Talk:Mount Aniakchak/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 15:32, 9 March 2024 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly. Ealdgyth (talk) 15:32, 9 March 2024 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I randomly googled three phrases and only turned up Wikipedia mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no sign of copyright violation.
 * Spotchecks:
 * "Aniakchak is about 670 kilometres (420 mi) southwest from Anchorage, Alaska, within the Aniakchak National Monument and Preserve" is sourced to this source p. 2 which supports the information
 * "but if such a caldera formed, its explosive activity left no traces" is sourced to the above source p. 52 which supports the information
 * "A more than 25 kilometres (16 mi) high eruption column rose over the volcano" is sourced to this source p. 54 which supports the information.
 * General:
 * Some duplicate links need to be checked for - examples include the "Tertiary" links in the first and second paragraphs of Geology, "fractional crystalization" linked twice in the last paragraph of composition, "lichens" twice in the second paragraph of Climate, etc.
 * Nag again about "metres" ... American English, not British. Also look for "colour", "neighbour"
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Lead:
 * "1628 ± 1 BCE" what does the "±" mean here for the non-specialist?
 * "Give or take a year", essentially. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "in Bristol Bay." is this close or far from the location of the volcano?
 * Pretty close. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Geography:
 * "volcanic caves" link?
 * Doesn't seem like there is one, except for lava tube and I am not sure if it's applicable there. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Geology:
 * "during the Tertiary" Tertiary what? Era? Epoch? Period?
 * Period; added. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "Volcanoes close to Aniakchak include Yantarni to the east, Black Peak and Veniaminof to the southwest; Black Peak has emplaced ash layers on Aniakchak." the second part feels very tacked on - suggest "Volcanoes close to Aniakchak include Yantarni to the east, Veniaminof and Black Peak to the southwest;[35] the later is close enough to have emplaced ash layers on Aniakchak." maybe?
 * Mmm, doesn't seem like proximity is important for the source, though. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "the formation of the caldera may be facilitated by a tectonic discontinuity" "the caldera" is this just the specific calder at Aniakchak or all the caldera of the Arc?
 * Only this caldera, specified. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Composition:
 * "ascent into the crust" I believe you mean "ascend"?
 * Yes, fixed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "Part of the mush region was evacuated during the Aniakchak II eruption." can we use another word besides "evacuated" as there could be confusion between the differing definitions of evacuate - to excavate or to have people leave an area.
 * Emptied works. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Climate:
 * "Kodiak bears, foxes and caribou populate the region." I think this would be better in the last paragraph of this section - it feels very tacked on in the paragraph on temperatures/climate
 * Moved it down. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Aniakchak II eruption:
 * "mostly unwelded" link for this as the usual meaning of "welded" is the joining of two metallic items with heat ..
 * It means the same in volcanology, but with pebbles and individual rocks. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "where they ponded against" link for "ponded"
 * I am pretty sure that ponding is a normal English term? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Impacts:
 * "Vegetation and human populations on the Alaska Peninsula were devastated by the eruption" but animal populations weren't affected?
 * Much less research was done on the impact on animal populations. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * "but they may not have time to escape to safe distance" this reads awkwardly but I'm not sure of a better way to say this...
 * Let's see if a "had" makes it better. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Intracaldera lake:
 * "forming a scabland, and deposited gravel bars," links for scabland and gravel bars?
 * Did for the first, my impression is that a bar made out of gravel, akin to sandbar, was normal English. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * 1931 eruption:
 * "Several different sources of magma contributed to this eruption, and a few centuries before new basaltic melts had entered the system." I'm not sure what the "and a few centuries before.." phrase means .. is there a word missing?
 * It means that a number of magmas took part, including one that had entered the system a little before. I dunno how to formulate this? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * As usual, I've done some light copyediting - please check to make sure I didn't break anything or change the meaning.
 * Sorry for the delay - it's been a wild month (as usual) and I just didn't find the time I thought I would.
 * I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth (talk) 15:32, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Changes look good, passing this now. Ealdgyth (talk) 14:44, 31 March 2024 (UTC)
 * 1931 eruption:
 * "Several different sources of magma contributed to this eruption, and a few centuries before new basaltic melts had entered the system." I'm not sure what the "and a few centuries before.." phrase means .. is there a word missing?
 * It means that a number of magmas took part, including one that had entered the system a little before. I dunno how to formulate this? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:56, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * As usual, I've done some light copyediting - please check to make sure I didn't break anything or change the meaning.
 * Sorry for the delay - it's been a wild month (as usual) and I just didn't find the time I thought I would.
 * I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth (talk) 15:32, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Changes look good, passing this now. Ealdgyth (talk) 14:44, 31 March 2024 (UTC)