Talk:Mondo Cane (album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 15:10, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

I'll take this. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:11, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Comments

 * 1
 * "Patton's Ipecac Recordings record label." or "Patton's record label Ipecac Recordings."?
 * All instances are now phrased as "Patton's record label Ipecac Recordings". GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "forty-strong orchestra" or "forty-member orchestra"? Not sure what the correct term is here.
 * I wasn't sure myself; changed to the latter. GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "When assembling the cut for "Deep Down", Patton was able to get in touch with the original vocalist, a woman named Christy, though mutual friend Daniele Luppi, although she declined to take part in the project." - Might need to be split
 * Now two sentences. GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * A little heavy on quoting. This is an issue per WP:QUOTEFARM.
 * I've paraphrased a few quotes to trim this down; could you check to see if the wording still reflects what the quotes had said? GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Yeah, that looks right. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:50, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * I've done a light copyedit, you should double check.
 * Thanks for that. GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)


 * 3
 * Fix the fact tags (all direct quotes, remember?)
 * Got it. GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * As The Vine is being used for an interview, I'll accept it. But when the about page says it "brings you all the latest news and rumours, facts and hard-hitting opinion, wanton gossip and downright lies, from the world of pop culture, music, fashion, art, entertainment and more." I'd be really careful what I use it for.
 * I had a look at the "about us" page, and although the tone of the site seems unprofessional I figured the fact that they had a retained staff would mean an interview would be genuine. I've only taken material from Patton's responses in the interview, leaving aside anything the interviewer himself brought up. GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)


 * 6
 * File:Mike Patton Mondo Cane.jpg could be a bit smaller.
 * The file itself (it seems a bit large I guess), or its use in the article? GRAPPLE   X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * The file. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:46, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Reduced, largest dimension is now 300px. Have added furd but I guess you can use those new buttons yourself if you'd prefer. GRAPPLE   X  16:24, 30 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Spotcheck
 * Based on this revision:


 * FN2
 * A: Fails verification, just says he owned a house there. Living somewhere isn't quite the same thing. Bit about second home also unsupported (FN4 better supports this)
 * B: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * C: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * Have added ref 4 (now ref 2) to this. GRAPPLE   X  16:24, 30 July 2012 (UTC)


 * FN4
 * A: Nitpick: It's a two-disc set, not necessarily an album. Don't know how much of a say Morricone had in it, aside from saying yes.
 * B: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * C: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * D: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * Comment: You know, the fact that these songs range "from Frank Sinatra pop to psychedelic garage rock" could be worth a mention.
 * Have reworded the Crime and Dissonance bit, added an extra ref to support mention of it being a compilation. Added the genre thing too. GRAPPLE   X  16:24, 30 July 2012 (UTC)


 * FN6
 * A: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * B: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * C: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * D: Verified, no close paraphrasing


 * FN13
 * A: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * Comment: This has more on the style of the music, could be useful.
 * Added some of this up in "production" alongside the quote from the Allrovi ref too. If you'd prefer it paraphrased instead, let me know. GRAPPLE   X  16:24, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Further discussion

 * On hold for one week to address the issues. Could use some expansion, but not necessary. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:45, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing this for me; and so quickly! GRAPPLE  X  15:42, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Alright, looks good. Passing. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:14, 30 July 2012 (UTC)