conservative moderating this page good for the article? That's a fox guarding the hen house. You need a neutral moderator and Arzel is not neutral. Larylich (talk) 04:17, 14 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Nor is Arzel a "moderator" (a position that doesn't exist on Wikipedia) or an administrator. So what's your point, exactly? Fat&#38;Happy (talk) 05:45, 14 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Arzel is a moderator? Why didn't anyone bring that up at our secret Koch Bros IRC channel? Naapple (Talk) 06:07, 14 September 2012 (UTC)


 * I was a moderator/administrator on a now defunct Scam busting website/messageboard, but that is the only moderating I have done. Larylich is new, however, and may not fully understand how WP works.  Arzel (talk) 14:23, 14 September 2012 (UTC)
 * October 12, 2007? There's a difference between new and non-contributing. Fat&#38;Happy (talk) 16:30, 14 September 2012 (UTC)


 * I would not use the term "whitewash". Instead, I will use "photoshop" to denote masking or hiding a blemish. This article has "photoshopped" Mitt Romney!. Offshore bank accounts are not to be left out on purpose. Period. 108.227.82.81 (talk) 00:10, 17 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The subsection on Personal Wealth says, "A portion of Romney's financial assets are held in offshore accounts and investments."  The section on the 2012 campaign says, "Negative ads from both sides dominated the campaign, with Obama's proclaiming that Romney shipped jobs overseas while at Bain Capital and kept money in offshore tax havens and Swiss bank accounts."Anythingyouwant (talk) 00:30, 17 October 2012 (UTC)

Echo chamber
The "Political positions" section has become a sort of echo chamber to repeat position changes of many years ago that were already described in previous sections of this Wikipedia article. Accordingly, I have tweaked the header level so that the "Political positions" section is now a subsection of the 2012 election section. If someone wants to go through the "Political positions" subsection and weed out stuff that's already been covered in previous sections of this Wikipedia article, that would be great.Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:47, 11 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Changing Political Positions from being a top-level section to being a subsection of the 2012 presidential campaign section is not necessary, and is not consistent with standard WP practice for articles on prominent U.S. politicians.
 * There is a subarticle that covers Romney's political positions in more detail, so the change from top-level section to subsection in the main article probably shouldn't warrant much comment; but where is all of this malignant echo chamber activity that you say should be excised? The content of the political positions section of the main article has been pretty stable (and presumably uncontroversial) for the past couple of months, during a period in which there have been many other changes to the article. I am reverting the section header change. Dezastru (talk) 17:56, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
 * This was recently discussed by three editors at the FAC review for this article.  The unanimous consensus there was that a subheader would avoid redundancy.  Unlike many other articles, this one is arranged chronologically, so it makes little sense to repeat a position (or position change) from 1994 or 2005 in the description of current political positions.  This is the exact same rationale for excluding a "Personal life" heading.Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:29, 12 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Again, what specific instances of redundancy have become such an oerwhelming problem that this move is necessary? Dezastru (talk) 18:49, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Changing the header to a subheader would be appropriate regardless of the present content in that subsection, because it clarifies for readers what is there, and steers editors away from including more redundant material in the future.  Regarding material there now that is redundant, I think Wasted Time R described some of it at the FAC page.Anythingyouwant (talk) 19:14, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

I've done the moves that were proposed, so that you can see what it looks like under this design. The things moved out of the "Political positions" subsection are


 * 1) Prior stances on abortion (now merged into existing treatment in 1994, 2002, and 2003-07 sections)
 * 2) Note on change of view on stem cell research (now covered in Note to 2003-07 section, where stem cell is already mentioned as alleged motivator for abortion view change)
 * 3) Position on TARP (now covered in Between section)
 * 4) Position on auto bailout (ditto)
 * 5) Belief in American exceptionalism (done by GabeMc earlier, merged into existing treatment on book in Between section)

What's left in the "Political positions" subsection are current stances on operational issues going forward. All prior positions or positions on non-operational issues (such as TARP and auto bailout, both of which are done and in the past) are handled in the chronological narrative sections where the position was taken or was relevant. Dezastru is correct that this is a departure from how "Political positions" top-level sections are handled in other articles. However, I've never been very satisfied with existing practice, because those sections tend to get very stale. Look at Fred Thompson, for example. It's a bunch of positions from the mid-2000s, written in the present tense. Are any of these still true? Still relevant to his current career as an actor and commercial spokesperson? Assuming Romney loses the election next month (and most likely leaves politics to spend time on boards of directors and with his grandkids), what would a top-level "Political positions" section mean two or four years from now? If it's tied to the campaign, then its scope is clearer (and in fact I would expect it to wither away over time for positions that were not biographically significant). Wasted Time R (talk) 14:24, 13 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Section should be a summary.  Agree that positions on issues that are now moot can be left out of the section which is #1 -#4 on your list.   IMO at least a brief mention of #5 should be in there. North8000 (talk) 14:35, 13 October 2012 (UTC)


 * #5 could be adjusted by changing the text from "In the book, Romney writes of his belief in American exceptionalism" to "Romney is a proponent of American exceptionalism" and changing the cite from the book to something recent, like this WaPo story.  Then it could be relocated back to the beginning of the foreign policy paragraph in "Political positions".  Wasted Time R (talk) 21:48, 13 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Sounds good. North8000 (talk) 21:51, 13 October 2012 (UTC)

I left a message for Avaya1 about this.Anythingyouwant (talk) 01:54, 14 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Apparently, Avaya1 does not want to discuss repetition in the "Political positions" subsection, and instead has again (for the second time) reinserted that repetition which was removed by Wasted Time R and Dezastru. That repetition has also been criticized by another editor at the Featured Article Candidate (FAC) page, and by me.Anythingyouwant (talk) 16:19, 16 October 2012 (UTC)

Abortion
Romney's remarks this week regarding abortion legislation add yet another level of complexity to his public positions on abortion law. Discussion of the new remarks should be moved to the Political positions of Mitt Romney article, where there is more space for detail.

