Talk:Mr. Monk Gets Jury Duty/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:35, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

I can take a look at this! —  Ghost River  14:35, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * The second sentence seems a little sparse; I'd say the series follows the "adventures" or "antics" of Monk and Teeger
 * I think it was okay, but added "the adventures of" for clarity
 * "With influences from the film 12 Angry Men, the episode was written by Peter Wolk." "Peter Wolk wrote the episode, which drew influences from the film 12 Angry Men."
 * Done.
 * Link Los Angeles
 * Per MOS:OVERLINK, it's not recommended to link major geographic features.

Plot

 * When you remove the parenthetical actor names, the plot clocks in at 460 words, just above the threshold set at MOS:TVPLOT, and it will need to be trimmed accordingly.
 * Wow, you made me realize how outdated I am. Because my main edits on Monk episodes were in 2015–16; and at that time it could between 200 and 500 words. I'll rewrite it.
 * Link drug lord and extradition
 * Common words, so not really necessary per MOS:OVERLINK.
 * Reintroduce Monk as a PI
 * Ok.
 * "who has been accused of stabbing"
 * Done.

Production

 * "fourth directing credit in the series"
 * Added.
 * "after writing" "following"
 * Changed.
 * Link defense attorney
 * Common word.
 * "had also written for"
 * Ok.
 * "coutroom-themed" "courtroom-themed"
 * Fixed.
 * Pipe "Chinatown" to Chinatown, San Francisco
 * Linked.
 * How was the scene rewritten?
 * It's not clear in the source. To avoid original research, I've removed it and added a simpler information.
 * "Juror No. 4 Mr. Cobb" "the juror "Mr. Cobb""
 * Ok
 * "(Juror No. 3 in the film)" "who portrayed Juror No. 3 in the film"
 * Reworded.
 * Pipe "panning shot" to Panning (camera)
 * Ok. Worth it.

Reception

 * The Futon Critic source also mentions that it was the second-highest-viewed cable series of the week, behind the second episode of The Sopranos
 * That's indeed an interesting information. Added.
 * Without access to the source, the Green Bay Press Gazette fan poll seems trivial; Green Bay is neither terribly large, nor is it important to the TV industry; a quiz of Green Bay citizens who happen to be Monk fans is different from a national poll conducted in Green Bay
 * This article is available at ProQuest here in The Wikipedia Library Bundle. You should have access to it. Regarding its importance, I don't really completely disagree with you, although I think it has some relevance. In fact, it's pretty clear that it's just about a limited poll; it would be grosse if, for example, it read like "some fans elected it..." but without any context.
 * "A TV Guide's reviewer" "A reviewer for TV Guide"
 * shows the "obvious" care for the last four episodes of the season received Awkwardly phrased; I think the "for" in "care for the" is out of place
 * Indeed. Removed the "the"

General comments

 * One image, relevant and in the public domain
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Copyvio detector shows one mirror site, nothing of concern

That's all I've got! TV episodes are always nice because they're such short articles. Putting on hold now; ping me once you're finished, or if you have any questions! —  Ghost River  14:56, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Mostly done. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 03:38, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
 * While I disagree with some of your opinions on common terms (particularly extradition), it's ultimately a minor point. With regards to the book source, I used "Belgrader" as a search term and was able to verify that he was listed as the director of the other three episodes mentioned in the article. One last prose/grammar issue: 50,000 fans of Green Bay can be read as "fans of the city of Green Bay"; should be reworded as 50,000 Monk fans from Green Bay, Wisconsin. —  Ghost River  14:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Reworded the suggested phrase. Reduced the plot. I still can't search inside the book; if you are willing to access it and do the proper changes, I'll be grateful. Thanks, Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:30, 3 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Changed that one ref and caught a typo that I must have missed earlier ("12nd" "12th"). Otherwise, looks good to go! —  Ghost  River  14:49, 3 October 2021 (UTC)