Talk:Monogem/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sebbirrrr (talk · contribs) 17:03, 1 November 2022 (UTC)

Review coming soon.

Lead and infobox

 * This article switches between Hirsh and Monogem when referring to her, please stick with Monogem as she's mononymously known as that
 * "Jennifer Hirsh performing" → "Monogem performing"
 * "singer" → "Singer"
 * "Piano" → "piano"
 * The fact that she plays piano isn't cited anywhere in the body
 * None of the genres are cited in the body
 * In the body, the year she married Jason Melvin is not given
 * The second sentence of the lead should be what she's known for (i.e. taking part on American Idol)
 * Italicize American Idol
 * "which is also her first Spanish language album" → not cited in the body
 * "where she placed in fifteenth place" → "where she placed fifteenth"
 * "In the next two years" → "Two years later"

Early life and education

 * The source doesn't give her full name nor her birth place and home town
 * "She attended college at Berklee College of Music in Boston and graduated" → "She graduated from Berklee College of Music"
 * That's all? Is there no more information on her life before American Idol?

2012–2015: American Idol & Monogem

 * The table needs a table caption
 * The background information on what the Monogem Ring is WP:TOOMUCH
 * "These singles got included" → "They were included"
 * The music video sentence is unsourced

2016–2020: 100% & So Many Ways

 * There's quite some repetition of "single" and "was released"
 * Don't start sentences with And
 * The "Paraíso" information is unsourced
 * "This track is an ode to" → WP:TOOMUCH

2021–present: Gardenia

 * "joined with a" → "accompanied by"
 * "The debut album also included one of the tracks of So Many Ways EP, "Soy Lo Que Soy"." → WP:TOOMUCH
 * Her son's birth date is unsourced
 * "currently working" → WP:CURRENTLY
 * You shouldn't have one-sentence paragraphs

Discography

 * Remove the discography table on the right, it should only be used for separate discography articles
 * All tables need a table caption
 * "MONOGEM" → "Independent"
 * "Format: vinyl, streaming, digital download" → "Format: LP, digital download, streaming"
 * "streaming & digital download" → "Digital download, streaming"
 * Don't bold Monogem
 * "ft." → "featuring"

Music videos

 * This entire section is unsourced
 * The album should only be included if it is a video album

Filmography

 * Needs a table caption
 * For the headings, the year goes first and then the show
 * "Herself/Contestant" → "Herself (contestant)"
 * Don't put Season 11 in quotes

Outcome

 * Unfortunately, I'm going to have to fail this nomination based on prose and sourcing. There is some unsourced content as well as some unreliable sources used in the article to support information. I spotted some prose issues as well, which include repetition and unnecessary information. You did a good job improving this article nonetheless so don't feel discouraged. Sebbirrrr (talk) 18:42, 1 November 2022 (UTC)