Talk:Movitz blåste en konsert/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:43, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

New one for you! --K. Peake 09:43, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * Thanks!


 * The subtitle info is not sourced anywhere
 * Reffed.
 * Regarding this and the other instance of a ref in the lead, you should write out and source this info in the body, but keep the prose only here; no refs are appropriate. --K. Peake 20:36, 7 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Moved.
 * The writing sentence should be the third of the first para instead
 * Moved.
 * Add a comma after 1718 opera
 * Added.
 * The ball is not sourced as being in the evening
 * Reffed.
 * Shouldn't King be capitalised like in the body?
 * Done.
 * "The song strikes a refined tone," → "It strikes a refined tone,"
 * I think the noun is better at the start of the paragraph.
 * Using the song to start two consecutive sentences is a bad idea, but this sentence had been moved around to create this context so I copyedited for you. --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Context

 * Pipe Swedish ballad tradition to Scandinavian ballad tradition
 * Have made it point to the new Sweden section of that article.
 * Second para looks good!
 * Thanks!

Music

 * Add relevant text to the audio sample
 * Added.
 * "consisting of twelve lines." → "consisting of 12 lines." per MOS:NUM
 * Done.
 * Write epistle No. 12 instead
 * Done.

Lyrics

 * Why is there spaces before lines for Paul Britten Austin's verse?
 * You mean the indentations of some lines? That's Paul Britten Austin's formatting, indicating sections of the verse.
 * Oh, thank you for explaining. --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Reception and legacy

 * Pipe Lake Mälaren to Mälaren, Djurgården Park to Djurgården and Bensvarvars to Ge rum i Bröllopsgåln din hund! on the img text
 * Done.
 * Pipe to Air (music) should solely be on "air"
 * Done.
 * "before the singing and" → "After this, the singing and"
 * Done.
 * [13] should be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Done.
 * I don't think "lending an air" is very appropriate; try something more encyclopedic
 * Edited.
 * That looks a lot smoother! --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; I left a comment above where you did not work on the lead properly. --K. Peake 20:36, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
 * All done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:03, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ time, once again I am very satisfied with your quick responses! --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)