Talk:Moshassuck Valley Railroad/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 07:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)

Dibs. &spades;PMC&spades; (talk) 07:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)

Minimal commentary this time around. It's a short one so didn't have too much to gripe about :) Sources are fine, images are either PD-old or user-generated. &spades;PMC&spades; (talk) 01:58, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Lead
 * Embiggen lead please
 * Embiggened. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Lead contains info about the subject that isn't in the article (shortline status, )
 * Shortline status, while I thought was obvious from the line being 2 miles long, is now explicitly stated in the body. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Lead says it was built from 1876 to 1877, but the body says a train was first run in 1876 - seems confusing to me
 * These actually don't contradict each other. A locomotive first ran on the line in December 1876, but it didn't open for service until January 1877. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:06, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * History
 * "W. F. and Frederick Sayles" reads like a couple of dudes' names, but later context makes it clear it's a company. Can you clarify in-text earlier? (maybe "by the W. F. and Frederick Sayles company, founded by Frank and Frederick Sayles"?)
 * Will look into this. The text there was added by an IP following a drive-by edit by another editor disputing the company's origin. It's late on the east coast so I will address this tomorrow. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:06, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Per this source, the brothers were the founders of the railroad. I have rewritten the founding section accordingly. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 16:22, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "Passenger service continued until 1921, when it was discontinued" - could be simplified to "Passenger service was discontinued in 1921."
 * I've modified this to "Passenger service continued until 1921, when it was ended following increased competition from streetcars.". Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * This is me being biased against short subsections but I don't think "Expansion attempt" needs its own sub-subheading. Won't die on the hill if you insist on keeping it but I need to say it :P
 * I think the subsection is necessary. Otherwise, the history section is out of chronological order and may confuse the reader. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 16:22, 4 September 2022 (UTC)