Talk:Monster Nation

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Overly detailed and bad grammar
In some parts of the text, I found parts with text along the lines of:

She makes a nurse let her go, a nurse who is then consumed by zombies.

This is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect. This was also found in a part of the text, where it can be read:

They arrive at a hospital, a hospital besieged by zombies.

This is also quite unnecessary and prolonged. If anyone reads the text I deleted in my edit, there is also a correction on an overly detailed description about a zombie which is also incorrect when used in a summarising context. Heroe Of Time (talk) 09:22, 3 February 2020 (UTC)