He has consistently said over the past several years that he would be a pro-life president and would appoint pro-life judges, with a goal of overturning Roe v. Wade, a position he has not changed with his new comments. Yesterday it was reported that when asked "Is there any legislation that you plan to actively pursue in regards to women’s issues?" and "Do you intend to pursue any legislation specifically regarding abortion?", he said, "There’s no legislation with regards to abortion that I’m familiar with that would become part of my agenda. One thing I would change, however, which would be done by executive order, not by legislation, is that I would reinstate the Mexico City policy, which is that foreign aid dollars from the United States would not be used to carry out abortion in other countries. It’s long been our practice here that taxpayer dollars are not to be used to fund abortion in this country. President Obama on the 10th day of his administration changed the Mexico City policy to say that abortion services were not prohibited in our foreign aid dollars. I would go back to the original so-called Mexico City policy.”

During the early months of the primary campaign last year, he wrote an op-ed article in which he said, "I will advocate for and support a Pain-Capable Unborn Child Protection Act to protect unborn children who are capable of feeling pain from abortion."

It is misleading to include his comment from yesterday about there being no legislation that he is familiar with that would become part of his agenda without mentioning the position he took in the op-ed piece. Also, the statement "he has said that as president, legislation related to abortion will not be on his agenda," which is a line in the current version of the WP article, is not quite the same as what he said this week. Rather than paraphrasing or rephrasing what he said, it would be best to simply state exactly what he said. Dezastru (talk) 18:23, 10 October 2012 (UTC)


 * This is a case where what they say about primary sources comes into play. Most likely he is neutral or mildly pro-choice and had to say he's pro-life to get nominated. Through that lens it all makes sense. North8000 (talk) 20:12, 10 October 2012 (UTC)


 * However, what one person believes in good-faith is "most likely" is POV original-research conjecture, so I'm not sure that the personal belief stated above can be a factor in this discussion. It also, I believe inadvertently, says the candidate's public statements are deliberately misleading. Whatever one's politics, it's slippery ground to say a candidate is lying. --Tenebrae (talk) 23:05, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Wp:ver applies to the article space, not the talk page. My comment was just to help makes sense out of the situation.  Also to point out  that we should not be trying to derive things from primary sources. North8000 (talk) 11:29, 11 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I agree with Dezastru that this most recent "There’s no legislation with regards to ..." statement should not be included here. Within hours of making it, Romney's camp was already walking it back, see here, and pro-life groups supporting Romney were already dismissing it as unimportant, see here.  Wasted Time R (talk) 01:10, 11 October 2012 (UTC)


 * This is the most current statement by the candidate on a major issue. It should be put in there, attributed.   I.E.  not "his position is...." but "he said....."   [11:23, October 11, 2012‎ North8000]


 * The most current statements by the candidate and his spokesperson on the issue are that (Columbus Dispatch) he wants the Supreme Court to overturn Roe v Wade and return abortion legality decisions within the US to the individual states. He would prefer having a Constitutional amendment ban abortions outright but he recognizes that the country would not support such an amendment. He does plan to issue an executive order that would keep foreign organizations that receive U.S. aid from performing or promoting abortion in foreign countries. And he will prohibit federal funding of Planned Parenthood. Also (LA Times) "Mitt Romney is proudly pro-life, and he will be a pro-life president.... Gov. Romney would of course support legislation aimed at providing greater protections for life." Is there enough space in the article for all of that? Of course there isn't. So what should be included; what is essential? Dezastru (talk) 18:42, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

I don't understand the point in not including the three different positions he's apparently taken on abortion. It gives readers a much more well-rounded view of his position, while only using up a couple of extra sentences, and hardly over-loading the article or content forking. It just makes it a better resource - the majority of readers don't read the political positions article, so a little duplication is fine if it's concise. Avaya1 (talk) 16:56, 15 October 2012 (UTC)


 * What are the three different positions he has taken? How would you word the section? Dezastru (talk) 03:26, 16 October 2012 (UTC)

Here is a proposal for text that incorporates the "there's no legislation" quote that Avaya1 and North8000 want included along with other positions he has announced during the 2012 campaign. It does not reproduce material that was discussed during other periods of his political career, so it should satisfy Anythingyouwant's concern about an "echo chamber." "Romney opposes both same-sex marriage and civil unions,[356] and he has signed a pledge promising to seek passage of an amendment to the U.S. Constitution to define marriage as the union of one man and one woman.[357][358] He opposes access to abortion except in cases of incest, rape, and pregnancies that threaten the lives of the mothers.[359] He has said he would be a “pro-life president” and would support pro-life legislation should it come before him as president,[360] such as a Pain-Capable Unborn Child Protection Act, which would ban abortions after 20 weeks of pregnancy.[359][361] However, he has also said there was no abortion-related legislation with which he was familiar that would become part of his agenda as president.[360] While he would prefer to see passage of a constitutional amendment that would outlaw abortion, he does not believe the public would support such an amendment;[362] as an alternative, he has promised to nominate Supreme Court justices who would help overturn Roe v. Wade, allowing each state to decide on the legality of abortion.[363]" Can we agree on this? Dezastru (talk) 03:40, 16 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The new version is editorialising ("he opposes"), and it uses more or less the same amount of space as the previous one. It's surely better for us just to quote his different statements in a concise and accurate fashion, and leave it be? The current paragraph provides an accurate picture, and it doesn't use up too much space surely? Also there's no reason to mix up abortion and civil unions in the same sentence (or even paragraph), since they're completely separate topics. Avaya1 (talk) 15:57, 16 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Ok I re-edited the paragraphs a bit more, trying to be as concise and accurate as possible. Feel free to comment Avaya1 (talk) 16:37, 16 October 2012 (UTC)


