Talk:MoneyBart/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  R uby2010   comment!  01:35, 13 June 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * "by putting her book smarts in statistics and probability into play" -That doesn't quite sound right (mainly the bolded parts). Try rewording it
 * Done.
 * Don't start a sentence with "But". Try "However" instead
 * Can you point out where this is? I can't see it.
 * Lead needs brief summary of ratings and critical reception. Also indicate its first broadcast was in United States.
 * Done.
 * Indicate who Mike Scioscia is in plot section (i.e. coach of ___ team)
 * Done.
 * I noticed other Simpsons GAs use the DVD audio commentaries. Are there any for this episode?
 * The season DVDs usually come eight years after the episode premieres, so not yet. :)
 * 1st paragraph of production section should use "Casting" subheading
 * I tried doing this, but I think it would mix badly with what you mentioned about the writer of this episode.
 * "child employee an animation cel" -What does bolded mean?
 * Done.
 * "then placed in to a cart" -should be "into"
 * Done.
 * Only to wikilink Seoul once in production section
 * Done.
 * Wikilink storyboard
 * Done.
 * First sentence of reception section is dangerously close to being a run-on. I'd say add more punctuation or split into two sentences.
 * Fixed.
 * Websites are not italicized (i.e. MTV, ESPN, TV Fanatic, TV Squad etc)
 * Done.
 * Add who wrote the episode in production section
 * Done.

I'm concerned that the production section only focuses on the opening sequence and not the rest of the episode. Making the episode is something the DVD audio commentaries would discuss.


 * As what I said above, the DVD commentary isn't out there yet, so I don't really know much else about the guest stars and opening sequence. I also can't find much else besides that in the news about the episode either, so that is all I could find about the episode.

I'll place the review on hold for seven days while my comments get addressed. Please reply here when you have finished, as I won't be watching the actual article for edits. Thanks and good luck,  R uby2010   comment!  02:09, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

I fixed everythng except what I mentioned above. Thanks, Guy546 ( Talk ) 21:13, 17 June 2011 (UTC)
 * I made a few ref tweaks for italics formatting etc. Your comment on the DVD release convinced me, so I will pass the article for GA status. Hopefully an enterprising editor will expand it accordingly once the audio commentaries are released. Very nice work, especially in finding such fantastic references. I wish more Wikipedia articles were as reliably sourced.  R uby2010   comment!  04:27, 18 June 2011 (UTC)