Talk:Moritz Wagner (basketball)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

Going to review MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
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Youth career

 * Wikilink Regionalliga to List of Regionalligen
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:54, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "scoring six points in 6:15 minutes of play " - 6 minutes and 15 seconds
 * Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:56, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "However, Wagner mostly saw action on the club’s second team and on the under-19 Bundesliga squad that season." - this sentence is uncited and needs a reliable source to verify it
 * Removed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:08, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

College career

 * "The hysteria of March Madness and college basketball got him hooked." - this should be slightly rewritten as "hooked" is unencyclopedic
 * Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:10, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "after watching video of Wagner," - a video
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:14, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "Beilein called former Alba Berlin player Johannes Herber, who had played under Beilein for four years at West Virginia University." - perhaps have Herber's playing position instead of player to avoid reptition of similarly spelt words
 * edited another way.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:30, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * West Virginia University should have its acroynms in parentheses on the first time it is mentioned
 * Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:31, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "in which he tried to sell them on the merits of U.S. college basketball over a European professional contract." - in which he tried to convince them the advantages of American college basketball over a European professional contract.
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:36, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

Freshman season

 * "After blocking 2 shots all season, Wagner posted 4 blocks and had a season-high 8 rebounds" - the numbers in this text need to be spelt out
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:43, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

Sophomore season

 * Wikilink Academic All-American
 * Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:47, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "Wagner's 5 steals" - five
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:49, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "while shooting 39.5% on 3-pointers." - three-pointers
 * Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:56, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

Junior season

 * The second paragraph is a little long. Consider splitting it into two after the mention of Wagner becoming an Academic All-Big Ten honoree.
 * Split into three.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:56, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "Wagner's 21 points and 10 rebounds complemented Charles Matthews 17 points and 12 assists" - Matthews'
 * Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:02, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "Michigan defeat Texas 59–52 on December 12 but Wagner injured his ankle with 7:36 remaining." - Michigan defeated Texas 59–52 on December 12 but Wagner injured his ankle with 7 minutes and 32 seconds remaining.
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:05, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "On January 13, 2018 Wagner scored" - a comma is needed between "2018" and "Wagner"
 * Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:06, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "including 3/4 from three-point range" - a three-point range
 * Apparently there was a syntax issue causing confusion. I have changed 3/4 to 3-for-4 and similar elsewhere.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:14, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Link East Lansing to East Lansing, Michigan
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:22, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Most Valuable Player, Coaches Poll and AP Poll
 * linked.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:25, 11 May 2018 (UTC)

International career

 * "Averaging 16.1 points 'a contest" - per
 * Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:26, 11 May 2018 (UTC)