 * "The new version is editorialising ('he opposes')" — the version which Avaya1 has reverted said "He opposes access to abortion except in cases of incest, rape, and pregnancies that threaten the lives of the mothers."
 * The source says, "I am pro-life and believe that abortion should be limited to only instances of rape, incest, or to save the life of the mother." To say "he opposes" is paraphrasing, not editorializing. Editorializing means adding an opinion or interpretation that is not in the source. (And why is there no objection on this basis to saying "Romney opposes both same-sex marriage and civil unions," which is how the next paragraph in Avaya1's version begins?)
 * "It's surely better for us just to quote his different statements" — What about the objection that several editors have signed onto about repeating material that has already been covered in other parts of the article (see Talk section on "Echo Chamber")? The Avaya1 version leaves intact these sentences: "Since 2005, Romney has described himself as 'pro-life', writing: 'I believe that abortion is the wrong choice except in cases of incest, rape, and to save the life of the mother.'[356][357][nb 20] During his campaigns for the governorship and the senate, Romney had said that 'I believe that abortion should be safe and legal in this country.'...." The version I have suggested above avoids this issue.
 * "there's no reason to mix up abortion and civil unions in the same sentence (or even paragraph), since they're completely separate topics" — The reason is that we are trying to avoid having one- or two-sentence paragraphs while still being able to cover a number of political topics in the Political Positions section. Same-sex marriage and abortion are both "social policy" (as opposed to economic/budgetary or foreign policy) matters, the views of social conservatives consistently diverge from those of progressives on these matters, and Romney's public positions on these matters shifted in similar ways (from moderate to conservative) over the course of his political life. Dezastru (talk) 16:58, 16 October 2012 (UTC)

1.He wrote: "I believe that abortion is the wrong choice except in cases of incest, rape, and to save the life of the mother"

There's surely no need to paraphrase when the quote is that short and we can use it.

2. I think there's less objection to the "he opposes civil unions" - because that's the wording of the source. Although if we could get a quote of the same length that might be preferable?

3. I understand the echo chamber concern, and that's why I edited the paragraph to be more concise, which it is now. When we do a WP:SPINOFF, however, the summary section should still accurately summarise the topic, and in this case I don't think three sentences is very much - given that the political positions of Mitt Romney article requires several paragraphs to describe his views on this issue, which are obviously not as straightforward as your version makes out. There's a trade-off between being concise (& not being repetitious etc) and giving the readers (most of whom skim the article) an accurate summary of his positions. If we're so worried about repeating a couple of sentences, then I'd suggest we could also remove them from earlier in the article (so we can accurately describe the positions in the positions section).

4. There's nothing wrong with a paragraph consisting of two long-sentences (especially in a summary section), and there no reason to mix up abortion and civil unions in the same sentence - they are separate enough topics to get their own paragraphs, let alone sentences. Avaya1 (talk) 22:56, 16 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I disagree with several of Avaya1's points, but I will leave it to other editors to address those, if they choose. However, in the process of editing for brevity, Avaya1 has removed the part of the text that indicates that Romney said during the current campaign that he would support pro-life legislation (a bill that would ban abortions after a certain gestational age, for example), yet left Romney's quote that there is no pro-life legislation with which he is familiar that would become part of his agenda. As I noted at the beginning of this Talk section, inclusion of that latter statement without context is misleading. Accordingly, I am adding back Romney's 2011 statement that he would support pro-life legislation, as well as his campaign spokeswoman's Oct 2012 statement that Romney will 'of course support legislation aimed at providing greater protections for life.' Dezastru (talk) 00:04, 17 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The current text has this three-sentence sequence: "Campaigning for the presidency in 2011, he said he would support pro-life legislation should it come before him as president,[364] such as a Pain-Capable Unborn Child Protection Act, which would ban abortions after 20 weeks of pregnancy.[365][366] In October 2012, he said that as president, "There's no legislation with regards to abortion that I'm familiar with that would become part of my agenda."[363] The following day, his campaign spokeswoman reaffirmed that "Gov. Romney would of course support legislation aimed at providing greater protections for life."[364]" A summary, which is what this section most definitely is, does not need to include a misstatement and the correction of a misstatement a day later.  The second and third sentences should be removed, leaving only the first.  Does anyone object to doing so?  Wasted Time R (talk) 11:04, 18 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I would suggest just including what HE said, indicated as being such.  North8000 (talk) 11:24, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Note on effects of Massachusetts health reform law
I would suggest mentioning in the note that most Massachusetts residents approve of Romneycare, and polls have shown the percentage of those who approve has been increasing since the law was passed. A Harvard U. School of Public Health/Boston Globe survey from May 2011 found that 63% approve of the law.

