Talk:Moana (character)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 14:49, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:49, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Don't use in the infobox per MOS:SMALLFONT.


 * Also don't use  per the rules on the template.
 * I've changed them to plainlists. Is this OK?


 * The use of "set to" in the first paragraph feels repetitive.
 * I've replaced the second instance of "set to" with "will".


 * The first sentence in the second paragraph seems short. Try combining it with the next one.


 * That being said, the first sentence in the last paragraph actually feels a bit long.
 * I've removed some of it.


 * The last two sentences also need to be, either included in the body or sourced.
 * I've removed most of them.

Conception and writing

 * Remove the comma after "Polynesian mythology".


 * "perspective" "perspectives"


 * Add (2014) after What We Do in the Shadows.


 * Is the mention of Waititi's joke necessary?
 * Probably not; removed.


 * "gender-based theme" "gender-based themes"


 * "resume navigation" "resume voyage navigation"

Voice

 * Is there a word missing between "directors hundreds"?
 * Yes, but seeing as there's no source, I've removed it.


 * Quotes should always have references so recite the reference after "it is".


 * "favourite" "favorite" (consistency)


 * Move the reference after "brave" to the end of the sentence.


 * "that s" "that's"


 * Again, each quote needs a reference, so recite certain sources.


 * Add a comma after "directors, animators".


 * Add a comma after "Temura Morrison".


 * In this section, and in others, change "..." to "[...]" (visually appealing)

Personality and design

 * Recite after each quote.


 * "colour" "color" (consistency)


 * There seems to be a lot of trivia in these paragraphs, especially the last one.
 * I've removed the last paragraph and tried to remove unnecessary details.


 * "like Cravalho does" "as Cravalho does"

International versions

 * "under way" "underway"


 * Each performer in the table needs a reference.
 * I've added references to some of the performers in the table but could the film possibly be used as a primary source for the performers? If not, I'll removed the unsourced entries.

Appearances

 * Don't just copy-and-paste summaries from other articles. Try paraphrasing and trimming the length of each summary.
 * I've tried to paraphrase and trim some of it.


 * Wikilink meta.


 * Add year dates after Wreck-It Ralph and Ralph Breaks the Internet.


 * Remove the "Miscellaneous" header, and make "Merchandise" its own section.


 * Add commas after "media franchise" and "Disney Story Central".


 * "Moana also" "Moana has also"

Reception

 * Try removing the use of quotes per, and with the help of, WP:RECEPTION.
 * I've tried to reduce the quotes.


 * "criticise" "criticize" (consistency)


 * "criticising" "criticizing" (consistency)


 * Specify where Moana was nominated for "Best Animated Female".
 * I'm not sure what you mean by this but I've added that the nomination was from the Alliance of Women Film Journalists.


 * Specify which Teen Choice Award Cravalho won.

Progress

 * A drive-by comment regarding criterion 6a: The lead image, File:Moana Disney.webp, needs to be significantly smaller (something like 233 x 429 pixels, in place of its current 868 x 1600 size) to meet the subsidiary non-free content guidelines at WP:IMAGERES. Probably the reason that this has languished for months without the bot doing it automatically is its nonstandard webp format. —David Eppstein (talk) 22:48, 18 March 2021 (UTC)