Talk:Moonshine (Bruno Mars song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 21:52, 26 June 2016 (UTC)


 * What source are you questioning the reliability of? Carbrera (talk) 21:53, 26 June 2016 (UTC)
 * reference number 10. Thanks for picking up this! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:04, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

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 * " Commercially, "Moonshine" charted only in South Korea, where it reached number 17, along with the released of its parent album." --> " Commercially, "Moonshine" charted only in South Korea, where it reached number 17, along with the release of its parent album."

I don't understand what is the change here?
 * Remove the extra 'd' after "release". Carbrera (talk) 02:21, 29 June 2016 (UTC)

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Background and Release
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 * Please rename "Background and release"

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 * ""Moonshine" was released digitally in the United States (US) on 19 November 2012 as part of the iTunes countdown through Atlantic Records as the second promotional single.[5]" --> ""Moonshine" was released digitally as a promotional single in the United States on November 19, 2012 as part of the iTunes countdown through Atlantic Records.[5]"


 * I know you were doubting the reliability of Reference #10, but since it's a blog rather than an actual publication, I'd remove it. Also, you have Reference #9 backing up the statement so I believe that would be just fine. What do you think?


 * Reference nine just says that moonshine will be released in Germany, nothing else. the other is the replacement around the same dates. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 01:01, 29 June 2016 (UTC)

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 * Please link "Billboard" to its respective article

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 * What about: "On the other hand, a writer for Neon Limelight commented that the "Mars croons about escaping to ecstasy in a bottle of his favorite vice". Using the lyrics on the first verse and the chorus, "Oh moonshine, take us to the stars tonight/Take us to that special place/That place we went the last time, the last time", as evidence.[20]" --> "On the other hand, a writer for Neon Limelight commented that the "Mars croons about escaping to ecstasy in a bottle of his favorite vice"; using the lyrics on the first verse and the chorus, "Oh moonshine, take us to the stars tonight/Take us to that special place/That place we went the last time, the last time", as evidence.[20]"

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 * There is an extra space after Los Angeles Times that needs to be removed ✅
 * "desesperation" isn't a word → Can't even copy paste properly anymore. ✅

Critical Reception
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 * Please rename "Critical reception"

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 * "avoid comparisons between the track and Michael Jacksons' work.[16][22][24]" --> "avoid comparisons between the track and Michael Jackson's work.[16][22][24]"
 * Rest is great

Chart performance
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 * ""Moonshine" debuted at number 17 on the "South Korea International Download Chart," " --> I don't think you need quotation marks around this

Track listing
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 * "Digital Download" --> "Digital download"

End of GA Review:
On hold for seven days. Good luck and thanks as always! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 18:38, 28 June 2016 (UTC).
 * I left some questions. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 02:07, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
 * I have addressed everything but reference 9 see above my comment. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:12, 29 June 2016 (UTC)