And here is another source to consider for stats on the effects of the law: "Massachusetts' Health Care Plan: 6 Years Later", CBS Evening News with Scott Pelley, June 25, 2012
 * from 2006 - 2012, Massachusetts went from having 90% of its residents insured to 98% (the highest in the nation; the national average is 84% insured)
 * the portion of Massachusetts' state budget devoted to healthcare spending has increased by 20% (from 36% to 43%) from 2006 to 2011
 * Massachusetts was spending more per person per year on health care than any other state by 2012 Dezastru (talk) 20:02, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Would we keep updating that info in years to come, as the approval rate changes? The fact that it was passed into law indicates that there was substantial support for it at the time.Anythingyouwant (talk) 20:37, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * In years to come, it won't matter for a Romney BLP. It's a matter of interest NOW because of the election, obviously. The FAC point was to reflect on the effects of the law; a survey of public opinion on how the law's reforms have been received provides insight into that. (For that matter, a 2009 survey found that 75% of Massachusetts physicians supported continuing the law's policies.)
 * "The fact that it was passed into law indicates that there was substantial support for it at the time" -- well, no. It indicates only that there was substantial support for it in the legislature and the governor's mansion at the time. Not that the public also have approved of it. (Besides, sometimes people initially approve of measures that they later decide were bad ideas, once they have to live with the actual effects of the policies.) Dezastru (talk) 21:07, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, I guess the point is kind of moot anyway, as Collect believes the info about reactions to the law and effects of the law would be better suited to a different Wikipedia article.Anythingyouwant (talk) 21:46, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Unless we can establish a real connection between Massachusetts budgets under governors other than Romney and Romney, it does not belong in Romney's BLP. Simple.  I do not think Wikipedia can claim in any way that Romney exerts any force on later governors and their budgets.  Collect (talk) 22:02, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Unless he wins the presidential election, the only thing Romney will have actually done in his political career is be Governor of Massachusetts. And by far the most significant, long-lasting thing Romney did as governor is get the health care law passed.  Contrary to what Collect says, it's highly relevant to his biography to describe how this law turned out in practice, and contrary to what Dezastru says, it will still be highly relevant after this presidential election is over.  That's what this Note is for (so placed so as to not disrupt the main text chronology).  Collect's position seems to be that we can include in the Note the ways in which the law did meet its goals (near-universal coverage) but that it's some kind of BLP violation to include in the Note the ways it did not meet its goals (reducing ER usage, bending the cost curve).  I don't see the rationale for that kind of distinction.  Wasted Time R (talk) 22:27, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * That's a misreading of the point I was making. I was responding to Anythingyouwant's remark about needing in perpetuity to continually update stats showing the law's effects. After the election, recent changes in the effects of the law won't be of the same interest to readers of the BLP as they are right now. I agree that the effects of the crowning legislative achievement of his governorship, whether one views them as positive or negative, are appropriate for a note in the BLP. Dezastru (talk) 22:35, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Political positions - Order of topics
Why are Romney's positions on abortion and same-sex marriage at the top of the section on his Political Positions? Has he or have reliable sources said that these topics are the defining issues of the campaign? Has he said that his positions on these issues are the defining feature of his candidacy for the presidency? Dezastru (talk) 22:29, 18 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I think social, economic, and foreign policy positions should be grouped as such, but I don't think the order of those groupings matters and I don't care what that order is. Wasted Time R (talk) 22:34, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I don't care much about the order either, as long as social issues are grouped together, judge issues are grouped together, et cetera. If I were writing the section, I'd put economic stuff first, because most everyone agrees that that is the issue most people are concerned about.  And again, I object to repetition in this section of stuff that's already in previous chronological sections of the article; we can allude to or refer back to that older stuff, without regurgitating it into readers' laps.  Is that a sufficiently colorful analogy?Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:42, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I have rearranged the topics. Dezastru (talk) 22:48, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Regarding AYW's objection, there's just one sentence in there now of that ilk, and it concerns Romney's most famous position shift, and as a practical matter I think it's going to be impossible to convince other editors to not mention it in this section due to architectural grounds on how the article is structured. Wasted Time R (talk) 22:52, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Gallup finds that for women in swing states, nearly half say abortion is the most important issue for their gender in this election. Perhaps the ordering should be reconsidered. Dezastru (talk) 03:19, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * What Gallup says swing-state women are interested in is interesting, but maybe it shouldn't dictate structure of this article?Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:29, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I don't think the order matters. The abortion material is easy to spot in this section, it starts off a paragraph and the 'has described himself as "pro-life"' text is visually prominent.  Wasted Time R (talk) 11:48, 20 October 2012 (UTC)

47% quote
The longest Romney quote in this article (by far) is now well over 100 words, and it's a quote that Romney has retracted as "completely wrong". I think paraphrasing it would be fine and preferable.Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:01, 19 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The paraphrase is better than this particular quote, because the quote leaves out that the 47% pay no income tax, which was the starting point for Romney's whole chain of reasoning here. As to whether to use a full quote or a paraphrase, I'm okay with either, and I disagree with Usafa93's characterization of the paraphrase as "an agenda-driven, political interpretation".  I think the paraphrase is accurate.  As for Romney having retracted it as completely wrong, that full retraction only happened after lots of political damage, so I wouldn't give that too much weight.  Wasted Time R (talk) 11:44, 20 October 2012 (UTC)

Bain & Company FDIC FOIA documents
Is it possible to include some of the details from the FDIC FOIA as a primary source, to talk about how Mitt Romney ran Bain & Company? (kinda newbie to wikipedia editing)

http://www.rollingstone.com/politics/pictures/mitt-romneys-federal-bailout-the-documents-20120829/0071439 anonymous (talk) 02:33, 20 October 2012 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.27.196.222 (talk)


 * No, we cannot use primary sources like this, see WP:PRIMARY. The secondary source that introduced this documents was this Rolling Stone piece by Tim Dickinson.  There were two prior Talk discussions about whether this could be used as a source in the article, Talk:Mitt Romney/Archive 21 and Talk:Mitt Romney/Archive 21.  Then there was this Economist story that discussed the Dickinson piece but didn't really come to its own conclusions.  So we decided to wait for further news stories on this.  There is This New York magazine piece, which disputes Dickinson's claim that federal taxpayers were on the hook.  There's this WaPo fact check and this ABC News fact check, which both dispute Biden's claim that the FDIC action cost taxpayers $10 million.  Which is not to say that something could not be added to the article ... let me look a bit more.  Wasted Time R (talk) 12:30, 20 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I looked at the primary source article, and the policy said that it can be used, but that they have to be used to objectively cite information, and not to draw conclusions from the information. can something like the http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Business_career_of_Mitt_Romney be used like the following.


