Talk:Monica (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:24, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

I will review this one today! --K. Peake 09:24, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The recording is dated as sometime between those separate dates, so remove it from the infobox
 * Done.


 * Mention in the first sentence that is from their sixth studio album, The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society (1968).
 * Done.


 * Move the recording info to the writing and serenade sentence, adding after the comma with "the song was recorded..."
 * Done.


 * Swap the lyrics and rhythm sentences for the correct order
 * Done.


 * "Its recording features" → "The song features"
 * Done.


 * "are partly inspired by Dylan Thomas's radio drama" → "were partly inspired by Dylan Thomas's radio drama,"
 * Done.

Background and composition

 * Quote box looks good!
 * Wikilink love song
 * Done.


 * Should you write radio ban or simply ban since BBC Radio follows this part?
 * Changed to simply "ban".


 * Merge the first para with the second one per overly short size
 * Done.


 * "and he later directly referenced" → "with him later directly referencing"
 * I think the original is probably better, as the reword introduces a WP:PLUSING issue, no?


 * Remove comma after 1968 album
 * Done.


 * "by another Under Milk Wood character," → "by fellow Under Milk Wood character"
 * Done.


 * ""morning to moonshine."" → ""morning to moonshine"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Done.


 * Change the beginning of the first sentence to "Musically, "Monica" is a calypso" either using song or track, depending on what is appropriate
 * Done.


 * "serious songwriting, and compares" → "serious songwriting and compares"
 * Done.


 * "thinks its calypso rhythm" → "thinks the calypso rhythm"
 * Done.

Recording and release

 * Remove wikilink on the Kinks
 * Done.


 * Wikilink Bass guitar
 * Done.


 * "for BBC radio on" → "for BBC Radio on"
 * Done.


 * "and kept it on" → "and kept the song on"
 * Done.


 * "he changed its planned sequence" → "he changed the planned sequence"
 * Done.


 * "was an example of" → "is an example of"
 * Done.


 * "take him seriously."" → "take him seriously"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Done.


 * Make the last para into a sub-section, titled Legacy
 * A three sentence section seems like MOS:OVERSECTION to me.


 * "ranking of the album's songs." → "ranking of the songs."
 * Done.


 * "Rogan considers both it" → "Rogan considers both the song"
 * Done.


 * "while Kitts instead counters" → "while Kitts counters" because the counters part is obviously saying he holds a different opinion
 * Done.


 * "through its theme of" → "with the theme of"
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 10:19, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for another snappy review, . Comments and responses above.  Tkbrett  (✉) 12:07, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I understand why you did not implement two of those changes and I did some brief copy editing! --K. Peake 12:22, 29 July 2022 (UTC)