Talk:Mrs. California/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 18:27, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

Will review this one soon.  Ruby  2010/  2013  18:27, 6 January 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * You use "episode" too much in the first lead paragraph; change it up
 * ""Mrs. California" received a range of reviews from critics from positive to mixed responses and was ranked the fifth best episode of the season, so far. " Seems like sloppy writing (from...from), and you should indicate who ranked it the 5th best episode
 * Wikilink bench-press
 * ""Mrs California" features a guest appearance from Maura Tierney who is set to play Robert California's wife, Susan California.[4]" "Is set" is past tense; she already guest starred
 * I prefer to split the production section into 3 paragraphs for ease of reading (writing, guest stars, and web clips)
 * Reviews: ""Mrs. California" received a range of reviews from critics from positive to mixed responses." Sloppy writing again
 * "Despite this he complimented the cold open" Why "despite this"? (Note I haven't seen the episode). You could actually delete this sentence, as you already mention multiple reviewers liked the cold open
 * IMDb is not a reliable source
 * Ref 16: Unitalicise TV by the Numbers, Hollywood.com,
 * Italicise  New York and TV Guide
 * It's The Hollywood Reporter
 * Any cultural refs?

Address above comments and respond here when you have finished. Thanks,  Ruby  2010/  2013  22:21, 6 January 2012 (UTC)
 * OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues. In addition, I added a completely new section about Cultural References. You might check that out!--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:32, 7 January 2012 (UTC)
 * To maintain consistency with other Office episodes, you can just have one solid production section (Above, I only meant make three separate paragraphs, not sub-sections). Otherwise the article looks good. Pass for GA. Nice work,  Ruby  2010/  2013  03:21, 7 January 2012 (UTC)