 * In 1990, facing financial collapse, Bain & Company asked Romney to return.[69] Announced as its new CEO in January 1991,[73][74] he drew a symbolic salary of one dollar[69] (remaining managing general partner of Bain Capital during this time). Romney began a traveling campaign to rally employees at all Bain offices globally. Within about a year, he had led Bain & Company through a turnaround and returned the firm to profitability.[59]


 * Romney also negotiated a complex settlement between the Bain partnership and the firm's lenders, including a $10 million reduction in the $38 million Bain owed the Bank of New England,[new cite] which by that time had been seized by the FDIC and placed in Chapter 7 liquidation. Romney was able to negotiate this reduction in the debt amount with the FDIC by threatening to use the remaining cash that Bain had on hand as bonuses for Bain executives. Bain & Company paid Bain Capital a fee of $4 million for Romney's services. To avoid the financial crisis that a buyout would have triggered, the group of founding partners agreed to return about $100M cash and forgive outstanding debt.


 * Although in the role for just one year before returning to Bain Capital, Romney's work had three profound impacts on the firm. First, ownership was officially shifted from the owners to the firm's 70 general partners. Second, transparency in the firm's finances increased dramatically (e.g. partners were able to know each other's salaries). Third, Bill Bain relinquished ownership in the firm that carried his name.
 * This article is already very long. Why do you think those details are important to include here?Anythingyouwant (talk) 14:14, 20 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Nope The facts are not fully and accurately presented in such a proposal -- the use of primary sources here would be a fatal plaw under WP:BLP policy. The sentence that "ownership was transferred from the owners" is weird - what happened is clearly that the company was re-organized as a partnership (the partners are "owners" by the way, in a partnership, pretty much as a tautology) and we have no RS sources stating that anything amiss occurred in that reorganization, which was approved by the government agencies and courts. The accusation that "Romney threatened" is clearly inapt - the loan agreements allowed the payment of bonuses, and even without the bonuses, the FDIC was going to have to reduce its demands. We would need an article or source detailing how much the FDIC routinely reduced amounts before claiming that Romney did anything unusual or "threatening" at all, and also that Romney himself did the negotiating. The documents (primary sources) do not support such an assertion, as far as I can tell. And as for any accusation of "looting" the facts seem clear - the money was retrieved by Romney from Bain shortly before the negotiations - and was not accumulated income for B&Co. The FDCI did not take any disporportionate writedown not taken by other creditors. And, in fact, took a smaller writedown there than it did on other BNE cases. What might work is:
 * During the period from 1991 to early 1993, Romney reorganized Bain & Company by getting Bain and other initial owners who had removed excessive amounts of money from the firm to return a substantial amount, and by persuading creditors, including the FDIC, to settle debts for under 50%. The resulting partnership was no longer owned by Bain Capital, but by the partners at the new company. 
 * Collect (talk) 14:57, 20 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Red information icon with gradient background.svg Not done: please establish a consensus for this alteration before using the template. The template has instructions for reactivating after consensus has been established.  A boat   that can float!   (watch me float!)  15:29, 20 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I think Bain & Company is where most of the historical description should go, but I've inserted some text loosely based upon Collect's proposal into the article: "He got Bain and other initial owners who had removed excessive amounts of money from the firm to return a substantial amount, and persuaded creditors, including the Federal Deposit Insurance Corporation, to accept less than full payment.[87]" I didn't include "for under 50 percent" because I don't see where that comes from, and I left in the prior text's "imposing a new governing structure that excluded Bain and the other founding partners from control" as being sufficient for that point.  Wasted Time R (talk) 16:23, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * In my view, this is just more minutae in a section of the article that is already way too long. It will cause readers' eyes to glaze over, and decrease readership of the rest of the article.  There is also an undue weight problem; this article briefly mentions that he took a salary of one dollar, but the fact is that Romney did something extraordinary here: spending two years of his life working for nothing to help friends.  Bain Capital was reimbursed 4 million for his absence, but he himself took a great risk without direct personal benefit.  Moreover, beyond helping Staples or Brookstone or Seely, the turnaround of Bain & Company was the primary example of his turnaround skills prior to the Olympics.  Do I think all that info should be added?  Absolutely not.  There is a hatnote linking to a consolidated article about his business career, plus links to the companies he worked for, and that is adequate to cover this info plus a ton of info that's been in this section for a while, plus the stuff added today.Anythingyouwant (talk) 16:37, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I disagree that all this is minutae. Romney's business career is what everything else has come from, all the way up until now - how many times in the last debate did he say, "I know what it takes to create jobs"?  As for reader's eyes, I agree that no reader is likely to find all 11,000 words of this article equally interesting; they can skim or skip the sections that interest them less.  But I am sure there are plenty who consider the Business career section among the most important in the whole article.  Finally, as an aside, note that as the WaPo fact check points out, Romney returning to Bain & Co. wasn't pure selfless generosity: "[Romney] certainly had a stake in the outcome, in part because the Bain brand name would be damaged by a bankruptcy and because Bain & Company partners were investors in Bain Capital."  Wasted Time R (talk) 16:53, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Presumably WaPo would have said that Romney was one of the partners who had a substantial (or any) investment in Bain & Company, if WaPo had info to that effect. More generally, when someone reads a biography in a book, one doesn't skip around between chapters. Instead, when the book starts to drag, one grabs another book to read.  That's my experience, anyway.  Cheers.Anythingyouwant (talk) 17:04, 20 October 2012 (UTC).
 * You missed the point on the first item. If Bain & Co. went under, its partners (Mitt was not one of them) might be forced to liquidate their investments in Bain Capital, thereby damaging the prospects for Bain Capital.  Thus Mitt's understandable and legitimate self-interest in righting Bain & Co.  As for the second part, I often skip around in book biographies.  And it's even easier to do in an online resource, which you don't have to buy or take out of the library.  But to each their own.  It would be great to see a use study of how actual readers read WP articles, but I've never seen one.  Wasted Time R (talk) 21:36, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I'm still not clear about whether Bain & Company partners were investors in Bain Capital as individuals (in which case nothing would have to be liquidated if Bain & Company went belly-up), or collectively. The quoted language from WaPo suggests the former, but it's unclear.Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:41, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * According to FOIA records the FDIC got $.30 on a dollar for its debt. (section 1)
 * I dont know you can call it a threat, but he promised that bain & co would pay out bonuses, unless the creditors agreed to their modified repayment terms. User:barberb 11:30, 21 October 2012 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.27.196.222 (talk)
 * The article Business career of Mitt Romney characterizes it as a warning rather than a threat.Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:41, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Warning is a passive term, he refused the repayment terms, and issued bonuses in a company about to go bankrupt, as a form of brinkmanship to force acceptance of debt reduction. The Bain & Company article also lists Bain Capital receiving $4 million in payments for Romney's services, Despite him being paid $1 by Bain & Company User:barberb

