Talk:Morphia of Melitene/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 16:16, 9 November 2023 (UTC)

I am glad that I have the opportunity to review this nice article about a nearly unknown medieval queen consort. Borsoka (talk) 16:16, 9 November 2023 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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Congratulations for this excellent article. Thank you for completing it. Borsoka (talk) 17:12, 14 November 2023 (UTC)

Background

 * ...the city of Melitene (Malatya) in northern Syria I would mention that the city is now in Turkey.
 * Ah, yes, I knew I was missing something. It is not in MOS but I now remember seeing it done like that in the articles you worked on. But what to do then about Harpoot, Jerusalem, Bethlehem, etc? It might look odd to specify this only for Melitene; or perhaps not because Melitene is the one with which she is identified. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Although ethnically Armenians, the family practised the Greek Orthodox faith. I think the sentence is unclear for many readers who do not know that the Armenians adhere to their own Church.
 * I think so too. Unfortunately, none of these sources say that she would normally have been non-Chalcedonian. I will try to think of a solution. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Why Middle East instead of Near East or Levant?
 * Middle East is the most recognizable term to English speakers. Levant is more common in academia. I do not mind changing to Levant. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Linking of the term "Franks" to the whole article is not helpful. Perhaps section "Crusaders and other Western Europeans as "Franks"" should be linked.
 * Good idea. I have always been uncomfortable linking to that article. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)


 * ... region's indigenous Christian nobility... I would not include the term "nobility" in the link.
 * Misleading indeed. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)


 * ...including the Armenians... As far as I remember the crusader aristocrats only sought marriage alliances with the Armenians because only the lifestyle of the leaders of other native Christian groups did not resemble to western chivalry.
 * I am not sure what you are suggesting. Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Are you sure that intermarriage between Jacobites, Maronites and local Orthodoxes and Franks was common? Borsoka (talk) 02:40, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
 * I see now. Amended. Surtsicna (talk) 08:29, 13 November 2023 (UTC)


 * ...another crusader, Baldwin of Bourcq... Was he a simple crusader?
 * Amended to "crusade leader". Surtsicna (talk) 19:38, 9 November 2023 (UTC)

Marriage

 * ...was probably celebrated in 1100 Could this PoV be attributed to a scholar?
 * Done. Surtsicna (talk) 21:59, 9 November 2023 (UTC)

Queenship

 * His cousin King Baldwin I... According to Alan V. Murray: "Whilst the older scholarship seemed certain that Baldwin II was a nephew or first cousin of Godfrey and Baldwin I, the most recent detailed research has demonstrated that a relationship as close as these must be discounted..."
 * Are you concerned that the unqualified word "cousin" implies "first cousin"? Would you prefer "distant cousin", "relative", or not mentioning the relationship at all? Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes, cousin primarily means "a child of one's uncle or aunt". Borsoka (talk) 02:51, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
 * I changed it to "kinsman". Surtsicna (talk) 23:45, 11 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Baldwin II delayed his coronation for almost a year and a half so that he could be crowned together with his wife. Is this a fact or a scholarly PoV?
 * Funnily enough, Hamilton explicitly calls this a fact: "Matthew of Edessa remarks that Baldwin was devoted to his wife and this is borne out by the fact that he delayed his coronation for almost eighteen months, until Christmas day 1119, so that she could travel to Jersualem and be crowned with him." Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Barber mentions possibilites to explain the delay of Baldwin's coronation although he also says that Baldwin most likely "wanted a joint coronation with his wife" (Barber (2012), pp. 119-120). I think a reference to Matthew of Edessa would be useful, and the article could mention that scholars accept Matthew's explanation. Borsoka (talk) 02:51, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Barber discounts the other reasons though. When he explains the wish for a joint coronation as the "most likely" reason, he cites William of Tyre; Hamilton, who presents it as a fact, cites Fulcher of Chartres. I am not sure which of the chroniclers should be referenced, but it seems that there is a consensus among the scholars. Surtsicna (talk) 23:45, 11 November 2023 (UTC)


 * The Orthodox clergy's status in the kingdom improved during Baldwin II's reign... Could some examples be mentioned?
 * Mentioned and significantly reworded, as I realized that the "King Baldwin" Hamilton refers to here is Baldwin I. Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)


 * ...they may have been privileged because the queen herself was Orthodox Could this PoV be attributed to a scholar?
 * Done. Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Historian Bernard Hamilton speculates... Does he speculate or write/state/propose?
 * He says "perhaps": "Perhaps as a resuit of the oriental environment in which she had grown up the queen took no part in the public life of the kingdom." I do not know how else to describe it, and I believe he himself would say it is a speculation. Surtsicna (talk) 00:34, 10 November 2023 (UTC)

Death and legacy

 * ...it must have been between 1126 and 1128 Why and according to whom?
 * Barber writes that if Morphia died, in 1126 "this is in itself might have been a significant reason for seeking a husband for Melisende". (Barber (2012), p. 394 (note 159))
 * ...and her own sons, Baldwin and Amalric, also married Orthodox women Is this necessary? (Is there a connection between their grandmother's and their wives' Orthodoxy?) Borsoka (talk) 17:17, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
 * I will elaborate on the dating. I've removed the granddaughters-in-law; Hamilton is far too vague for me to be any clearer, and I also do not feel like naming them (which I probably should if I keep the reference to them). Surtsicna (talk) 00:38, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
 * I have expanded the section to discuss the dating of her death. Surtsicna (talk) 10:15, 12 November 2023 (UTC)

Pictures

 * File:Map Crusader states 1102-en.svg is missing a reference to a reliable source.
 * I replaced that one with File:Map County of Edessa 1098-1131-en.svg. Same author, but cited sources. I would prefer to show all the crusader states in the immediate aftermath of the First Crusade in one map but it seems that we have no such reliable map with a reference. On the bright side, this one shows Melitene. Surtsicna (talk) 11:55, 12 November 2023 (UTC)


 * File:609 - Jerusalem - Church of the Virgin.JPG is missing a source and a US copyright tag. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
 * The uploader scanned the photo of a postcard produced by Lehnert & Landrock, who are named in the file information. The eBay seller of the postcard does not have it on their profile anymore, but I included a link to the profile of another seller of the same postcard. Now, I am not sure which of the US PD criteria listed at commons:Template:PD-Egypt/en this file is supposed to fit. I have requested help at the Commons. Surtsicna (talk) 11:55, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Sorted out. Surtsicna (talk) 12:41, 12 November 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * The main text says that she died between 1126 and 1128, the lead and the infobox mentions the years 1126 and 1127.
 * I replaced it all with "c. 1127". That encompasses both 1126 and 1128. Everything else I have tried looks just too cumbersome for an infobox. Surtsicna (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2023 (UTC)


 * She was Armenian, although followed the Greek Orthodox religion. I think this is unclear for our readers.
 * I took out the "although". The peculiarity of it should probably be saved for the main text. Surtsicna (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Her father, Gabriel, ... I think he should be introduced as an Armenian aristocrat/leader/warlord in northern Syria.
 * Done. Surtsicna (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2023 (UTC)


 * ...one of the crusaders... Perhaps crusader leaders?
 * Done. Surtsicna (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2023 (UTC)


 * ...c. 1100... I would say "around" or "in about 1100" in the lead.
 * Done. Surtsicna (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Her religious practices left a lasting mark on the status of Orthodox Christians in the crusader kingdom. In the main text, this is not a fact but a scholarly PoV. Borsoka (talk) 03:18, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Indeed. Changed to reflect this. Surtsicna (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2023 (UTC)