Talk:Money Can't Buy You Class/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:42, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Reviewing this for the GAN backlog; the first time I reviewed one of your articles during this period though! --K. Peake 20:42, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * WP:OVERLINK of Luann de Lesseps under songwriter(s)
 * Target single to Single (music) on the first mention instead
 * The sentence about the songwriting should be the second of the lead instead
 * "before a wider one to digital retailers occurred" → "before the label issued a wider one to digital retailers"
 * "the song's sole producer." → "its sole producer."
 * Why no mention of the disco influences?
 * Wouldn't "generally negative" be more appropriate language to describe the reception?
 * Mention the synopsis of the video
 * Remove "English television personality" introduction, as that being in the body is enough
 * ""Money Can't Buy You Class" was also featured in her" → "Another remix was featured in her"
 * "and performed on several occasions on" → "and the original was performed on several occasions for"

Background and release

 * Target second season to The Real Housewives of New York City (season 2)
 * The non-fiction and second season parts are not sourced in the Amazon introduction
 * "and create a song out of it." → "to create "Money Can't Buy You Class" out of it." since the source shows her mentioning the song itself
 * I'd prefer the wording "and create a song, ultimately recording 'Money Can't Buy You Class'" as I feel the other way suggests the final title was pre-established, which the source does not state. Carbrera (talk) 22:42, 13 March 2021 (UTC).


 * "as an exclusive on" → "as a streaming exclusive via" to avoid overusing "on", with the target
 * "on May 25 the next month, when it was released" → "on May 25, being released" since everyone knows May comes directly after April
 * Add a comma before through
 * [8] is useless, as [7] backs up the release in various countries including the US
 * "charity event hosted by" → "charity event, hosted by"
 * Are you sure "success" is the correct term or maybe something like "exposure" would work better, as the song was not really successful?
 * "he receives a" → "he was receiving a"
 * "created the remix for de Lesseps," → "worked on the remix with de Lesseps," per the source
 * The most perfect terrible song part is not sourced; you could add the "it just came out perfect, working on this collab with the one and only Countess was awesome" part though
 * "It was released to digital retailers" → "The remix was released to digital retailers in various countries"

Composition and lyrics

 * Img looks good!
 * ""Money Can't Buy You Class" is a" → "Musically, "Money Can't Buy You Class" is a"
 * Maybe reword the styles to mentioning that she sings through Auto-Tune like the EW ref says?
 * chord progressions → chord progression

Reception

 * "comparing them to tobacco users" → "comparing them to smokers"
 * "she added: "when" → "she added that "when"
 * "computer-generated dream."" → "computer-generated dream"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "called the song fun and indulgent," → "called the song indulgent," since the review itself does not call the song fun

Promotion

 * Wikilink music video on the img text
 * "of the song's lyrics," → "of the song's lyrical content," because otherwise it sounds like you are talking about the entirety of it
 * It seems as if only advice is sourced, not tips
 * "for champagne flutes."" → "for champagne flutes"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * ""visually auto-tuned,"" → ""visually auto-tuned","
 * "dozen male models"." → "dozen male models."" since this is a full sentence quoted
 * Remove the opening sentence of the following para, as that is the entire purpose of this para
 * "as "most captivating"" → "as the "most captivating""

Track listings and formats

 * Remove streaming, as Apple Music from 2010 does not indicate this

Credits and personnel

 * I don't think this section is needed when there's only two personnel and you have sourced them in prose anyway

Release history

 * Target Ultra to Ultra Music
 * Remove streaming from formats for releases two and four per my earlier comment

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, but this article is reasonably well-written. --K. Peake 11:38, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * – thank you for the review, as always. I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Please let me know if there is anything else I can do. Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 22:43, 13 March 2021 (UTC).
 * Mostly looks good, but why is the James Kennedy remix listed as released in 2018 when none of the Apple Music sources lead to the remix or back up the date? --K. Peake 07:05, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
 * - My mistake, I believe it is all fixed now. Carbrera (talk) 15:23, 14 March 2021 (UTC).
 * ✅ now; I forgot to tell you to pipe streaming to Streaming media but fixed this myself! --K. Peake 15:29, 14 March 2021 (UTC)