The template is supposed to be "followed by a specific description of the request".Anythingyouwant (talk) 21:33, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Personal wealth subsection
This size of this subsection is an undue weight problem, and I will trim.Anythingyouwant (talk) 17:56, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done.Anythingyouwant (talk) 20:43, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * How sure are you that his SEP-IRA is included in the net worth figure?
 * "with an average of about 20 percent" needs to be "with an average effective rate of about 20 percent". That's because this is an average of percentages, not a percentage of sums.
 * Why say "averaged 13.5 percent" when everywhere else you're rounding off to the nearest percent? Wasted Time R (talk) 21:46, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Money in a SEP IRA belongs not to the bank or the government but rather to the person whose SEP IRA it is. Thus, it is a part of net worth.  However, if you have any doubt about it, then feel free to remove mention of the SEP IRA.   What I would object to is giving the impression that he might have a 100 million dollar SEP on top of his net worth, which was incorrect.  More in a minute.Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:00, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * 2)The sentence says: "For the years 1990-2010, their effective federal tax rates were above 13%, with an average of about 20%." That seems pretty clear to me, but I inserted "rate" after "average" for you.Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:17, 20 October 2012 (UTC)B
 * 3) Because I didn't want to get into a fight about whether to round up or round down when the decimal is "5". But I believe the usual practice is to round up in that case. so I will do so.Anythingyouwant (talk) 22:20, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * A lot of people use Rounding, but 13.5 goes to 14 in that case too. Wasted Time R (talk) 23:02, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * As long as the President of the Senate doesn't break the tie.Anythingyouwant (talk) 23:15, 20 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Made a few minor adjustments and added back some information that had been trimmed from the previous version of the section:


 * 1) Many readers may not know what an SEP IRA is (I didn't, at least). Rather than forcing readers to chase Wikilinks, it would be helpful to offer a clue for terms of this sort, so I changed SEP IRA to "retirement account," with a link to the same SEP IRA article as before.
 * 2) What's notable about Romney's IRA is it's huge size — that's the point that articles which discuss it focus on. Not the fact that he has an IRA. So it doesn't make any sense to completely remove any mention of the value of his IRA from the article. I have added that info back.
 * 3) Specific types of investment income that he has received were described in the previous version of the article. That he receives almost all investment income and that that income mainly including capital gains, dividends, and carried interest is highly relevant and should be noted in the article because his tax policy proposals specifically target these kinds of investment income (as opposed to, say, precious metals or real estate) for low rates. A primary reason politicians are expected to disclose their investments is so that possible conflicts of interest, and other motivating factors that might influence policy decisions, can remain transparent. I have added this information back.
 * 4) The previous version noted what taxes he paid and the tax rate for that payment for 2010. It is not sufficient to report his minimum and average taxes for 1990-2010 without providing more specific information about the taxes he has paid in the past few years because the tax code laws changed over that long period and his types of income changed (for example, he received wages, or whatever the term is, as an employee/officer in the 1990s; he has been unemployed in the past 6 years or so). I have added back the tax info for 2010.
 * 5) The Politico article "Mitt Romney releases 2011 tax returns" should not be used as a source for a statement on his minimum and average taxes from 1990-2010 because that article was published in January while the 1990-2010 data was not released until a few weeks ago. I have adjusted the placement of the citation to resolve this issue. Dezastru (talk) 05:27, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I guess that's okay, except listing the specific types of investment income seems confusing. Readers may think to themselves, "Why the heck do I have to digest these details?" We don't draw any link to his tax policy, so how should people make sense of this.  If people want these details, they are in Business career of Mitt Romney.Anythingyouwant (talk) 05:37, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I salute you for all the work you have poured into Business career of Mitt Romney. However, the personal wealth section of the main bio discusses his current personal wealth, whereas most readers would reasonably expect that an article on his business career would discuss events that occurred specifically during his business career, which ended a decade ago. Especially since the infobox link title is 'Business career, 1975-2002.' (Besides, that article gets only a handful of hits, many of which may be from web crawlers or bots. I don't think most people are even aware of its existence.)
 * No salute necessary. It was mostly a copy and paste job..  Putting aside the sub-articles, I see that you're trying to match up stuff in the personal wealth subsection with stuff in the political positions subsection.  We could instead use an identical phrase in both subsections, like "investment income subject to a relatively low tax"  and let readers look in the footnoted sources for details.Anythingyouwant (talk) 06:42, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I've restored the lower bound of the SEP-IRA ($20 million, rounding the same way the upper bound was rounded). Because strictly speaking, I also have a "retirement account worth as much as $100 million".  Wasted Time R (talk) 12:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Edit request on 20 October 2012
Please change the first sentence of the article to "Willard Mitt Romney (born March 12, 1947) is an American businessman and politician, and he is the Republican Party's nominee for President of the United States in the 2012 election." The parallelism in the current version of this sentence is faulty because "is an American the Republican Party's nominee..." is nonsensical.

