Talk:Moses H. Cone/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:55, 15 July 2021 (UTC)

Hope to get to this over the weekend. This'll be GA review #300 for me, I think, so a bit of a milestone. Hog Farm Talk 19:55, 15 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I have a watch on it and will start on the issues when I see them. I am aiming for 200 GAs by Christmas myself. I have 17 GAs so far this month and a grand total of 175 GAs as the green icons indicate on top of my User Page. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:27, 15 July 2021 (UTC).


 * I think it's nice to have some genealogical material here, but recommend trimming that first paragraph a little bit


 * "He was the eldest of thirteen children of the Jewish-German immigrants. His parents, Herman Cone and Helen (Guggenheimer} Cone, emigrated from Germany to the United States in the 1840s. Moses' father changed his last name from Kahn to "Cone" almost immediately upon arrival in the United States to become more American" - a lot of this is in the previous section; I think the transition can be made a little smoother to avoid duplicating content


 * "In the 1880s the Cones then moved to Eutaw Place in Baltimore," - link Eutaw Place


 * "Eventually they took in another forty mills over time and completely controlled the market. Eventually United States antitrust laws broke up the agreements the Cones had with the various mills to control the market" - recommend rephrasing if possible to avoid having two straight sentences starting with "eventually"


 * "He built additional mills throughout the Greensboro area and the deep South and soon became" - the "deep" in Deep South should be capitalized


 * For the newspapers.com cites, add the newspaper who published the articles as the publisher


 * For " "Moses H. Cone Memorial Park history information". " add the publisher


 * File:Moses H Cone.jpg is licensed as a photograph, but it looks like a painting


 * Good work here, placing on hold. Hog Farm Talk 02:31, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. Will start on issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:59, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:53, 17 July 2021 (UTC)