Talk:Morse Building/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Binksternet (talk · contribs) 22:53, 14 October 2020 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Typography: a comma after the first introduction of Farnsworth. A comma needed after "as chief engineer". Remove a comma after Western Union bldg. A space within "Originally,the". Remove a comma after "pressed-metal cornice over the eighth floor". Remove a comma after "American Architect and Building said in January 1879".
 * Grammar: foreclose "upon" should be "on". Add "had" to "and used one of the Observer" to make "and had used one of the Observer".
 * Layout: Template:Portal bar says it should not be placed in the "See also" section. The template can be changed to portal alone (not bar) or moved to the bottom with the footer navboxes.
 * Can we break up a sentence into two? The clause "and started work the following April" could be made a short sentence: "They started work the following April."
 * Wording suggestion: "increasing the floor number of all other stories by one" or "increasing by one the floor number of all other stories"?
 * ✅ I went with the latter.
 * There are contradictory sources for the date of filming Burglar on the Roof. The Library of Congress weighed the evidence and decided it was September 1898. You could add that the film has the burglar opening a rooftop skylight window into Vitagraph's own office (which unfortunately is not shown).
 * I added the contradicting dates to the footnote. However, in my opinion, adding the info about the skylight into the Vitagraph office might be a bit trivial. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * There's a 1902 reference with two hyphens standing in for an en dash or em dash. Can we silently correct this old source? They would need two corrections, the second replacing a hyphen between Nassau and Beekman. Or maybe you would like the article's sentence separation dash style to be unspaced em dash... A bunch of other old sources have two hyphens for separation; all of these should be silently replaced with spaced en dash or unspaced em dash (your choice) to make the whole article carry only one such style, per MOS:CONFORM.
 * ✅ I have changed all to em dashes. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The meaning is unclear at "to plans by John J. Tudda". Perhaps it should be "following plans by John J. Tudda" or similar.
 * The lead section was confusing to me, coming at it from zero familiarity. There was some shock at the second paragraph when the building's height changed drastically downward and the number of floors dropped. Can we make it more clear to the reader that the first version of the building was smaller?
 * ✅ I've rearranged it chronologically. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Photos are public domain, references are good, copyright violation is not present.
 * Overall, the article is very close to GA. A few things need to be addressed. Binksternet (talk) 01:07, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I've addressed all these issues now. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * GA listed. Nice work! Binksternet (talk) 04:38, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * There are contradictory sources for the date of filming Burglar on the Roof. The Library of Congress weighed the evidence and decided it was September 1898. You could add that the film has the burglar opening a rooftop skylight window into Vitagraph's own office (which unfortunately is not shown).
 * I added the contradicting dates to the footnote. However, in my opinion, adding the info about the skylight into the Vitagraph office might be a bit trivial. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * There's a 1902 reference with two hyphens standing in for an en dash or em dash. Can we silently correct this old source? They would need two corrections, the second replacing a hyphen between Nassau and Beekman. Or maybe you would like the article's sentence separation dash style to be unspaced em dash... A bunch of other old sources have two hyphens for separation; all of these should be silently replaced with spaced en dash or unspaced em dash (your choice) to make the whole article carry only one such style, per MOS:CONFORM.
 * ✅ I have changed all to em dashes. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The meaning is unclear at "to plans by John J. Tudda". Perhaps it should be "following plans by John J. Tudda" or similar.
 * The lead section was confusing to me, coming at it from zero familiarity. There was some shock at the second paragraph when the building's height changed drastically downward and the number of floors dropped. Can we make it more clear to the reader that the first version of the building was smaller?
 * ✅ I've rearranged it chronologically. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Photos are public domain, references are good, copyright violation is not present.
 * Overall, the article is very close to GA. A few things need to be addressed. Binksternet (talk) 01:07, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I've addressed all these issues now. epicgenius (talk) 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * GA listed. Nice work! Binksternet (talk) 04:38, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * GA listed. Nice work! Binksternet (talk) 04:38, 15 October 2020 (UTC)