173.160.120.30 (talk) 23:37, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The article presently says this: "Willard Mitt Romney (born March 12, 1947) is an American businessman, politician, and the Republican Party's nominee for President of the United States in the 2012 election." If I understand the objection, it could be more simply addressed by inserting the word "a" before "politician" to remove any shadow of a problem.  Alternatively, we could remove "politician" as redundant.  My preference would be for the latter, which would kill several bothersome birds with one stone: (1) kills bad parallelism, (2) kills redundancy, (3) kills verbosity, and (4) kills negative connotations.
 * Regarding connotations, consider this dictionary definition: "2. One who seeks personal or partisan gain, often by scheming and maneuvering: 'Mothers may still want their favorite sons to grow up to be President, but . . . they do not want them to become politicians in the process' (John F. Kennedy)." American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language, Fourth Edition copyright ©2000 by Houghton Mifflin Company.
 * Or consider this dictionary definition: "2 ... b : a person primarily interested in political office for selfish or other narrow usually short-sighted reasons". Merriam Webster Dictionary 2011.
 * To top it all off, we would be emulating the lead of the most pertinent featured article (Barack Obama) which does not explicitly refer to him as a "politician".Anythingyouwant (talk) 00:16, 21 October 2012.
 * You never give up, do you? We've beaten this one into the ground on past Talk pages.  Wasted Time R (talk) 00:35, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I've listed five very valid reasons here. Never did that before.  Care to give intelligent replies, seriatim?  Oh, and here's a sixth: the subject does not self-identify as a politician ("America wants a leader not a politician").  Consensus can change, and it was more than a year ago that the dead horse was last beaten.Anythingyouwant (talk) 00:37, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * No, it was beaten 7 months ago in the GA review, if not more recently. Wasted Time R (talk) 01:04, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Nope, the milestones above do not list a GA Review seven months ago. It was a year and seven months ago.Anythingyouwant (talk) 01:38, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Oops, you're right. My bad.  Change the first sentence any way you like.     Wasted Time R (talk) 01:48, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "American" could also be removed as redundant. Romney must be an American if he's been nominated for President of the United States. 173.160.120.30 (talk) 01:09, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, I agree with removing both "American" and "politician", or only the latter. Either way is fine with me IP173.  Good catch on the parallelism, by the way.Anythingyouwant (talk) 01:38, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Done. I left in "American". If the sentence also said "United States of America" then I would have removed "American".Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:14, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * One more thing: the comma after "businessman" should not be there now. 173.160.120.30 (talk) 02:22, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I think the comma is okay there. Isn't it optional?  I removed it to make you happy, though.Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:49, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks. I really don't think the comma should be there because there are only two things in series ("American businessman" and "Republican Party's nominee..."). A comma would only be used if there were more than two things. This rule could be broken if it were absolutely necessary for coherence, but I don't believe it is in this case. 173.160.120.30 (talk) 03:01, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * It is not obvious that if he is a nominee for US president he must be American. TFD (talk) 03:11, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * It's only obvious if your an american User:barberb 11:31, 21 October 2012 (UTC)  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.27.196.222 (talk)

Edit request on 21 October 2012
Please revise the following sentence from the third paragraph: "Hired as the President and CEO of the Salt Lake Organizing Committee for the 2002 Winter Olympics, the resulting visibility enabled Romney to relaunch his political career." The participial phrase in this sentence is a dangling modifier; it was Romney, not the resulting visibility, that was hired as the President and CEO. The sentence could be changed to "Hired as the President and CEO of the Salt Lake Organizing Committee for the 2002 Winter Olympics, Romney was able to relaunch his political career because of the resulting visibility." However, it might be clearer to eliminate the participial phrase entirely and say, "He was able to relaunch his political career as a result of increased visibility as the President and CEO of the Salt Lake Organizing Committee for the 2002 Winter Olympics."

173.160.120.30 (talk) 02:18, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The real problem here is that editors could never agree on what to say about Romney's Olympics stint in the lead.  The relaunch phrase is there as a backhanded way of saying Romney was successful.   Wasted Time R (talk) 02:42, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Again, I see that IP173 does have a good point.  As does WTR.  I will fix both.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:00, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, I fixed it.  Obviously, he was successful in that role.  Visible success enabled him to relaunch his political career, whereas visible failure would have disabled him from relaunching that career.Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:04, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I still think it might be possible to reword this sentence to make it clearer. Here's a suggestion: "Following his success as President and CEO of the Salt Lake Organizing Committee for the 2002 Winter Olympics, Romney's increased visibility enabled him to relaunch his political career." 173.160.120.30 (talk) 03:10, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I'm neutral about this suggestion, IP173.  The edit I made was deliberately minimal, because the lead has already been the subject of endless debate.  But other editors may want to implement your suggestion.  One advantage of the present wording is that it starts out with saying he was hired by the Olympics, which seems like a smoother transition than jumping straight to the period following his Olympic success.Anythingyouwant (talk) 05:46, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Very much agree with AYW on the last point - the wording should reflect the order of events, so head of Olympics first, how he did in that second, consequences for political career third.  Wasted Time R (talk) 12:03, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Experience in college
This article says: "Living in a Belmont, Massachusetts house with Ann and their two children, his social experience in college differed from most of his classmates." However, he did not live in Belmont during college, and a social experience is obviously a very different thing from a student. Perhaps: "Living in a Belmont, Massachusetts house with Ann and their two children, his social experience during graduate school was atypical."Anythingyouwant (talk) 16:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * I think you could just say "... his social experience differed from most of his classmates." Wasted Time R (talk) 16:41, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * That's fine, provided you put an apostrophe at the end of "classmates". Also, can we get rid of the "presumptive nominee" stuff at the end of the lead?  That's an obsolete remnant.Anythingyouwant (talk) 16:51, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * The lead used to say the month he became the presumptive nominee, which is shorthand for how quickly a candidate defeats his or her opposition (in this case, not that quickly). But I can see someone removed the month, so now yes it's pointless.  Wasted Time R (talk) 16:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC).
 * Yes, another editor removed the months on October 13. Romney was only presumptive nominee from May to August, so I'm fine with removal of both the months and "presumptive nominee".  But since I am apparently close to breaking 3rr, I will wait a while until I am clear of the "bright line" 24-hour period, plus the vague additional period that is now explicitly mentioned in the 3rr policy.Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:10, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Yeah, this edit here. I guess months are as bad as the passive voice.  Goes on the list of things I'll look at again once the article is off general sanctions probation ...  Wasted Time R (talk) 19:08, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

47% again
This article says:

In mid-September, a video surfaced of Romney speaking before a group of supporters in which he stated that 47 percent of the nation pays no income tax, are dependent on the federal government, see themselves as victims, and will support President Obama unconditionally. Romney went on to say: "My job is not to worry about those people. I'll never convince them they should take personal responsibility and care for their lives."[351][352] After facing criticism about the tone and accuracy of these comments, he at first characterized them as "inelegantly stated", then a couple of weeks later commented: "I said something that's just completely wrong."[353]

The problem here is that the two sentences we quote, without their context, are somewhat misleading. Romney later acknowledged that what he said was completely wrong, but we need to be careful not to make it sound even more wrong than it actually was. The main issue is this: when he said "My job is not to worry about those people", did he mean that he didn't have to worry about getting their votes, or instead did he mean that he didn't have to worry about those people in any way whatsoever? Let's go to the transcript:

And they will vote for this president no matter what. And so my job is not to worry about those people. I’ll never convince them they should take personal responsibility and care for their lives. What I have to do is convince the five to ten percent in the center that are Independents.

The sentence immediately preceding our quote, as well as the sentence immediately following our quote, both strongly suggest that he only meant he didn't have to worry about those people in the sense of seeking their votes. I'm not saying we necessarily have to expand what we quote, but we ought to do something. Either we should get rid of the quote, or else add the next sentence to it.Anythingyouwant (talk) 02:31, 22 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Everyone agrees that both candidates are looking at 47% or so of the electorate that they'll never convince to vote for them, and that the fight is over the middle and in maximizing turnout of your own 47%.  If that had been all that Romney said, no one would have paid it any attention.  It's all the other stuff he said that started the fire, and "I’ll never convince them they should take personal responsibility and care for their lives" is part of that.  It's saying that your opponents don't just disagree with you, but that they are fundamentally incapable of leading effective lives.  And if he did get elected president, what would be his attitude towards those who didn't vote for him, given this way of looking at them?  I don't think the current text is misleading.  Wasted Time R (talk) 03:23, 22 October 2012 (UTC).
 * Would you object if I add one sentence to the stuff we quote?Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:29, 22 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Change to:
 * In mid-September, a secretly-recorded video surfaced of Romney speaking before a group of supporters discussing his campaign strategy with a group of wealthy donors in which he stated that 47 percent of the nation pays pay no income tax, are dependent on the federal government, see themselves as victims, and will support President Obama unconditionally. Romney went on to say it was not his job to worry about winning over those people : " My job is not to worry about those people. I'll never convince them they should take personal responsibility and care for their lives."[351][352] After facing criticism about the tone and accuracy of these comments, he at first characterized defended them as "inelegantly stated" an inelegant statement of what he felt was an important message that he planned to continue to share, ; then a couple of weeks later he commented: "I said something that's just completely wrong."[353]
 * Dezastru (talk) 03:30, 22 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Dezastru, I think less is more when editing this article.  In other words, the smaller the changes the better.  And all I've asked is that we quote one additional sentence.  Your phrase about an "important message that he planned to continue to share" is not even supported by the cited article by Rutenberg.  But even if it were, can we try to be minimalist here?Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:47, 22 October 2012 (UTC)


 * "Mitt Romney, speaking to reporters Monday evening at a hastily called news conference meant to blunt the impact of a newly released video, said that he chose his critical words about Obama’s supporters poorly but did not back down from their substance. 'It’s not elegantly stated, let me put it that way. I’m speaking off the cuff in response to a question and I’m sure I can state it more clearly and in a more effective way than I did in a setting like that,' he said, before calling on the source of the video to release the full recording. 'But it’s a message which I’m going to carry and continue to carry -- which is, look, the president’s approach is attractive to people who are not paying taxes because frankly my discussion about lowering taxes isn’t as attractive to them, and therefore I’m  not likely to draw them into my campaign as effectively as those who are in the middle,' Romney said."
 * Seema Mehta. "Romney defends 'off the cuff' remarks on Obama backers as victims" Los Angeles Times September 17, 2012 Dezastru (talk) 04:28, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

I've added a footnote to the Wikipedia article, because the existing footnoted sources did not include a verbatim transcript. The transcript I've added is from The Star-Ledger. Evidently the punctuation was wrong in the blockquoted excerpt that I previously provided above (because wherever I got it from neglected to punctuate correctly). Anyway, here's the correct transcript from the Star-Ledger.Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:57, 22 October 2012 (UTC)